请大家帮忙看看作文（写得烂）

hsm121989

请问楼主几岁,我不是牛人但感兴趣,看了下你的习作.

首先那个marrige用得很好，接下来是你的问题，有不少语法错

paragraph 2: Now I find this action surely make me learning so many things about nature and life.action 最好改成activity，make me learn

 So from my opinion, helping housework can improve children to study  

in my opinion,helping to do housework, improve一般+Noun，可改improve their ability so that they can study...

paragraph 3:There are more kinds of knowledge
                children have no chance to get from school books.

改为：there are still much knowledge which children cannot acquire from text books.较好

many household could stimulate them to

改：many households guide them thinking and asking questions

我累死了，就这样吧！