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this is a controversial issue about whether computers have made life more complex and stressful.depending on personal experience,personality type and emotional concern,we may find that some people hold the idea that computers have made life easier and more convenient,on the other hand,some citydwellers reckon computers have made life harder than before.the choice,nevertheless,is not easy to make.however,from my point of view.i will agree the former one is more reasonable.for computers have made life easier and more convenient is more advisable.my arguments are listed as follows.

the essential reason can be seen by everyone is that computers have alreadly changed the normal way the mass work.for example,nowadays,more and more employees choose to work at home instead of reaching their companies.undoubtly,it reduces a lot of traffic congestion and limited working place.however,maybe there are still many different views concerning this topic,in my part,i also advocate the view that computers have made our life more simple and free.

another reason of my propensity is that the internet services based on the computer make our communication all across the world more convenient.needless to say nothing generally revolutionized the way we live as internet in the past decades.today,cannot log in the internet means behind times because you can not only go though trmendous ,various information about different life styles,occupations or cultures on the internet with a computer ,but also get in touch with other friends easily no matter how far away he lives .so as far as i am concerned. computers also greatly save our limited time to know news and solid our friendship,making our life easier and moren convenient.

of course,in certain situation.with the advent of computers,there are some drawbacks accompanying the advantages.such like those people who do their work at home often stay in front of the computer all day along,and they even do not do any physical exercises.absolutely,it is of great harm to theri health.anyway,taking account of all these factors and recognizing the fact,to be frank, i still agree that computers have made life easier and more convenient.

to sum up,given these sagacious reasons which are discussed above, i stongly commit to the nation that computers have made our life easier and more convenient.

如题，谢谢大家！！

[此贴子已经被作者于2005-5-9 16:18:15编辑过]

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以下是引用惧怕TWE在2005-5-9 16:00:00的发言：

this is a controversial issue about whether computers have made life more complex and stressful.depending on personal experience,personality type and emotional concern,we may find that some people hold the idea that computers have made life easier and more convenient,on the other hand,some citydwellers reckon computers have made life harder than before.the choice,nevertheless,is not easy to make.however,from my point of view.i will agree the former one is more reasonable.for computers have made life easier and more convenient is more advisable.my arguments are listed as follows.

the essential reason can be seen by everyone is that computers have alreadly changed the normal way the mass work.for example,nowadays,more and more employees choose to work at home instead of reaching （平行结构）their companies.undoubtly,it reduces a lot of traffic congestion and limited working place.however,maybe there are still many different views concerning this topic,in my part,i also advocate the view that computers have made our life more simple and free.

another reason of my propensity is that the internet services based on the computer make our communication all across the world more convenient.needless to say nothing （please use formal English) generally revolutionized the way we live as internet in the past decades.today,cannot log in the internet means behind times because you can not only go though trmendous ,various information about different life styles,occupations or cultures on the internet with a computer ,but also get in touch with other friends easily no matter how far away he lives .so as far as i am concerned. computers also greatly save our limited time to know news and solid our friendship,making our life easier and moren convenient.

of course,in certain situation.with the advent of computers,there are some drawbacks accompanying the advantages.such like those people who do their work at home often stay in front of the computer all day along,and they even do not do any physical exercises.absolutely,it is of great harm to theri health.anyway,taking account of all these factors and recognizing the fact,to be frank, i still agree that computers have made life easier and more convenient.

to sum up,given these sagacious reasons which are discussed above, i stongly commit to the nation that computers have made our life easier and more convenient.

如题，谢谢大家！！

1。莫板太长

2。有些次过于生僻。体现用词的难度，但最好不用老外读都别扭的词。my professor in law said ues plain English and no jargon!

3。由于以上原因，有些男次用的也不准确

4。注意大小写

5。文章结构好

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[此贴子已经被作者于2005-5-10 12:19:04编辑过]

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