写了第一篇作文

irenetoefl

刚才写了第一篇作文，题目是OG topic list的第一个，说去大学读书是为了什么，写了405个单词，用了40分钟，由于这个题目尚且感觉比较熟悉，所以写起来基本没有什么卡的，但是对于自己写出来的文章无法判断，不知道可以得几分，不知道有没有达人可以告知一个简便的衡量作文的方法，或者可以贴上来大家帮忙看下？

觉得要在30分钟内写出起码300个字真是有点难度的，平时我写作文要写很久，而且有个很不好的习惯，边写边情不自禁地要回顾前面的，这样又浪费了许多时间，8古相信还有几个月的时间，应该会适应托福写作的形式。恩~~

charmant

贴啊，不贴怎么看啊

irenetoefl

Mar. 15

14：05

Topic 1: Why do you think people attend college or university?

 

After taking the entrance examination, many lucky and aspiring middle school graduates are admitted to colleges or universities, beginning another 3 or 4 years’ campus life. When asked why they try to attend university, diverse answers may arise: getting a diploma for the future career, having fun in school, making friends with more talented people and etc. However, as far as I am concerned, college or university serves as a bridge between campus and society, that is, college life prepares students for the ultimate social life.

First, as we all know, most colleges or universities are boarding school, and students must live in dorms. Away from the parents’ protective shelter, youngsters learn the necessary skills of independent life. They have to handle all sorts of things on their own, facing some trouble or challenges which they never encounter in their previous lives. At this point, those future social citizens learn to be an independent man.

Besides, as students from different backgrounds pour into colleges or universities, colleges or universities are, to some point, turned into a global village, which characterizes open and diverse. People at colleges or universities can have a better understanding of interpersonal relationship. In my college time, my roommate often stayed up while I was used to going to sleep before 11 o’clock at night. When she was still making assignment vigorously at 12 o’clock, she could not help but make some noise. First I would bear it, but gradually, I found communicating frankly was a better way. Therefore, I chose a time and talked to her in an appropriate manner. It was a happy ending, and we still became good friends despite some differences in living habits.

Finally, learning essential career skills is also an indispensable part of college life. In colleges or universities, people have to take the major courses and other courses which attract our interests. In this way, people can find where their talents lie, thus helping them setting career goals in future.

Nowadays, it’s hard to imagine a teenager to enter society without college life This is not because he or she lacks the knowledge since attending colleges or universities are not only for knowledge but for a transitional period between campus and society. People are bound to return society no matter how many years they stay in campus. The 3-4 year college life functions as an ending of campus life and a beginning of social life.

 

14:42

405 words

charmant

无明显错误，结构清晰；但感觉行文比较口语化，句式使用较为单一。特别最后一段的it's应该写成it is, 这是标准的书面化形式。词汇量也有点偏小。

水平有限，以上仅是个人之见，还往指正

irenetoefl

thx~~

我会加油

很多单词可能还不知道怎么用在作文中吧~~