大家看看我这个结尾怎样？请指教

kevinhu

Taking into account all these factors discussed above, which sometimes intertwine to form an organic whole and thus become more persuasive, we can safely come to the conclusion that......... In fact, not only do I prefer to  ...., but also prefer to[一个建议] as much/soon as possible.  这个是CD的模板，大家觉得怎样？我还有点不明，【一个建议】那里应该怎样写？NOT ONLY DO I PREFER TO STUDENT SHOULD LEARN MUSIC, BUT ALSO PREFER TO......AS SOON AS POSSIBLE.这里虚线部分应该怎样给建议？

pengstone

【一个建议】那里应该怎样写？NOT ONLY DO I PREFER TO STUDENT SHOULD LEARN MUSIC, BUT ALSO PREFER TO......AS SOON AS POSSIBLE.这里虚线部分应该怎样给建议？

可以是针对学生如何学习音乐方面的建议。另外，划线部分似有语法问题，prefer to能跟从句吗？