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Essay: 10
Possible score: 2-12.
ESSAY PROMPT
Think carefully about the issue presented in the following excerpt and the assignment below:
Abraham Lincoln said, "Most people are about as happy as they make up their minds to be." In other words, our personal level of satisfaction is entirely within our control. Otherwise, why would the same experience disappoint one person but delight another? Happiness is not an accident but a choice.
Assignment: Is happiness something over which people have no control, or can people choose to be happy? Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.
ESSAY IMAGE
ESSAY SCORE DESCRIPTION
Your essay score of 10 was obtained by adding the scores of two readers. For your score of 10, each reader gave your essay a 5. For more detailed information on scoring, see help.
This score represents the following set of criteria:
A score of 5 demonstrates reasonably consistent mastery, although it will have occasional errors or lapses in quality. A typical essay
effectively develops a point of view on the issue and demonstrates strong critical thinking, generally using appropriate examples, reasons, and other evidence to support its position
is well organized and focused, demonstrating coherence and progression of ideas
exhibits facility in the use of language, using appropriate vocabulary
demonstrates variety in sentence structure
is generally free of most errors in grammar, usage, and mechanics
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