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tigerre_jw

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Topic: It is more important to work at a job that you enjoy than it is to earn a lot of money. Do u agree or disagree with?

 

Different people work for different purposes. Some work at a job that they enjoy, but some work to earn a lot of money. This difference causes a argument that which is more important, working at a job or earning a lot of money. As far as I am concerned, working to earn a lot of money is more important for the follow reasons.

The main important reason is that money plays a vital role in people’s lives. People spend money to buy goods, clothing and other things they need. Also people earn a lot of money to live comfortablly. For example, after paying their expense, people hope to travel with their family in the holiday. This spurs people to work to earn a lot of money.

Besides, the social factor could lead people work to earn a lot of money, such as job market and wage. In the past years, when computers boomed, there are so many people to study this subjuect and find a job of good wage . The reason was obvious that there were many jobs opportunities and the salary was higher. Thus, social factor will direct people’s purposes of working

Finally, in some situations, people have to work to earn a lot of money even though they dislike it. When people go abroad, because of language and culture conflict, in order to live, people force to find a job which they dislike but they can earn a lot of money to support their family or to live in abroad. This personal situation decides people’s working purpose and earning money is more important for them.

In conclusion, some people work at a job that they enjory and get achievements. In another hand, because of job market, some situations and the role of money, it’s important for people to work to earn a lot of money.

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以下是引用tigerre_jw在2006-6-16 22:55:00的发言：

各位大侠，帮忙看一下我的作文，提 点意见。谢谢

Topic: It is more important to work at a job that you enjoy than it is to earn a lot of money. Do u agree or disagree with?

 

Different people work for different purposes. Some work at a job that they enjoy, but some work to earn a lot of money. This difference causes a argument that which is more important, working at a job or earning a lot of money. As far as I am concerned, working to earn a lot of money is more important for the follow reasons.

The main important reason is that money plays a vital role in people’s lives. People spend money to buy goods, clothing and other things they need. Also people earn a lot of money to live comfortablly. For example, after paying their expense, people hope to travel with their family in the holiday. This spurs people to work to earn a lot of money.

Besides, the social factor could lead people work to earn a lot of money, such as job market and wage. In the past years, when computers boomed, there are so many people to study this subjuect and find a job of good wage . The reason was obvious that there were many jobs opportunities and the salary was higher. Thus, social factor will direct people’s purposes of working

Finally, in some situations, people have to work to earn a lot of money even though they dislike it. When people go abroad, because of language and culture conflict, in order to live, people force to find a job which they dislike but they can earn a lot of money to support their family or to live in abroad. This personal situation decides people’s working purpose and earning money is more important for them.

In conclusion, some people work at a job that they enjory and get achievements. In another hand, because of job market, some situations and the role of money, it’s important for people to work to earn a lot of money.

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