TWE009我的第三篇，45分钟才完成

eric_guoyi

009 Some people prefer to live in a small town. Others prefer to live in a big city. Which place would you prefer to live in? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

There is much controversory controversy over the issue of human's living circumstances. Some people prefer to live in  metropolises rather than small town, while others would rather live in a small town and enjoy a peaseful life.Considering  individuals' different education, emotion, characters and customs, everyone can choose a place which is suitable for him or her. In my case, I have roamed in various towns and cities, I think a big city may be suitable for me to enjoy the rest of my life.

Full of temptation, opportunity, competition, and dream, a big city brings me into a wonderful world. Regardless of it's prosperity, one can start his or her dream by explore a big city. when one wants to read books, big libraries in metrapolitises are good places; when one wants to have a desire to listen music, big threaters  welcome him or her; even when one wants to have a complete relax, myriad bars are available.  so many people live in a big cities can strongly feel the impose of multi-dimensional cultures from where he or she lives the city in which he or she lives.

Another reason why I prefer big cities lies on most of  friends of mine living in big cities. In individual's daily life, there must be a lot of experiences and pleasure which one wants to  share with his or her friends. Simultaneously,  there also must be much sadness and pain which you want to pour to your close friends. Suppose I live in a small town without my close friends, all I can do is just to keep going to the darkness of darkness.

Furthermore, metropolises' contribution to our daily life is it's convenience to communication. Metropolises are built with edifices and mansions just as a house is built with bricks, but a collection of edifices and mansions can not be a metropolises any more than a pile of bricks can be a house. Myriad roads and highways play an indispensible role in people's communication. Flourish roads lying in big cities make it is convenient to go here and there.

Although in most of countries, metropolises now face a series of serious problems, such as traffic jam, I have a confidence that the government will invest for these kind of problems, thus, in the future, when more and more prosperity and glory of big cities appears, no one can give such nice scene a second thought.

红的是我后来改的。请大家多多批评。

还有一个小问题，怎么才能不超时呢？我总是要花40分钟才能写完。。。

[此贴子已经被作者于2005-8-27 19:35:21编辑过]

farsuccess

我粗略地看看，觉得有这些问题你要注意：

1。名词单复数问题：

   比如： small town 应当是 small towns; traffic jam-traffic jams

2.错别字：peaseful life - peaceful life;

你可以重新修改一下，不确定的词，要查一下。总体还行，但是这些错误实在会影响非常大。

你可以每天都练习一下，卡时间，就30分钟结束，提高打字和构思理由的速度。

eric_guoyi

谢谢您的无私的帮助，我会继续努力的。真得很感谢！

pengstone

关于写作速度的问题，可以注意一下写作顺序：先把一个结构完整的文章写出来（一般包括开始、结尾，二个理由段）。如果有时间，再额外写一些。这样，即使时间不够也不会有全局性影响。

eric_guoyi

对，这样至少可以不会因为没有时间写结尾而丢分。不过我怕这样做会不会影响连续的思路，我试一试。还有10天就考了，我坚持每天写一到两篇。谢谢你们的好建议