6 分作文， 你相信吗？（using the Scoreitnow)

softgirl718

我花了10美金 测试我的作文，我简直不相信这个结果，明天就要考试了，不管怎样是个好消息。请看拙文


Topic:
If you could invent something new, what product would you develop? Use specific details to explain why this invention is needed.

Your Answer:
In the modern society, more and more people are facing stress in the daily life. So when faced with the question if you could invent something new, what product would you develop, I would like to say I want to invent a machine that can release the stress which is called stress releaser. My view can be greatly substantiated in the following discussions.

The chief reason for my view is that stress releaser can make people live healthy. Since mental stress can cause a lot of diseases, the importance for inventing stress releaser is conspicious. Undoubtedly, there are so many different ways to get rid of stress, such as reading books, doing exercises or having a good sleep, but all of them are time-consuming, this machine will take shorter time and provide more effective result. For example, when you arrive at home in the midnight, you feel exhausted and can not fall sleep, comparing to take some medicines which is harmful to your body, using stress releaser is harmless and makes the body relax qulickly. Under this circumstance, using stress releaser is really helpful for the daily life.

Another reason for my view is that stress releaser is effective. Let us have a glance of other methods to reduce the stress, doing exersice needs a spacious places as well as reading a book needs quiet places. However the stress releaser will be as small as a purse and use the button battery as the power which make it easily used in everywhere.It can be used even in desert which is impossible for other methods.

What is also worth noticing fact is that this machine is not only to release the stress but also to strengthen people body. The main fuction of this machine is to diminish the stress by changing some chemical component of the blood, beside the same time it can make the the cell active and improve the ability to defend the diseases too.

To sum up, given the reasons mentioned above, we can safely reach the conclusion that stress releaser is necessary in the routine life and this inventation will help people live healthy, effectively and strongly.

chipmunk

Looks pretty good to me.

flyingty

quite nice !

sandwich

真得很好。建议当作范文。

lucyyyh

You did a great job.
6.0 is not impossible, so try your best!

Good Luck.

IcePoint

很好的作文！

xhr2000560

模版作文，我也来挖空

mcgrandy

pretty well

sanbu2

本来就很好啦

math_li

确实不错 。句子结构很好，也没有华丽的单词 ，读起来很顺
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