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-26. It has recently been announced that a new movie theater may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

Recently, a new movie theater has been announced to be built in my neighborhood. I am glad to hear about it. Since a new movie theater greatly enriches our community entrainment and improves our community development, I would have no hesitation to support it.

To begin with, a new movie theater is more likely to give us more choice to spend our free time. It is obvious that more and more latest film would be on show in it along with the world. They give us up-to-date information about the world and the culture. Furthermore, a theater nearby provides us more convenience to see films .We need not drive to other places just for a film, by comparison, we can easily choose which film to see and when to see it. We would like to come to the theater with our friends eagerly and discuss the film which we have seen together, which surely enhance our friendship.  Due to such advantages, it is helpful with a theater nearby to our community life.

Next, there is no denying that, in general, a theater nearby could improve our community development. A theater itself would provide us considerable tax income. Besides, it would absorb other facilities such as restaurant, bookstore, video shop etc. No wonder, they may not only flourish our community providing us much convenience, but also add tax income to our community. With the income, we would build up more facilities, namely library and gym. Because of those occasions, it is natural that a new theater in the neighborhood is benefit to us all.

Of course, a new theater near our community has its own disadvantages to some extent. For instance, crowed people and dirty circumstance. But if all the factors are contemplated, the merits of building a new theater nearby carry more weight than doing not.

In final analysis, because of the above stated reasons, which may interweave into an organic whole and become more compelling, I would support to build a new theater without doubt.

pumpkin

I think it is well writen. I have only two suggestions here:

1. try to make a more powerful conclusion.

2. try to make three examples.

You have potential to reach more than 5, even 6.   

marinezheng

Recently, a new movie theater has been announced to be built in my neighborhood. I am glad to hear about it. Since a new movie theater greatly enriches our community entrainment (pls remember before post your writing, check spelling carefully, in your writing rewritten yesterday a lot of spelling errors. )and improves our community development, I would have no hesitation to support it. (i think use 'would' maybe better, afterall a new movie theater has not opened yet. how about this: since a new movie theater would greatly enrich our community entertainment)

To begin with, a new movie theater is more likely to give us more (better to delete the first "more")choice to spend our free time. It is obvious that more and more latest film(s) would be on show in it along with the world. They give us up-to-date information about the world and the culture. Furthermore, a theater nearby provides us more convenience to see films .We need not drive to other places just for a film, by comparison, we can easily choose which film to see and when to see it. We would like to come to the theater with our friends eagerly and discuss the film which (delete) we have seen together, which surely enhance our friendship.  Due to such advantages, it is helpful with a theater nearby to our community life.

Next, there is no denying that, in general, a theater nearby could improve our community development. A theater itself would provide us considerable tax income. Besides, it would absorb other facilities such as restaurant, bookstore, video shop etc. No wonder, they may not only flourish our community providing us much convenience, but also add tax income to our community. With the income, we would build up more facilities, namely(for instance, 好一些,因为 more faciclities not only include gym and library) library and gym. Because of those occasions, it is natural that a new theater in the neighborhood is benefit(benefitial) to us all(all of us).

Of course, a new theater near our community has its own disadvantages to some extent. For instance, crowed people and dirty circumstance. But if all the factors are contemplated, the merits of building a new theater nearby carry more weight than doing not.

In final analysis, because of the above stated reasons, which may interweave into an organic whole and become more compelling,(a lot of people use this sentence, whether can use other wording,) I would support to build a new theater without doubt.

this work well done

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thanks a lot, pumpkin & marine! You both do inspire me. I will try my best.