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alexchen13

2．It is unrealistic to except individual nations to make, independently, the sacrifices to conserve energy. International leadership and worldwide cooperation are essential if we expect to protect the world’s energy resources for future generations

The issue of whether to expect individual nations to make the sacrifices to conserve energy or international leadership and worldwide cooperation to protect the world’s energy resources for future generations is a complex and controversial one. Different people hold different answers due to their respective point of view. The author asserts that international leadership and worldwide cooperation are essential to do so. In my point of view, all nations, including developed countries or developing countries, should work together to protect our common resources.

For developed countries, they might have already transferred their industry from heavy industries, which consume lots of nature resources, to high technology industries such as IT and Biochemical. For example, American and Japan, they have oil or forest resources in their own countries, but they more willing to buy these resources from other developing country than to exploit from their own. Their economy can afford the price to protect their own nature resources.

For developing countries, they seem to exploit their nature resources excessively. The reason why they doing so is not because they don’t know the importance of resources protection, but because their nation survival and develop is much more important than protection. China, India and Middle East, all these countries have plenty of nature resources than those of developed countries. However, they sill suffer from a nation wide energy shortage. These resources are used in heavy industry such as steel mill, most of which will export to those developed countries.

Both developed and developing countries have realized that over exploit nature resources, even only happened in developing countries, will result in a globe resources shortage and ultimately ruin the whole environment of the earth. Recently lots of nature disasters such as South-Asia Tsunami and Hurricane Katrina have already proved this point. So all nations, including developed and developing countries, should cooperate together to prevent the disaster before it happen. A global wide rule and regulation of exploitation should be set up. Developed countries need to exploit other new nature resources such as solar and wind power as well as help developing country to protect their nature resources and use them efficiently.

In conclusion, to protect nature resources is a common objective for all nations all over the world. Every nation must try his best to reach or help others to reach this objective. A worldwide accepted rules and regulations will efficiently constrain some self-interested and short-eyesight motives.

laihong

以下是引用alexchen13在2006-2-2 23:00:00的发言：
2．It is unrealistic to except individual nations to make, independently, the sacrifices to conserve energy. International leadership and worldwide cooperation are essential if we expect to protect the world’s energy resources for future generations

The issue of whether to expect individual nations to make the sacrifices to conserve energy or international leadership and worldwide cooperation to protect the world’s energy resources for future generations is a complex and controversial one. Different people hold different answers due to their respective point of view.这句话没有解释想当然的说 The author asserts that international leadership and worldwide cooperation are essential to do so.这句话也一样没有解释,最好说说作者为什么这么说. In my point of view, all nations, including developed countries or developing countries, should work together to protect our common resources.

For developed countries, they might have already transferred their industry from heavy industries, which consume lots of nature resources, to high technology industries such as IT and Biochemical.这句话是你的中心句吗? For example, American and Japan, they have oil or forest resources in their own countries, but they more willing to buy these resources from other developing country than to exploit from their own.例子不能支持前一句话 Their economy can afford the price to protect their own nature resources.这句话的目的是什么?有什么理由吗

For developing countries, they seem to exploit their nature resources excessively.这是中心句吗？如果是，能支持你的观点吗？ The reason why they ARE doing so is not because they don’t know the importance of resources protection, but because their nation survival and develop isARE much more important than protection. China, India and Middle East, all these countries have plenty of nature resources than those of developed countries. However, they sill suffer from a nation wide energy shortage. These resources are used in heavy industry such as steel mill, most of which will export to those developed countries.这些话的目的？与前面的关系？

Both developed and developing countries have realized that over exploit nature resources, even only happened in developing countries, will result in a globe resources shortage and ultimately ruin the whole environment of the earth. Recently lots of nature disasters such as South-Asia Tsunami and Hurricane Katrina have already proved this point. So all nations, including developed and developing countries, should cooperate together to prevent the disaster before it happenＳ. A global wide rule and regulation of exploitation should be set up. Developed countries need to exploit other new nature resources such as solar and wind power as well as help developing country to protect their nature resources and use them efficiently.

In conclusion, to protect nature resources is a common objective for all nations all over the world. Every nation must try his best to reach or help others to reach this objective. A worldwide accepted rules and regulations will efficiently constrain some self-interested and short-eyesight motives. 你没有在前面说这方面的话题，所以怎么会出现在结论中呢

alexchen13

谢谢 laihong,真的受益匪浅,看了点评才觉得自己的条理很有问题，有待进一步提高。  

入画

我也总是很难写出每段的中心句。

paul2006

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