小弟高中毕业生，第一次写TOEFL独立作文请大师们评价一下啦!谢谢!

desmondzhou

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第一次写，用的是ＬＯＮＧＭＡＮ的模考ＭＩＮＩＴＥＳＴ４的题．

题目：

In some classes, course grades are solely based on exams, while in other class, grades are based more on participation. Which type of grading do you prefer? Use specific reason to support your response.

文章：

As a student,I deeply prefer to grade based more on class participation.Basically,there are about three reasons to support this.

 

Firstly,students should participate to the class well during the whole semester to gain the knowledge and skill truely.If we solely make grade on exams,several students will not care to participate to the class or even be absent but only prepare for the final-exams in the final period of the semester.Plus,making the student to study well by exam is really a passive way which should be less concerned. Hence,it will be more practical and effective to estimate a student's grade on class participation.

 

In addition to,holding good attitude to the study is the most important part to a student.For instance,a student who are so smart on this subject will perhaps be more careless and inactive on the class but he can get a good mark on the exams.Comparatively,another not-so-clever student,however,who are hard-studying and so serious on his work of this subject, may failed the exams.Obviously,if the professor considers more on the participation of the student,then he will treat the student more fairly.

 

Certainly, we all know that nobody can guarantee to show his real ability and knowledge which he has studied during that semester on every exam. As a result,deeply considering the behavior of a student on a class can be more accurate definitely than a final exam.

 

All above support that grades are based more on class participation is a more effective, fair, executive way which should be preferred widely among the colleges.

这个是３０分钟限时内写的没有任何改动．因为还没有准备高级词汇和句型，再加上本身英语能力有限，所以肯定这方面很弱．另外字数也稍没达到要求，请在其他方面帮我看看吧．也可以打个分，谢谢啦！！！！磕３响头！

As a student,I deeply prefer to grade based more on class participation.Basically,there are about three reasons to support this.

 

Firstly,students should participate to the class well during the whole semester to gain the knowledge and skill truely.If we solely make grade on exams,several students will not care to participate to the class or even be absent but only prepare for the final-exams in the final period of the semester.Plus,making the student to study well by exam is really a passive way which should be less concerned. Hence,it will be more practical and effective to estimate a student's grade on class participation.

 

In addition to,holding good attitude to the study is the most important part to a student.For instance,a student who are so smart on this subject will perhaps be more careless and inactive on the class but he can get a good mark on the exams.Comparatively,another not-so-clever student,however,who are hard-studying and so serious on his work of this subject, may failed the exams.Obviously,if the professor considers more on the participation of the student,then he will treat the student more fairly.

 

Certainly, we all know that nobody can guarantee to show his real ability and knowledge which he has studied during that semester on every exam. As a result,deeply considering the behavior of a student on a class can be more accurate definitely than a final exam.

 

All above support that grades are based more on class participation is a more effective, fair, executive way which should be preferred widely among the colleges.

这个是３０分钟限时内写的没有任何改动．因为还没有准备高级词汇和句型，再加上本身英语能力有限，所以肯定这方面很弱．另外字数也稍没达到要求，请在其他方面帮我看看吧．也可以打个分，谢谢啦！！！！磕３响头！

desmondzhou

不小心粘贴了两次.有点乱.拜托帮忙看一下了,谢谢!!!

maloney

第一次写，用的是ＬＯＮＧＭＡＮ的模考ＭＩＮＩＴＥＳＴ４的题．
            

题目：

In some classes, course grades are solely based on exams, while in other class, grades are based more on participation. Which type of grading do you prefer? Use specific reason to support your response.

 

文章：
                        

As a student,I deeply prefer to grade based more on class participation.Basically,there are about three reasons to support this.

[brief opening]

Firstly,students should participate to the class well during the whole semester in order to gain the knowledge and skill truely.If we solely make grade on exams,several students will not care to participate in [to] the class or even be absent but only prepare for the final-exams in the final period of the semester.[Plus] Besides,[making] driving the student to study well by exam is really a passive way which should be less concerned. Hence,it will be more practical and effective to estimate a student's grade on class participation.

[detail explanation]

In addition to,holding good attitude to the study is the most important part [to] for a student.For instance,a student who are so smart on this subject will perhaps be more careless and inactive on the class but he can get a good marks on the exams.Comparatively,another not-so-clever student,however,who are hard-studying and so serious on his work of this subject, may failed in the exams.Obviously,if the professor considers more on the participation of the student,then he will treat the student more fairly.

[reasonable point]

Certainly, we all know that nobody can guarantee to show his real ability and knowledge which he has studied during that semester on every exam. As a result,deeply considering the behavior of a student on a class can be more accurate definitely than a final exam.

 [ persuasive description]

 

All above support that grades are based more on class participation is a more effective, fair, executive way which should be preferred widely among the colleges

[nice ending]

good essay, I rate 5.5. If you can broaden you first paragraph, you will get full marks.

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