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wch2001_akuan

topic 1: People attend college or university for many different reasons(for example, new experiences, career perparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Nowadays, more and more people attend college or university. There are many reasons to explain this phenomenon. As far as I am concerned, there are three important reasons as follows.

No issue is more important than the one that people want to improve their experience, especially the teenagers. For most teenagers, attending college or university is the first time for them to live in other place, that is different from their hometowns. They must learn to do housework, deal with the relation with roomates , and take care of themselves, that can be done wholly or partially by their parents when they still stay with their parents. With those daily work, they can learn a lot of basic skills, that will be helpful for their lives.

Career preparation is another important reason I have chosen to put there. In the modern society, it is not so easy to find a job, not to mention a  decent job. People must learn more skills in order to keep their pace with this challenging society.  More and more people attend college or university with part time or full time.If you could see that, you can understand  deeply.

In addition, people especially teenagers can meet more people and learn more knowledge for the academic study. People have the opportunity to meet  people who come from different countries or cultures. There are many  teachers, professors with abundant teaching experience who teach stdent a lot of knowledge. With their help, students can learn  a lot of basic and professional knowledge which is helpful for their future.

Also, people can list other reasons to explain why people attend college or university. However, those three reasons that I have explored in the above discussion, I think, are the most important reasons. Anyway, people have different reasons according to their experience.

wch2001_akuan

XMDJ们，给我提点意见，好吗？

wch2001_akuan

topic 7: How do movies or television influence people's behavior? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.

Nowadays, movies or television become more and more popular. It has change our daily lives very much. Some people think that it brings a more happy life to people, but others consider that  it creates a lot of problems. Obviously, it has a plenty of advantages and disadvantages. In my opinion, the advantages carry more weigh than the disadvantages.

The most important change is our lives. Take my family for example, everyday when we have spare time, we will watch TV especally news , opera, comedy and so on to get lastest news and knowledge. We will exchange our views about those programs together or with our classmates or colleagues. Nowadays, some programs have become important topics when we chat with others.It is obvious that TV or movies has broadens the scope of additional topics for communication  among friends and family.

Recreation is another head change that I have chosen to put there. In the challenging society, the tasks of people's shoulder are more and more heavy. Most people need relax.
Maybe the best way to relax is watch TV. What I need to do is to sit at the cozy sofa , turn on the TV and change my favorite programs especailly the comedy, that make me laugh, and as people always say 'laugh is the best medicine', after laugh, my mind will become fresh.

Of course, I do not deny that there are many disadvantages when people addict into TV or movies, because they will waste a lot of time on it and become more passive. However, everything has advantages and disadantages. All the factor I have explored in the above discussion can make me draw the conclusion that most changes based on TV or movies are good.

sfish

以下是引用wch2001_akuan在2003-9-10 20:27:00的发言：
topic 7: How do movies or television influence people's behavior? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.

Nowadays, movies or television become more and more popular. It has change our daily lives very much. Some people think that it brings a lot of fun, but others argue that  it creates a lot of problems. Obviously, it has a plenty of advantages and disadvantages. In my opinion, the advantages carry more weigh than the disadvantages.

The most important change is our lives. Take my family for example, everyday when we have spare time, we will watch TV especally news , opera, comedy and so on to get lastest news and knowledge. We will exchange our views about those programs together or with our classmates or colleagues. Nowadays, some programs have become important topics when we chat with others.It is obvious that TV or movies has broadens the scope of additional topics for communication  among friends and family.

Recreation is another head change that I have chosen to put there. In the challenging society, the tasks of people's shoulder are more and more heavy. Most people need relax.
Maybe the best way to relax is watch TV. What I need to do is to sit at the cozy sofa , turn on the TV and change my favorite programs especailly the comedy, that make me laugh, and as people always say 'laugh is the best medicine', after laugh, my mind will become fresh.

Of course, I do not deny that there are many disadvantages when people addict into TV or movies, because they will waste a lot of time on it and become more passive. However, everything has advantages and disadantages. All the factor I have explored in the above discussion can make me draw the conclusion that most changes based on TV or movies are good.

Nowadays, movies or television become more and more popular. It has changed our life dramatically. Some people think that it has a lot of fun, but others argue that  it causes a lot of problems. Obviously, it has a plenty of advantages and disadvantages. In my opinion, the advantages carry more weigh than the disadvantages.

