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zdlukeluck

庄子就算了，没有名气

realclassica

以下是引用zdlukeluck在2007-5-17 8:22:00的发言：

For instance(To give a demonstration), the mother of Forrest Gump is(was) such a good teacher that her son has(had) got great success even though anyone around the world prejudiced him. Since little Forrest was young, his mother has told him that no matter what others think of you, you must always(invariably) have confidence on your own. Holding such a belief which mother told, Forrest live(lived) a happy life under such a world.(阿甘的例子似乎不太有说服力,而且给人的感觉是你重复前面的东西,而且你又忘记了和teacher扯上联系.)

楼主在引用Forrest的Mother的话时，似乎人称有点混乱，既然你并没有直接引用Mother的话，而是以转述的方式，那么第四行的You是否应该换成Him,同时第五行的You是否应该换成HIs呢？

我完全是从汉语的语法来理解的，不知道英汉语法能否通用。

jessiebetty

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jessiebetty

movies and telephones make more negative effects than positive effects on young people's behavior?

       People who live in modern world often face such a problem that whether parents should allow children to watch movies or should allow children to contact with telephones too early.

This may arouse the problem that whether movies and telephones bring us positive effects or negative ones. Entertainment companies such as Sony will definitely emphasize the advantages of the mass media. Though some cautious parents quite oppose this kind of advertisements, I would choose to agree with the former statement, which confirm to the intents of the society.

       It is the movie that provides the common topics which can be shared by our young people. I could still remember that after the introduction of the movie "Titanic", we friends often talk together about this magic movie. So deeply moved by the deep love between Rose and Jack, we come to further exchange our idea on the topic of love. It is not exaggerating that we develop several topics around the movie, including the clothes, appearance and costumes. Such talk really make us involve into a deep think about our future  love and also touch the regions of my mates' heart, thus making us more close.

       Furthermore, as a famous director says, a movie is just a picture of life, which combines both the sunshine and dark sides of the real world. That kind of view is deeply illustrated in the movie "the Lord of Rings". With the reward of several Oscars, the Lord of Rings converts the conflicts between people in modern industrialized society into a epics that an alliance of justice people gather together to battle the evil. Staying in such a world that includes self-fishiness and generosity, goodwill and evil, friendship and betrayal, we come to realize the true nature of life but also the real warmth from the people around us. This comes to a striking conclusion that the movie can really teach us a lot about our life.

       Though some movies can make us exposed to some violent elements, which may lure the young people to participate into similar behaviors, we can conduct several measurements to direct the movies and confine or edit the sequences. All above come to the very points that

movie really bring a big change to our daily life.

zdlukeluck

把你最新的essay发表出来，不要把它留在第13楼，不然别人看不见

sunnyever

以下是引用zdlukeluck在2007-5-17 8:22:00的发言：

用词现在有三个主要的毛病:一是重复太多,不符合ETS的词汇多样性的要求;二是你几乎不用副词,这是一个很大的毛病,因为你如果不用副词的,很多地方的表达就会不那么的生动,建议你在用形容词和动词时想想可以不可以用一个形容词来是你的表达更生动.比如”不动”的英文是immobile,那么一动不动呢?就是perfectly immobile. 或者”小”这个概念是small, 如果你写pathetically small就是小的可怜,同时也有了主观的感情色彩;三是插入语的使用,比如to a certain extent, to some degree, of course, I believe这类的插入语要多用,这样可以舒缓表达的语气,同时使句子看起来更舒服.

唉～～ 我也这毛病！

有时倒想说用"-"组合一个什么词，可又怕搞得中国人看不懂，外国人也看不明白，超糗！