TWE097, 30分钟, 请评分,请指教,谢谢-Zeros修改标题，见谅

jackq

97. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teachers should be paid according to how much their students learn. Give specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

When it comes to the notion that teachers should be paid according to how much their students learn, I find it hard to agree with this idea. Although I understand the goal of this idea is to improve teachers' performance and quality of education, but it is improper and difficult to measure teacher's performance by examining how much their students learn, and can lead to some problems.

First of all, it is hard to measure how much student learned from their teachers. The common practice is to conduct examinations. However, what examination can test is only a small portion of what students have learned, comparing the greater deal of knowledge taught. Is not perfectly right to say that the student who have highest score in the class know more than other students, for most of the knowledge that students gained are not tested in exams. Since it is hard to measure how much knowledge that student learned from their teachers, it is equally hard to qualify their teacher's performance in this way as well.

Secondly, suppose even there is a way to measure how much student have learned from their teachers, however, it is still improper to connect teachers' performance with it. Because how much student learned not only related by teachers' performance but also by how much effort the students paid as well. If students do not study hard and not trying to learn as much as they can get from their teachers, it is hard to imagine that they will get much knowledge. On the other hand, some really good students who study in an effective way independently are able to learn quite much knowledge even they were taught by an unqualified or irresponsible teacher. Students' individual effort also results in a great deal in their studies.

Last but not least, it is hard to measure and equalize how much students learn in different courses. It is undeniable that from different courses, students learn different knowledge. Students do learn a great deal of knowledge from informative course such as history and literature. However, they learn less information but get more experience in courses such as music and physical education. According to the idea that teachers should be paid upon how much their student learned, teachers who teach music and physical education will unequally paid much less than those who teach history and literature.

In summary, regarding the actual complexity of education quality measurement, including how to measure the quantity of knowledge that students gained, how much is the teachers' effort that result in the knowledge of students and how to compare the different efforts that teachers made in various disciplines, it is improper to decide how much teachers should be paid simply according to how much their students learn.

farsuccess

97. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Teachers should be paid according to how much their students learn. Give specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

When it comes to the notion that teachers should be paid according to how much their students learn, I find it hard to agree with（agree to some idea; agree with sb.） this idea. Although I understand the goal of this idea is to improve teachers' performance and quality of education, but it is improper and difficult to measure teacher's performance by examining how much their students learn, and can lead to some problems (As a result, such criteria is sure to bring some problems to us.)

First of all, it is hard to measure how much student learned from their teachers. The common practice is to conduct examinations. However, what examination can test is only a small portion of what students have learned, comparing (with) the greater deal of knowledge taught. (It ) is not perfectly right to say that the student who have (the) highest score in the class know more than (any) other students, for (because) most of the knowledge that students gained are not tested in exams. Since it is hard to measure how much knowledge that student learned from their teachers, it is equally hard to qualify their teacher's performance in this way as well.

Secondly, suppose even there is a way to measure how much student have learned from their teachers, however, it is still improper(不要重复这个词，换一个，比如：inappropriate) to connect teachers' performance with it. Because how much student learned (is) not only related by teachers' performance but also by how much effort the students paid as well (既然用了 not only ……but also, 就要用平行结构。students’ efforts). If students do not study hard and not trying (and 的前后要不就是两个句子，两个名词，要不就是结构相同的谓语。你的谓语在哪里)to learn as much as they can get from their teachers, it is hard to imagine that they will get much knowledge. On the other hand, some really good students who study in an effective way independently are able to learn quite much knowledge even they were taught by an unqualified or irresponsible teacher（s）. Students' individual effort(s) also results in a great deal (?) in their studies.

Last but not least, it is hard to measure and equalize how much students learn in different courses. It is undeniable that from different courses, students learn different knowledge. Students do learn a great deal of knowledge from informative course such as history and literature. However, they learn less information but get more experience in courses such as music and physical education. According to the idea that teachers should be paid upon how much their student learned, teachers who teach music and physical education will unequally paid much less than those who teach history and literature.

In summary, regarding the actual complexity of education quality measurement, including how to measure the quantity of knowledge that students gained, how much is the teachers' effort that result in the knowledge of students and how to compare the different efforts that teachers made in various disciplines, it is improper to decide how much teachers should be paid simply according to how much their students learn.

