TWE028第一篇作文练习，请赐教。

huihui0702

Before rendering my opinion, I believe it is essential to take a glance at the arguments on both sides. Nowadays some may hold the opinion that media pay great attention to the famous people and their lives, but others have a negative attitude. As far as I am concerned, I agree that media concerns itself too much about the personal lives of famous people. My arguments for this point are listed as follows.

I agree with the statement that personal lives of famous person attack so many media without reservation since they pay more attention on famed starts in order to satisfy the curiosity of the public. A small example could give some light to this point. For the people are interested in the life of the Princess Diana, many reporters are waiting around the place she lived to find anything that may allure the masses.

I agree with the statement that personal lives of famous person attack so many media without reservation since they pay more attention on famed starts in order to satisfy the curiosity of the public. A small example could give some light to this point. For the people are interested in the life of the Princess Diana, many reporters are waiting around the place she lived to find anything that may allure the masses.

In addition, media focuses on reporting the situation of celebrated persons for getting more profits. If the public’s curiosity will be satisfied by the media, they would like to buy more magazines or newspapers to meet their increasing requirement. I illustrate this extreme example just in an attempt to state one thing clearly: during the time of World Cup, many sport fans spend more time and money on sport newspapers or magazines to find out the latest situation of the games.

Take into account of all the factors mentioned above, we may reach the conclusion that the media pay so much attention on the starts. Although the populaces are entitled to know the instances of the famous people, there in no need to spend abundant attention on their lives.
     

[此贴子已经被作者于2006-7-20 19:46:40编辑过]

nebelstreif

怎么有两段都是重复的呀，这样的话不知道总字数还够不够。觉得LZ的句式挺不错的，语言上有一些小的错误但应该问题不大，不过似乎论题展开不够，从论述中感觉不出媒体对名人的关注到“过”的程度。应该多花些心思再内容上面。

huihui0702

谢谢指教。

pumpkin

文章不在乎写多少，要反复修改

nicmoon

感觉水平比我高，向高人学习！