这样的作文会是多少分？

ColdSpring

第一次写托福作文，之前也没有看过模板和样文，想先看一下自己原始的作文情况会是怎样。找了02年5月的题目写了一篇，请指点。（真的没有看过模板和样文啊，如果写的完全不对路，表笑我......)

谢谢了。

When you move to another country, you will follow the country's  customs or keep your own customs.

Today, a tendency is more and more prevailing . Yes, people decide to stay abroad. For a long term vacation, years course study, or emigrant.

A conflict emerges from their daily life. That is, the people who live in another country will hace to face the customs difference between their own and the foreign.

In my opinion, the one who is in this situation should follow the country's customs. For visitors, accept the country's customs will definitely help them know the country better.And, follow the customs will let them taste the local life really. Those will be the  valuable travel experence.

For the person who live in another country for study or emigrated to another country, follow the country's customs is much more important that do  the visitors. As our common sense, human is the social animal, one cann't live in an isolated environment. They need to communicate with others for information, cooperate with others for business ......Even they need to have some entertainment with others to rich their daily life.  Communication, cooperation, entertainment are all the socail behaviors which are related with the country's customs so much. It's very hard to image that  a person who hold a differenct customs can get along with others smoothly.

It should be believed without any doubt that every custom has its own advantages and disadvantages. Following another customs doesn't mean you have to give up your own custom, sometime it is the ability which will help us fit the society well.  

melodybb1224

呵呵，结构不太符合TOEFL考试的思路。

没有关系的，MM先看几篇范文，多写写自然会找到窍门。

ColdSpring

谢谢melodybb.

明天开始看模板，范文......

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以下是引用ColdSpring在2005-3-28 14:58:00的发言：

第一次写托福作文，之前也没有看过模板和样文，想先看一下自己原始的作文情况会是怎样。找了02年5月的题目写了一篇，请指点。（真的没有看过模板和样文啊，如果写的完全不对路，表笑我......)

谢谢了。

When you move to another country, you will follow the country's  customs or keep your own customs.

Today, a tendency is more and more prevailing . Yes, people decide to stay abroad. For a long term vacation, years course study, or emigrant.

A conflict emerges from their daily life. That is, the people who live in another country will hace to face the customs difference between their own and the foreign.

In my opinion, the one who is in this situation should follow the country's customs. For visitors, accept the country's customs will definitely help them know the country better.And, follow the customs will let them taste the local life really. Those will be the  valuable travel experence.

For the person who live in another country for study or emigrated to another country, follow the country's customs is much more important that do  the visitors. As our common sense, human is the social animal, one cann't live in an isolated environment. They need to communicate with others for information, cooperate with others for business ......Even they need to have some entertainment with others to rich their daily life.  Communication, cooperation, entertainment are all the socail behaviors which are related with the country's customs so much. It's very hard to image that  a person who hold a differenct customs can get along with others smoothly.

It should be believed without any doubt that every custom has its own advantages and disadvantages. Following another customs doesn't mean you have to give up your own custom, sometime it is the ability which will help us fit the society well.  

I am afraid this is a 3 score article