1.19上战场，请朋友们指正

anybody3

题目，110。spend time alone or with friends

提纲

至今有意义的争论，每个人经历不同选择也不同，下面我将用具体的例子来论证我的观点。

On one hand, 喜欢独处的人心灵更加丰富，有的艺术作品音乐作品就需要安静的聆听，独处使我们有更多时间思考，人生，社会，家庭，所以好多伟大的艺术家都是孤独的

On the other hand, spent time with others 使人开心，锻炼社交能力，可以帮助人的事业，从别人那里获得智慧，the knowledge accumulating as soon as the thought of one individual could be communicated with others, 和朋友在一起可以帮你战胜孤独感，比如生病时希望有朋友来看望陪伴，

每个人情况都不同，有的人在人群中更加孤独，有的人获得力量和知识

 

The issue of whether spend time alone or with friends is a much meaningful contentious one since different people hold different views on it. Not only because of their respective backgrounds but also due to their alien understandings. The complex nature of above issue requires it on a case-by-case basis. In my point of view, whether one has advantages over the other depends on the specific circumstances and my position will be greatly confirmed by the following discussion.

The first argument that can be presented to develop my idea is that spend time with friends could provide you with more opportunities to develop your interpersonal or social skills, which may put you in a favorable position in the future markets. What’s more, knowledge begin to increase  as soon as the thought of one individual could be communicated with another by the means of speech. Furthermore, whenever you facing a miserable, your closely friends along with you at any place. What’s more,, both common sense and our experience inform us that taking exercise with your friends enable your feel relax and make you stay physical fitness.

However, we cannot deny that there are many advantages of being lonely. Such is human nature, that one individual is willing to stay alone to be more closely to nature. For them Anything could be compared with, the twittering of birds, the rising sun glinting on the trees and pastures, even the first cockcrow in the morning. They enjoying the quiet peaceful life. In addition, Staying alone makes people thoughtful. Some of creative job demand us stay alone. All we known, a lot of greatest artist feel lonely throughout his life, to some extent, this do good to there creation.

This alone constitute a sufficient support to my views that we should strike a careful balance of spend time alone and with friends, and therefore, since it considers the overall situation , the most striking conclusion is clear. To sum up, taking into account the above-mentioned reasons, we can arrive at the conclusion that spend time alone or with friends depend on people’’ circumstances.

Joypan

以下是引用anybody3在2007-1-6 2:42:00的发言：

The issue of whether spend time alone or with friends is a much meaningful contentious one since different people hold different views on it. Not only because of their respective backgrounds but also due to their alien understandings. The complex nature of above issue requires it on a case-by-case basis. In my point of view, whether one has advantages over the other depends on the specific circumstances and my position will be greatly confirmed by the following discussion.

本段问题：1.表示并列的连词前后的词性应该是一致的。

                 2.写完一个句子之后记得读一下，表达是否过于累赘，读起来是否拗口。

                 3.用你熟悉用法的词，不要用你不清楚或不明确用法的词。否则会引起歧义。弄巧成拙。

                 4.哪写地方该用定冠词，哪些时候可以省略，请再查一下语法书。

                 5.避免用极端的词。

anybody3

谢谢这位姑娘！

anybody3

不过有个小问题，我语法没什么基础，基本上是靠背诵学习，可以把改正的结果写一下吗？

wxyjohn

我的摸版跟你的很象，得的是FAIR（2.5-3.5）。。。。