(AI22)[求助]我写的第一篇AI,关于艺术的那个，还有十天就要考了。。。大家看看我还有救吗？

nofacetou

 

22.

 

“Clearly, government has a responsibility to
support the arts. However, if that support is going to produce anything of value,
government must place no restrictions on the art that is produced.”

 

 

To what extent do you agree or disagree with the
opinion expressed above? Develop your position by giving specific reasons
and/or examples from your own experience, observations, or reading.

 

 

 

Recently, there is a debate over whether government
should place any restrictions on the art that is supported by the government. Obviously,
since the arts demonstrate the culture and the civilization of the society, it
is government’s responsibility to support the arts. There comes sequence
question, should government regulate the art, by any means? Some argue that because
government pays the bills, it has the right to control the arts. Sometimes the
arts may be aggressive and misleading, if the government give the arts too much
freedom, it is very dangerous for the well being of the country. The other contends
that the arts will be of little value if the government places too many
restrictions on them.

 

As far as I concerned, I agree that the government
should give the artists as much freedom as possible in order to produce
anything valuable.

 

In the first place, the ultimate goal of government’s
support on the arts is to encourage artists to create the works of artistic excellence.
However, if the artists are working under the pressure that government will
blame them for what they create, there’s no doubt that the regulation will fasten
artists’ originality. A well know example is the culture condition of China during
the Culture Revolution. The government punished all the artists whose works mimic
the political issues purposely or unintentionally, destroyed their works and prohibit
them from creating. This tragedy resulted in a barren era of the arts. Since we
all know the outcome of the government’s restrictions on art, it is our tasks
to prevent such tragedy from occurring again.

 

In the second place, history events told us that many
excellent works coming out in a environment that artists are granted much more
freedom. For example, the Renaissance period, Italy provides its artists many
supports so that they could concentrate on their works, while place little
restrictions on them. And the artists were so respectful at that time that they
could ignore such restrictions. Thus in fact, the government place on
restrictions on the art. Another good example, Tang dynasty in China, when the
art of Chinese traditional poems was at its apex, the government did not pay
many concerns on what the poets wrote. In contrast, as the time goes by, in
Qing dynasty, the government censored the poems extensively, ending the flourish
of the Chinese traditional poems.

 

To sum up, the government should give the artists
more space so that they can paint on a broaden canvas. Too much censorship will
kill the originality and the creativity of the artists, thus will prevent the
artists from producing anything of value. In fact, the freedom is as much as,
if not more so, the best support for the arts.

这篇这个月可以算是最高频了吧，可是我觉得也是最难写的一个了。
我的第一篇AI，今后几天打算每天都写AI、AA，如果计划顺利的话。

pumpkin

不用每天都写很多，写好了一定要修改，否则就白写了。

pumpkin

Recently, there is a debate over whether government should place any restrictions on the art that is supported by the government. Obviously, since the arts demonstrate the culture and the civilization of the society, it is government’s responsibility to support the arts. There comes sequence question, should government regulate the art, by any means? Some argue that because government pays the bills, it has the right to control the arts 没有太明白这个句子，汗. Sometimes the arts may be aggressive and misleading, if the government give the arts too much freedom, it is very dangerous for the well being of the country. The other contends that the arts will be of little value if the government places too many restrictions on them.

 

As far as I concerned, I agree that the government should give the artists as much freedom as possible in order to produce anything valuable.

 

In the first place, the ultimate goal of government’s support on the arts is to encourage artists to create the works of artistic excellence. However, if the artists are working under the pressure that government will blame them for what they create, there’s no doubt that the regulation will fasten artists’ originality. A well know example is the culture condition of China during the Culture Revolution. The government punished all the artists whose works mimic the political issues purposely or unintentionally, destroyed their works and prohibit them from creating. This tragedy resulted in a barren era of the arts. Since we all know the outcome of the government’s restrictions on art, it is our tasks to prevent such tragedy from occurring again.

 

In the second place, history events told 这里为啥用过去时态了？ us that many excellent works coming out in a environment that artists are granted much more freedom. For example, the Renaissance period, Italy provides its artists many supports so that they could concentrate on their works, while place little restrictions on them. And the artists were so respectful at that time that they could ignore such restrictions. Thus in fact, the government place on restrictions on the art. Another good example, Tang dynasty in China, when the art of Chinese traditional poems was at its apex, the government did not pay many concerns on what the poets wrote. In contrast, as the time goes by, in Qing dynasty, the government censored the poems extensively, ending the flourish of the Chinese traditional poems.

最好再有个让步段落。

 

To sum up, the government should give the artists more space so that they can paint on a broaden canvas. Too much censorship will kill the originality and the creativity of the artists, thus will prevent the artists from producing anything of value. In fact, the freedom is as much as, if not more so, the best support for the arts.

 

yilan

考试的时候能写成这样，已经非常非常好了。遣词造句都很用心。

stellaleigh

AWA最主要的不是内容，是：

1 拼写

2 结构

3 字数

yilan

以下是引用stellaleigh在2006-7-24 9:24:00的发言：

AWA最主要的不是内容，是：

1 拼写

2 结构

3 字数

金玉良言。看来不光要拼命写，还是要留足够时间检查拼写。我自己感觉留五分钟检查都不算多。

 

mymengming

admiring

allen0018

In the second place, history events told us that many
excellent works （coming out---come out） in a environment （that---> in which） artists are granted much more
freedom
while ( placing)  little
restrictions on them.

thus will prevent the
artists from producing anything of value. thus doing

+ 一段吧
 
however, as we know, just as the government has the reponsibility to support the diversity of arts, it also has the obligation to protect its citizenship. Different artists have different cretiria of tastes that occationally hurt those who donnot understand those tastes. Just take my own experience for example, years ago, when a group of artists put up an exhibition, they demonstrate too many naked pictures which are not very decent or healthy for yound kids. The government thus decided to protect the teenagers and forced those talents to withdraw those "art". On this condition, it is better to care about those who are exposed to the arts when the arts may not fit for them, at least periodically, than leave those arts to hurt more precious human beings.

nofacetou

嗯，我也发现这个问题了

就是考试的时候，时间完全不够！！

今天第一次完全模考，加上作文

半个小时只够写不到四百字， respectively

我觉得我还是再完善一下自己的模版，这样上场会比较不慌，就算没词了也能打字了。。。

谢谢各位的指点！

To pumkin大大，那句话的意思我想表达的是，有人认为既然政府为艺术买单，所以他们当然有权对艺术进行控制。
结果就直生生的译过去了。。。

另外，让步的那一段，有一个好的例子是Marquis de Sade(大家看过鹅毛笔吗？就是那个写很多色情小说，sadism name after him)，可是要表达起来太复杂，这篇文章写了五十分钟，再加一段的话会要一个小时的，这在考场上太不现实，所以我就收尾了

真的很佩服那些能在考场上写出那么多字的人们！希望我九天后也灵魂附体一回就好了。。。

mba06

要看是誰靈魂附體﹐莎士比亞不行﹐他寫的太慢。