大家看看想我这样的文章能拿5分吗？

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我是用了模板的，练的在好也就是这个水平了，情大家多指教！谢谢

112. Some people think that children should begin their formal education at a very early age and should spend most of their time on school studies. Others believe that young children should spend most of their time playing. Compare these two views. Which view do you agree with? Why?

Depending on personal experience, personality type and emotional concern, we find that Some people prefer that children should go to school and spend most of their time on school studies at a very early age but others believe that young children should spend most of their time on playing. From my point of view, it is more advisable to choose that young children should spend most of their time on playing rather than on formal education. My arguments for this point are listed as follows.

The main reason why I agree with that young children should spend most of their time on playing is that playing is beneficial to children physical growth. Everyone knows that it is very important for a child whether she or he could grow healthily and playing could make a cozy environment for children so they don’t have to worry about the studies. They can have more time to play games or stay with families. Otherwise, as young children, they are too young to face too much pressure on studies and the high pressure is harmful for young children

Another important reason why I agree with the above statement is that young children can learn by playing. Young children will be more interested in games than books. And some good games could help children learn something useful. For example, a child could know and remember more animals by visiting a zoo than reading a book.

Of course, choosing that young children spend most of their time on school also has advantages to some extent. Such as, Young children’s parents don’t have to spend too much  time to take care of their young children anymore so they can go to work and young children can learn knowledge earlier so they can make their childhood more useful and so on.

General speaking, Children’s health is more important than anything else. Compared these two opinions , I would like to conclude that young children should spend most of their time on playing.

lambertsun

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Veronica_Melody

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llliiiuuu

也就5分吧!祝好运!

springqi

祝好运~~

anner

谢谢，我就是需要5分。看来还要努力。