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发表于 2005-11-4 00:20:00 | 只看该作者

请大牛们帮我改改作文TWE185!

The choice between purchasing a house and buying a business is an easy one. Given the choice, I would purchase a business. The reasons are obvious. If I own a business, I could make most use of my capabilities, earn more money and thus live a better life.



Of course, to make a successful business, I must have the foresight, perspective and capability. Fortunately, I had been learned business management at graduate school for three years. The knowledge prepared me well on how to start a business, how to serve customers, and how to make the ends meet. It has been long a dream for me to own a business. And now, the dream comes true!



A successful business also means more fortune for me. To feed the whole family and give my wife and my son better lives is my responsibility. However, better lives mean not only a large house but also higher living standards, which obviously need more money. Running the business, I earn the money.



Finally, owning a business is a good idea because it leads me into a world full of challenge and novelties. To do the business, I will not only meet different peoples everyday but also make decisions at different occasions. However, I like the life of this kind. It makes me feel better.



Some people would use the money to buy a house, but it is not for me. I will run the business and earn more money. Perhaps I would buy an even larger house with the money I earned, thus I can live a better life with my family.



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发表于 2005-11-4 10:22:00 | 只看该作者
没有什么大的语法错误,不错.字数再多点.
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