一篇作文，大家给点建议，我觉得快写进死胡同了

zhangxiao07

What is the very important skill a person should learn in order to be successful in the world today? Chose one skill and use specific reasons and examples to support your points.

“Self-education is the foundation of success.”believed by Confucius, a great educator and philosopher in anciant China. Now, with the rapid development of the technology, the skill of self-education is playing a significant role for people to get success. And innumerable personalities have given us persuasive instances.

Abraham Lincoln, one of the greatest presidents in the U.S. history, is an illustrative example. Lincoln grew up in a destitute family. His father and step-mother were absorbed in daily toils, and couldn’t teach him anything except for clearing forests. However, young Lincoln seemed to show a natural desire in books and knowledge. Since the book was scarce in the frontier, Lincoln borrowed books from various resources and read them by the light of the fire in his father’s cabin. Lincoln’s extraordinary self-education prepared him a successful political career in the future.

Aside from Lincoln, Chalse Dickens, the greatest English novelist in the 19^th century, also gives us a persuative example. Chalse Dickens grew up in a destitute family just like Lincoln, and had to drop out of school at the age of 12. With the education he received from school and his parents were non-exsistence, Chalse show an extraordinary ability of self-education. While working as a errant boy in a legal office, Chalse taught himself legal shorthand, and got b better job as a court and parliament reporter as a result. These jobs gave Chalse a chance to observe a wide range of people, which laid the foundation in his future work.

Since numerous personalities’s experience has showed the importance of self-education, I totally believed that the self-education is the very skill which would lead to success. Just as the president of Heibei University said,”Not only is self-educating a necessary ability for the contemperary students to master, it is also a sword for you to face the challenging and constantly changing society.

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ninanina

one thing i'd like to mention to u is....on the examination day I don't think u will have enough time searching for so many real examples and list them one by one

I beleive I should strengthen myself on supporting my point with examples - real examples from history or social life

but obviously u r weak in explaining ur point - explaining, to stretch the single point to break it down to sentences and endow it with a flow

for example, the most important skill an individual should have for success, u choose self-education, that's fine

the problem is u didn't tell why self-education is more important than any other skill, at least u didn't clearly tell the rater in the first paragraph, which i personally feel will affect ur rating