"Courtesy disappearing..",写了一篇, 能给点建议吗?

dreamtrue

要上考场了, 据说这是个高难题, 也不知思路清晰不清晰, 脸皮厚点, 拉出来骝骝, 请多多指教,


In determining whether we are all the poorer for Courtesy, one must examine both our overt actions and underlying motives, as well as examine whether courtesy is rapidly disappearing from our daily interaction activities. As different people hold various views towards the courtesy and the courtesy as an interaction method in the society, their comments about this observation may different. As far as I concerned, I partly agreed that we are poorer for the courtesy. In another word, I don’t think it is the accurate observation. My standpoint of this matter can be substantiated by the following reasons:

First of all, in my point of view, Courtesy is a character for a people who treat others with gracious consideration and polite manner. However, as our society changes with the development of technology, our attitude towards how to treat the others has been changing as well. Our traditional concept towards courtesy is now facing challenges that come from those transformations that are changing our life day by day. The ground on which the courtesy had laid is changing. The role of the individuals in society is being re-valuated.  In the past, people accepted the traditional education to ask every one to act more harmonized. People counted on the good relationship with the others to make a better life. They need to be courtesy to win the respect from the others, to set up well-founded environment for development their business, and to get what they want more easily. However, the development of high technologies have bringing us dramatic transformations, not only in the physical living world, but also in the mental communication methods. We can live alone in a house for one month without getting any help from neighborhood. We can get all the information that we want, entertain ourselves, buy the fundamentals for our living through the internet, in the mean time, keeping ourselves be an active role in our society. Under this circumstance, it is obvious that we don’t have to be courtesy required by tradition to the others.

In addition, let us to think about the high competitions among us. That competition status teaches us how to struggle with the life with the limited resources. For instance, for our parents’ generation, they may need to consider the others’ needs before they get some for their own. In China, a person, his name is LeiFeng, was so popular because of his always courtesy to the others: he always helped the others, remitted his salary to the old man, and find time to contribute the community. However, this spirit is challenged at present. Young generations are skeptical whether this way can work. People would prefer to leave time more for considering themselves than for politely treating the others. In this way, courtesy is disappearing in our society.

However, it may be true that it is not all of us are get poorer at being courtesy, sometimes, we express our courtesy in another way. Technology provides us, in the other hand, more convenient method to be more courtesy. After attending a friend’s party, we can just send an email to thank his invitation; One phone call can diminish our physical distance more easily. We sustain our harmony by more convenient way and more modern way. From this point, courtesy is not disappearing, but only appears in another face.

From what we discussed above, we found that courtesy has disappearing in some area; however, has been strengthened in other areas. Whatsoever, as a merit to enforce our society, courtesy should be encouraged among us. We can understand its core mean, and express it in various ways, setting up friendly air in our society for better future.

anchoret

great.

没问题

dreamtrue

Thanks for your encouragement.
Hope I can bring laurel wreath back tomorrow.

anchoret

do not worry. wish you luck