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162. Some famous athletes and entertainers earn millions of dollars every year. Do you think these people deserve such high salaries? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

When it comes to issue as to whether some famous  althetes and enterainers should earn millions of dollarss every year, as far as i am concerned ,i believe that such huge money should  be given to them because under some circumstances they have postive impacts on the life of people and i will elaborate my views as follows.

First and foremost, entertainers provide a lot of funs to the life of people. Todays, entertainers are devoted themself ot composing some excellent masterpieces which is benefical to the health of people. On the other hands, they create a lot of masterpieces make people relax , thus eliminating the phyical pressure to the least level. Thanks to their hardwork, after work i can enjoy their performances to entertain myself.

The second reason for my view is that altheters or entertainers have high inflence on the life of people. They often stand on the stage to promote public career such as quiting smoking advertising ,which is very conducive to the public healthy. For example, some famous stars in my hometown advocate people to quit smoking and explain the disadvantage of smoking and advantage of quiting smoking .As a result.Then people definitely know that healthy condition is important to their success and their families. becasue of The postive impact on the life of people, Naturally i feel that they deserve the high salary.

Last but not least, since the althetes are devoted themself to the sport career from teenage, paying hardwork to gain hornor of the country. For example, the althete gain golden medal of the Olympic sport. Obviousely and thus they enjoy the repect from the peopel and should receive high salary as an reward.

In summary, based on the three reasons i presented above, the althetes ans entertainer have postive impacts on the our life. In fact, the famous althetes or entertainers is not easy to achieve their own today stage and are inseparable from diligence and hardwork.

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