在吸取上次大家的意见过后的另一篇习作

luckg

特别感谢两位MM的批注，请大家看看我有进步没有？不过我觉得倒是倒退了，这片不好写啊呀

在当今这个社会，人们越来越重视外貌及时尚。你是否同意？给出例子及原因。

 

  Have you ever watched that public medias broadcast fashion programs all day? Have you ever seen that teenagers wear bizarre clothings? It is apparently that the current culture and society are care about fashion and appearances more often than ten years ago.

  To begin with, it exists so many advertisements of dressing style and hair style in the television and magazines that finally I give up to watch them, because I feel I am so tired about these advertisement.The hot programs in television are usually about super stars. Their dressing and life style become popular fashion that ordinary people would like to seek for. There are magazines which specilize in teach women how to dress and how to make up following fashion. From my perspective, the public medias lose sight on other things which are surely more magnificent for our society, including hard work and economical life.

  Except public medias, I realize that the shopping mall are also increasing too quickly. When every time I go out for shopping, perhaps I will find there would be a new shopping mall be openned. The more shopping malls are built, the more they stimulate people to spend money on appearances. Generally three stories of five in a store deparment are displaied clothing and cosmetics to attract customers.

  The last phenomenon, I found that the teenagers spend more their time to think about their dressing than study even in the school. They are victim of fashion seekers. My sisiter is a best example of this case. She is only 15 years old, but she is interested in whether her hair style or shoes' color are follow current fashion. It is primary thing for her to go to school that she wants to show her new hair style.
  Consequently, I argue current people think too much of their appearances and fashion these days compared with decade ago. When we seek for high quality lives in the meantime we should consider other responsibilities and obligations that are profoundly meaningful for us.         

santi

手头有本张红岩的《十天搞定TOEFL作文》，里面讲到了一种排比问句的开头，是三个问句加一个If 句子，我把里面的例子摘录下来，楼主参考一下吧。

Have you ever been to the West Lake in Hangzhou City? Have you ever wslked along the Long Corridor in the Summer Place? Have you ever seen the red fallen leaves on the Fragrance Hill?
If you have never had such experiences, you would never know how much fun outdoor activities could being you./If you have nver had suchexpriences, you would never know how wonderful it is to go traveling.