The most important change is our lives. Take my family for example, everyday when we have spare time, we watch TV after the dinner especally news , opera, comedy and so on to get lastest news and knowledge. We will exchange our views about those programs together or with our classmates or colleagues. Nowadays, some programs have become important topics when we chat with others.It is obvious that TV or movies has broadens the scope of additional topics for communication  among friends and family.

Recreation is another head change that I have chosen to put there. In the challenging society, the tasks of people's shoulder are more and more heavy. Most people need relax.
Maybe the best way to relax is watch TV. What I need to do is to sit at the cozy sofa , turn on the TV and change my favorite programs especailly the comedy, that make me laugh, and as people always say 'laugh is the best medicine', after laugh, my mind will become fresh.

Of course, I do not deny that there are many disadvantages when people addict into TV or movies, because they will waste a lot of time on it and become more passive. However, everything has advantages and disadantages. All the factor I have explored in the above discussion can make me draw the conclusion that most changes based on TV or movies are good.

I tried to help you correct the first paragraph, although my composition is not good. Be honest, there is a lot of mistakes and weird expression in you article. You may need read some English articles to familiar with the real English. But anyway, it is good start.

wch2001_akuan

How about other parapgrapghs? Could you help me correct it? I know my English is not good not only the oral English but also writing. But i think 'Practice makes perfect' . Could you help me? Anyway,your suggestion will help me a lot.

wch2001_akuan

topic 19: Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways, or should governments spend more moeny on improving public transportation(buses,trains,subways)? Why? Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay.

Some people thinkthat governments should more money on improving roads and highways, but others consider that governments should spend more money on improving public transportation. If I were faced with the issue in the city where I live, I would probably follow the latter. There are no less than three reasons as follows.

No issue is more important than the one that the public transportation in our city need to be improved. Pubilc transportation is most people first choice when they want to reach other places because most people do not own cars. However, there are no enough pubilc transportation like buses, trains and subway, so it is not so easy to take pubilc transportation or it takes a long time to wait for buses, trains or subways. It is like nightmare to take them in the rush hour. People waste a lot of time on that. If governments could spend more money improving pubilc transportation, they would help most people save a lot of time.

Secondly, improving public transportation can help decrease pollution. Recent research suggests that pollution caused by cars is more than by industries and factories. If pubilc transportation is so advanced that people can take it very conveniently , people will  take it more frequently and drive their cars more less, that can avoid more pollution.

Finally, public transportation can increase employment. With the improvement of public transportation, there are more job vacancy especially services that people can apply for. So it can drop unemployment rate and increase income, that will bring a more happy for people.

I do not deny that governments should spend money improving roads and highways, to some extent, roads and highways are basic public establishments for public transportation. However, the most urgent thing that governments should do is to improve pubilc tranportation that is very scarce in my city.

To sum up, from those reasons above, it is obvious that governments should spend more money to improve public transportation.

wch2001_akuan

topic 5: A company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your community.Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this new influence on your comany. Do you suppose or oppose the factory? Explain your positions.

If a company had announced that it wished to build a large factory near my community, some people would approve this idea and others would oppose it because a large factory will bring a lot of advantages and cause plenty of probrems. As far as I am concerned, I would support this idea, and I will list my reasons as follows.

No issue is more important than the one that a large factory will bring a lot of job vacancy  if it could be built in my community because it would hire many people. So there are many people can be hired by the large factory and the unemployment will be drop greatly. With the increase of income , people can spend more and more in food, clothes and entertainment, that will bring a more happy life.

Revenue is another head reason that I have chosen to put there. As we all know, tax is the  main source for revenue and revenue is the economical basis to public service. When a large factory were built, governments could get more revenue, and so government had more money to improve our public sevice, that most people would benefit from.

In addition, a large factory would make our lives more convenient. A large factory must hire employees, meanwhile, there would be  more people in my community. In order to accommodate more people, more stores and homes would be needed. This would boost  real estate development in my community and those stores would make our daily lives more convenient.

Of course, I do not deny that there are some problems caused by the large factory like pollution and traffic. However, the advantages that we can get from the large factory carry more weigh than those disadvantages.

Still, there are other reasons to account for my view, however, from what I have discussed above, I can safely draw the conclusion that it is beneficial to build a large factory in my community.

wch2001_akuan

topic 15: Neighbors are the people who live near us.In your opinion, what are the qualities of a good neighbor? Use specific details and examples in your answer.

