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Irene_yang

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What change would make your hometown more appealing to people your age? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

To make my hometown more attractive to those young persons similar with me, the answers may depend on the different regional background or local convention. Take a look around the environment of my dwelling, I have to admit that we should pay much more attention to the sanitation of our hometown at least than before, for some kinds of trash can be seen here and there and a certain terrible smell permeates the atmosphere. So it is really urgent to do something improving such circumstance.

First and foremost, a place with neat surroundings generally can help the habitants to keep in good health. Some annual surveys showed that people live in a clean place are always more healthy and energetic than those in a turbid area, especially the epidemics, such as some special flu, headache or high blood pressure and so on . If we take many more efficient measures to purify the polluted air and water in some rivers or lakes, the possibility of infecting the illnesses must be reduced largely.

A further reason is that a clean and graceful region can promote the development of the local tourism. I believe that most persons normally prefer to enjoy their holidays at natural or pure spots, which will make them feel relax and comfortable. So if the pollution in my hometown would be meliorated, more and more tourists will visit it. Thus not only can our regional government gets much more income but also the town per se will be prosperous with so many newcomers joining us.

In addition, as the increase of the tourists, such a potential town with perfect environment certainly will attract the foreign investors to pay their enough attention on it. For instance, the hotels, restaurants and other entertainment places would also find their right positions here. Furthermore, we can put a part of these earnings to protect our surroundings, which will form a sort of benign-circulation sooner or later.

To sum up, after the efforts of changing the environment of my hometown, it must bring us an amount of enjoyment and economic benefit.[不太确定，benefit后面要不要加-s]   Meanwhile, we should cherish it much more as one of our liabilities than previously.[这个词用的也不是很肯定...该用名词吗？还是形容词？]

搜索过此篇文章，好像先前都没有范文，或是没有单独罗列出来。只好平地起墙，作为考前最后一篇习作；在限定时间内完成了，并自己稍作过修改，还请各位NN评点。明天上战场，不知如此功力 能否助我勇创“5分”大关？.....拭目以待哦！

最后，万分感谢诸位的支持与鼓励！

[此贴子已经被作者于2005-3-30 2:45:58编辑过]

Irene_yang

尽管这个立意有些牵强，但也是为了迎合所谓的“环保人士”的口味啦.....不晓得是否算偏题....？！

烦请大家多多指正，多谢！～～

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以下是引用Irene_yang在2005-3-29 10:01:00的发言：

TWE052

What change would make your hometown more appealing to people your age? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

To make my hometown more attractive to those young persons similar with me, the answers may depend on the different regional background or local convention. Take a look around the environment of my dwelling, I have to admit that we should pay much more attention to the sanitation of our hometown at least than before, for some kinds of trash can be seen here and there and a certain terrible smell permeates the atmosphere. So it is really urgent to do something improving such circumstance.

First and foremost, a place with neat surroundings generally can help the habitants to keep in good health. Some annual surveys showed that people live in a clean place are always more healthy and energetic than those in a turbid area, especially the epidemics, such as SARS or special flu. If we take some efficient measures to purify the polluted air or water in some rivers or lakes, the possibility of infecting the illnesses must be reduced largely.

A further reason is that a clean and graceful region can promote the development of the local tourism. I believe that most persons normally prefer to enjoy their holidays at natural or pure spots, which will make them feel relax and comfortable. So if the pollution in my hometown would be meliorated, more and more tourists will visit it. Thus not only can our regional government gets much more income but also the town per se will be prosperous with so many newcomers joining us.

In addition, as the increase of the tourists, such a potential town with perfect environment certainly will attract the foreign investors to pay their enough attention on it. For instance, the hotels, restaurants and other entertainment places would also find their right positions here. Furthermore, we can put a part of these earnings to protect our surroundings, which will form a sort of benign-circulation sooner or later.

To sum up, after the efforts of changing the environment of my hometown, it must bring us an amount of enjoyment and economic benefit, meanwhile, we should cherish it much more as one of our liabilities than previously.

搜索过此篇文章，好像先前都没有范文，或是没有单独罗列出来。只好平地起墙，作为考前最后一篇习作；在限定时间内完成了，并自己稍作过修改，还请各位NN评点。明天上战场，不知如此功力 能否助我勇创“5分”大关？.....拭目以待哦！

最后，万分感谢诸位的支持与鼓励！

I think it is good.

But SARS .... I do not think this example is very appropriate.

Irene_yang

Maybe......You're right!

I'll try to pick more typical reasons instead of the special ones.

Thx a lot!

[此贴子已经被作者于2005-3-30 2:28:42编辑过]