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作文求改!!`谢谢`处女作

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楼主
发表于 2007-6-18 05:44:00 | 只看该作者

作文求改!!`谢谢`处女作

                                                                                                 Curiosity finder missing

  Kino, finder of the greatest pearl over the world, missed with his family yesterday in La Paz. Their house has burned and canoe was broken. People who lives chose them, don’t know where they are.

 

  This family got a pearl from sea what is so big and so shining, people believe that pearl is the largest one over the world, and it is valuable. “They were trying to seal the pearl, but I didn’t know why Kino was emerged with buyers in the town” said a neighbor. Kino’s brother, Juan Tomas, said “Kino wanted to escape the evil that pearl brought, perhaps he found another boat and went out onto the sea”

 

  Some people believe they will die and sink into the sea. Some people assert they are going to find other buyers in the capital city. Also, some people trust that the family disappear cause the evil pearl’s magic.

明天小测`是新闻报道`要求简单精炼`写作时间只有10分钟`麻烦各位GGJJ 帮我改一下上着篇`明天急用`

第二篇是关于一个角色的`

Character Sketch

  The doctor is a fat, wealth, middle age man, who lives in a lavish house in the La Paz town. He is full of avarice, deception and greed. He is of the race that has oppressed Kino’s people of generations. He enjoys dreaming his younger in Paris and he resents the poverty people of the village. He refuses to treat Indians unless they can prove they can pay for his treatment first. So, he refused to treat Kino’s son, Coyotito before Kino finds a great pearl. When he comes to treat Coyotito, Kino believes that he intentionally poisons his son, because he knows the worth that pearl will bring. Then, the doctor offers to store the pearl in his sate way, but Kino refuse him, the doctor uses the opportunity to discover where the pearl is hidden. So, such as those things I discovered about, the doctor is a devil.  


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沙发
 楼主| 发表于 2007-6-18 07:16:00 | 只看该作者

`怎么没人都`10个人看过了给点意见啊`我急哦`大家给点意见行不`谢谢哦````另外还有一篇`等下我再传上来`明天考试用`10万火急`!!``

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