Wherever we are living, we have neighbors. What are the qualities of a good neighbor? The answer to the question depends on personal experience, life style and emotional concern. As far as I am concerned, there are three important qualities as follows.

No issue is more important than the one that neighbors should have good life habits. For example, people should not open their stereo too loud to affect their neighbors. On the other hand, neighbors should take care of public service and keep the community clean. Those life habits seems very subtle, but if neighbors do not have them, commninity will become messy, that will affect our health and mood.

Secondly, neighbors should be glad to help others, especially those people who live near theirs. As we all know, everyone could encounter some unforeseen emergencies, and the fastest help he can get is probably from his neighbors because they can provide immediate help. In the same way, a neighbor who likes to help others can get help in turn.

Finally, neighbors should respect others' culture. Nowadays, it is very natural for people to live other countries different from their hometowns, so there maybe different cultures in the same community. As a neighbor, it is a certain thing to respect his neighbors's culture and religion, that maybe the prerequisite for a pleasant living environment.

Still, there maybe other qualities than those mentioned above, however, those qualities in the above discussion is the most important qualities for neighbors. Anyway, different people have different views according to their fondness and personality.

Taurus

以下是引用wch2001_akuan在2003-9-14 19:43:00的发言：
topic 15: Neighbors are the people who live near us.In your opinion, what are the qualities of a good neighbor? Use specific details and examples in your answer.

Wherever we are living, we have neighbors. What are the qualities of a good neighbor? The answer to the question （直接用It就好，不过这样也不错。）depends on （加one's）personal experience, life style and emotional concern. As far as I am concerned, there are three important qualities as follows.

第一段很不错的！

No issue is more important than the one that neighbors should have good life habits. For example, people should not open （？？？记住，我们所谓的“开音响”，不要直译到英文中去！这里改成keep.）their stereo too loud to affect their neighbors. （这句有问题，前面是should not，后面却有too...to...结构，有双重否定的嫌疑。我倒是能明白你的意思，但ets就不一定能认可。其实很简单，建议改为people should not keep their stereo very loud, especially at late night. 这里可以不必明说，大家都明白噪音是会吵到邻居的。）

On the other hand, neighbors should take care of public service （改为participate in public services。）and keep the community clean. Those life habits seems very subtle, but if neighbors do not have them, commninity will become messy, that will affect our health and mood. （稍嫌罗嗦，建议改为：This kind of habits seem subtle, but they are actually crucial to the healthiness of a neighborhood.）

Secondly, neighbors should be glad to help others, especially those people who live near theirs（多余，删除吧）. As we all know, everyone could encounter some unforeseen （删除，这个意思已经包含在后面的“emergencies“里了。）emergencies, and the fastest （改为first-time）help he can get is probably （改为most likely，probably的语气太重。）from his neighbors because they can provide immediate help（删除，和前面意思重复）. In the same way, a neighbor who likes to help others can get help in turn.（删除）（加：You never know what could happen to you in the future. Feel glad to help others, and you can get helped when it comes to you.）

这段的缺点就是太多意思重复之处。不是说我们写文章时不能重复，但重复是要在原有基础上有所升华，哪怕只有一点点。尽量不要在同一句中重复。

Finally, neighbors should respect others‘ culture. Nowadays, it is very natural for people to live （缺in）other countries different from their hometowns（直接说foreign countries就好）, so there maybe different cultures in the same community. （这句问题多。第一，没有be动词。maybe可不是动词哟。第二，建议全句改为：there can be people of different backgrounds in the same community。）As a neighbor, it is a certain thing to respect his neighbors's culture and religion, that maybe the prerequisite for a pleasant living environment.（改为：A good neighborhood is built on people's mutural respects, for each other's culture and religion.）

Still, there maybe other qualities than those mentioned above, however, those qualities in the above discussion is the most important qualities for neighbors. Anyway, different people have different views according to their fondness and personality.

建议改为：Still, there can be many other qualities. But those mentioned above are the essential ones from my point of view. To qualify for a good neighbor, people should cherish love, careness and respect, and behave with them.

总体来说还是不错的！加油！加油！！！

[此贴子已经被作者于2003-9-16 11:47:29编辑过]

wch2001_akuan

Taurus: thank you very much, u r very nice!真的不知道要怎样谢谢你！自己的作文怎样看都不知道要怎样改才好，或者是有时候想不出来用什么句子来代替会更好！谢谢你！