几点建议：

1．    It is 句型用的太多

2．    注意句子结构

3．    最后一段你好象是一句话，不好，应当拆成几句，免得看着费劲，而且容易出错。

jackq

Hello, Farsuccess,

Thank you for your good comments, it helps a lot. These problems come up when I have to draft my essay in thirty minutes. Any suggestion on how to solve these problems are mostly welcomed.

Cheers,

Jack Q

____ Revised topic 097____

When it comes to the notion that teachers should be paid according to how much their students learn, I feel such a negative attitude. Although I understand the purpose of this idea is to improve teachers' performance and the quality of education, it is implausible that teacher's performance can be measured, simply by examining how much their students have learned. Consequently, such criteria are sure to result in problems.

First of all, how much student learned from their teachers can hardly be measured. The common practice is to conduct examinations. However, what examination can probe is only a small portion of knowledge, comparing with what students have learned from their teachers. The student who has the highest score not always knows more than other students, for not all of the knowledge that students gained are measured in exams. Since test results are unable to show how much that student actually learned, in the same manner, test results are unable to qualify their teacher's performance as well.

Secondly, suppose even there is a better way to measure how much student can learn from their teachers, however, connecting teachers' performance with it is still unadvisable, because how much student will learn largely depends on the efforts of students themselves. Without the strong will to study hard and learn more from their teachers, students are not supposed to get much knowledge, even if their have a well qualified teacher. On the other hand, some good students are able to study independently and effectively to acquire quite much knowledge even they were taught by unqualified or irresponsible teachers. Generally, good study results come greatly from students' individual efforts apart from teachers’ too.

Last but not least, it is hard to measure and equalize how much students learn in different courses, for the nature and amount of knowledge varies. Students are supposed to learn a great deal of knowledge from informative courses such as history and literature. However, they learn less information but get more experience in courses such as music and physical education. According to the argument that teachers should be paid upon how much their student learned, teachers who teach different courses would be unequally paid because of the nature of various disciplines. And, this would inevitably exert a negative impact on teachers’ performance, and consequently, on total educational quality.

In summary, regarding the actual complexity of education quality measurement mentioned above, which involves the measurement of education result, the effective teachers' effort, the different nature of various disciplines and the possible negative consequence, it is arbitrary to decide how much teachers should be paid simply according to how much their students learn.

farsuccess

TWE 97

When it comes to the notion that teachers should be paid according to how much their students learn, I feel （have）such a negative attitude. Although I understand the purpose of this idea is to improve teachers' performance and the quality of education, it is implausible that teacher's performance can be measured, simply by examining how much their students have learned. Consequently, such criteria are sure to result in problems.

First of all, how much student learned from their teachers can hardly be measured. The common practice (method) is to conduct examinations. However, what examination can probe is only a small portion of knowledge, comparing with what students have learned from their teachers. The student who has the highest score not always knows(你的这里应当是谓语，应为 does not know) more than other(s) students, for not all of the knowledge that students gained are measured in exams. Since test results are unable to show how much that student(s) actually learned, in the same manner, test results are unable to qualify their teacher's performance as well.

Secondly, suppose even there is a better way to measure how much student can learn from their teachers, however, connecting teachers' performance with it is still unadvisable, because how much student will learn largely depends on the efforts of students themselves. Without the strong will to study hard and learn more from their teachers, students are not supposed to (这个词组的意思是“不准” ，不是“不可能”)get much knowledge, even if their have a well qualified teacher. On the other hand, some good students are able to study independently and effectively to acquire quite much knowledge even they were taught by unqualified or irresponsible teachers. Generally, good study results come greatly from students' individual efforts apart from（instead of） teachers’ too.

Last but not least, it is hard to measure and equalize how much students learn in different courses, for the nature and amount of knowledge varies. Students are supposed to learn a great deal of knowledge from informative courses such as history and literature. However, they learn less information but get more experience in courses such as music and physical education. According to the argument that teachers should be paid upon how much their student learned, teachers who teach different courses would be unequally paid because of the nature of various disciplines. And, this would inevitably exert a negative impact on teachers’ performance, and consequently, on total educational quality.

In summary, regarding the actual complexity of education quality measurement mentioned above, which involves the measurement of education result, the effective teachers' effort, the different nature of various disciplines and the possible negative consequence, it is arbitrary to decide how much teachers should be paid simply according to how much their students learn

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jackq

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