TWE 110 请大家多多指点

SarahGao

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Some people prefer to spend most of their time alone. Others like to be with friends most of the time.Do you prefer to spend your time alone or with friends?Use specific reasons to support your answer.

When faced with the choice that spend most of the time alone or with friends, there always exist a social controversy. Some people argue that it is better to be alone because a quieter atmosphere, on the other hand, contrary to this view, others support to be with friends most of the time owing to being away form loneness. Depending on my personality and fondness, I prefer the latter point because there are more advantages.

The biggest merit to be with friends most of the time is that I can share personal feelings with them. Now we are living in a competitive world, which is full of pressure and anxieties. We need to face many difficulties from our work, studies or interpersonal relationship. At this point, it is friends who can give us comfort and help us get rid of those troubles, preventing us form being frustrated and encouraging us to overcome the low tide. Also if we suddenly fall into ill someday and have no parents around, our friends will tend us.

Another incomparable advantage to spend most of time with friends is that people can learn how to get along well with others, and at the same time cultivate a spirit of cooperation. As an old saying goes” Two heads are better than one.” The development of our society needs cooperation, which is an essential ability of people and continued form ancient time when our predecessors hunted together to catch big animals. Suppose one person always stays by himself, how can he know how to communicate others in a proper way and how to infiltrate into the group? Without these techniques, the rest of the members may eliminate him so he cannot acquire knowledge or information from others.

Although sometimes being alone will give people more chance to think for themselves and accomplish works more efficient, I still believe that the advantages of being together with friends outnumber being alone.

Taking into account all these factors, we could safely draw the conclusion that it is better to spend most time with friends, not only can we change feelings and take care of each other but also we can get an precious ability to cooperate with others.

[此贴子已经被作者于2005-3-25 19:48:48编辑过]

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以下是引用SarahGao在2005-3-25 19:47:00的发言：

最近要被作文愁死了,还请大家多帮忙修改,   多谢了  ^-^

Some people prefer to spend most of their time alone. Others like to be with friends most of the time.Do you prefer to spend your time alone or with friends?Use specific reasons to support your answer.

When faced with the choice that spend most of the time alone or with friends, there always exist a social controversy. Some people argue that it is better to be alone because a quieter atmosphere, on the other hand, contrary to this view, others support to be with friends most of the time owing to being away form loneness. Depending on my personality and fondness, I prefer the latter point because there are more advantages.

The biggest merit to be with friends most of the time is that I can share personal feelings with them. Now we are living in a competitive world, which is full of pressure and anxieties. We need to face many difficulties from our work, studies or interpersonal relationship. At this point, it is friends who can give us comfort and help us get rid of those troubles, preventing us form being frustrated and encouraging us to overcome the low tide. Also if we suddenly fall into ill someday and have no parents around, our friends will tend us.

Another incomparable advantage to spend most of time with friends is that people can learn how to get along well with others, and at the same time cultivate a spirit of cooperation. As an old saying goes” Two heads are better than one.” The development of our society needs cooperation, which is an essential ability of people and continued form ancient time when our predecessors hunted together to catch big animals. Suppose one person always stays by himself, how can he know how to communicate others in a proper way and how to infiltrate into the group? Without these techniques, the rest of the members may eliminate him so he cannot acquire knowledge or information from others.

Although sometimes being alone will give people more chance to think for themselves and accomplish works more efficient, I still believe that the advantages of being together with friends outnumber being alone.

Taking into account all these factors, we could safely draw the conclusion that it is better to spend most time with friends, not only can we change feelings and take care of each other but also we can get an precious ability to cooperate with others.

Did you write your essay within 30 min?

SarahGao

呵呵，30分钟写不了这么多的,自己先前改了一下

Veronica_Melody

When faced (facing) with the choice that (either to ) spend most of the time alone or with friends, there always exist (exists) a social controversy. Some people argue that it is better to be alone because (of) a quieter atmosphere, on the other hand, contrary to this view, (too redundant, on the other hand, and contrary to this view, mean exactly the same thing) others support (prefer) to be with friends most of the time owing to being away form (from) loneness (loneliness) . Depending (According to) on my personality and fondness, I prefer the latter point (please restate your point) because there are more advantages.

The biggest merit to be with friends most of the time is that I can share personal feelings with them. Now we are living in a competitive world, which is full of pressure (pressures) and anxieties. We need to face many difficulties from our work, studies or interpersonal relationship. At this point, it is friends who can give us comfort and help us (to) get rid of those troubles, preventing us form being frustrated and encouraging us to overcome the low tide. (this sentence it a bit too long) Also if we suddenly fall into ill (become sick?) someday and have no parents around, our friends will tend (to help) us.

Another incomparable advantage to spend most of time with friends is that people can learn how to get along well with others, and at the same time cultivate a spirit of cooperation. As an old saying goes” Two heads are better than one.” The development of our society needs cooperation, which is an essential ability of people and continued form ancient time when our predecessors hunted together to catch big animals. (??) Suppose one person always stays by himself (him or herself) , how can he know how to communicate others in a proper way and how to infiltrate into the group? Without these techniques, the rest of the members may eliminate him so he cannot acquire knowledge or information from others.

Although sometimes being alone will give people more chance to think for themselves and accomplish works more efficient (efficiently), I still believe that the advantages of being together with friends outnumber being alone.

Taking into account all these factors, we could safely draw the conclusion that it is better to spend most time with friends, not only can we change feelings and take care of each other but also we can get an precious ability to cooperate with others.

SarahGao

多谢版主的修改,错了好多地方.好发愁呀!

Veronica_Melody

it's okay. good luck and keep practicing!!

Veronica_Melody

p.s. i may go into law. so i'm extremely picky when it comes to language.

don't worry. just hang in there.

SarahGao

It's so kind of you , thanks for your help again. To tell the truth, I regret that I did not put much emphasis on my writing ability very much.But I will try my best from now on.

SarahGao

p.s.   I admire your writing ability and achievement very much, I hope I can learn something from you