(AA11)argument 11

littlegirl

The author in this argument is trying to establish that the residents of San Perdito would be best served that if they voted Montoya out of office and reelected Varro. This conclusion is based on the assertion that only Montoya is responsible for the unsatisfying lives of the residents. To support this assertion, the author reasons that when Montoya served as the mayor the population decreased and the unemployment rate increased. In addition, he assumes that the job performance of the mayor is the only factor affecting the development of the city and concerning. Closely examining the author’s logic and reasoning, we find that neither of these reasons provides sufficient support for the conclusion and this argument suffers two serious logical flaws.

First of all, the author commits the “after this and therefore because of this” fallacy where the author assumes that because the residents could not be serves best after Montoya acted as the mayor, Montoya was responsible for the poor lives that the people live. The statistical between the low quality lives and the action of Montoya as the mayor can not necessarily establish the causality between the poor lives and the action of Montoya as the mayor. In fact, the author obviously ignore the possibility of other alternative factors such as the serious famine, or the loss of the country to take part in a war, which may contribute to the unsatisfying living of the residents. It may be only a coincidence that the residents could not be served best after Montoya acted as the mayor. Unless the author can rule out other factors relevant to the relation between the poor lives and the action of Montoya as the mayor, this assumption is in question and can not be accepted.

Second, this argument relies on a groundless assumption that the fact unemployment rate has increased is a negative reflection of the society. However, no evidence stated in the editorial section support this crucial assumption. There are many other positive factors that could have caused or contributed to the result that unemployment rate has increased. It is possible that the younger tended to return to the school to continue their further education; it is also possible that the advanced technology applied forced the unskilled workers to lose their jobs. Any of these scenarios, if true, would show that the high unemployment rate is not due to the negative factors. Therefore, without ruling out other factors or presenting stronger evidence, the author can not conclusively assert that the resident will be best served if they voted Montoya out of office and reelected Varrio.

In conclusion, this assumption is ineffective because the author commits the above mentioned logical mistakes. The author could strengthen the conclusion that the residents of San Perdito would be best served that if they voted Montoya out of office and reelected Varro by demonstrating that the poor lives was a result of Montoya being the mayor.

littlegirl

用了牛牛的模板，看看论点论据可以吗。

excellent

ok!

anchoret

总体不错。高分

1、after this and therefore because of this？
and 似乎多余

2、The author in this argument is trying to establish that
个人觉得establish后面最好有个名词引导，比如the conclusion

3、above mentioned
连起来

4、strengthen the conclusion that the residents of San Perdito would be best served that if they voted Montoya out of office and reelected Varro by demonstrating
这里可以直接用strengthen the conclusion by......

5第一段可以适当用些长句。

littlegirl

好建议！