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crearydavid

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crearydavid

16. What's your opinion on a new restaurant built in your neighborhood?
structure of the essay
1.outline the back ground and my attitude
2.reason one and support it
3.reason two and support it

Although there have been several restaurants in my community, I am
personally in favor of opening a new one and believe that will benefit
us in many ways such as more selective choice for having food, growing
the competition among the restaurants and creating more job
opportunities for the local.

    

The existing restaurants service the people with respective flavor, but
a new restaurant will bring us a new extra food style which make us
more choice when we want to dinner outside. Of course this is quite
attractive for the people who are particular about food. Even for the
busy people who always eat outside at restaurant, adding a new one
means not only better appetite for food but also a more balanced diet
due to the more choice.

    

Another benefit that a new restaurant can bring to the local consumers
is from the effects of competition among restaurants themselves. The
intensive competition will contribute to better service level and even
more lower price, so the consumers will enjoy high quality food at
reasonable expense. At meanwhile, I believe that the existing
restaurants will obviously have to improve themselves to make
self-perfection if they don't want to be eliminated by the competition.

    

Finally, since the new restaurant require local labor of carpenter,
plumber, and electrician, it will offer jobs, the consequence is
reducing employment pressure of local community.

(字数 225，好像有些不足，而且结尾部分太生硬了， 通篇句式简单
淘汰： eliminate
各自的： respective )

crearydavid

19. Highways or public transportation, which should be given preferential financing?
Should
governments spend more money on improving roads and highways, or should
governments spend more money on improving public transportation (buses,
trains, subways)? Why? Use specific reasons and details to develop your
essay.


words: to relieve traffic congestion; mounting;promptly; imperative
    
           feasible. immobilized(使不能动)

    

1. summarize the traffic condition to draw out personal opinion

2. support reason one. traffic congestion

3. support reason two. environmental concerns

4. support reason three the safety concern

    

Due to the rapid economic development of China, one aspect of the
infrastructure of the country, transportation facility, is imperative
to designed efficiently to satisfy both the current and future demand.
 
The first problem that government needs to answer is which one
should be given preferential financing? Highways or public
transportation. In my opinion, China should focus on improving public
transportation instead of developing highways. The followings are my
reasons.

    

The population of China is the biggest in the world, which means public
transportation makes more sense compared to private transportation-high
ways. As Chinese, we all have the suffering experiences of traffic
congestion, wasting time and destroying our good mood in the jungle of
cars. It is obvious that the only feasible solution is developing
transportation facilities based on public not private. The mounting
private cars can do nothing but aggravating the crisis. Some people may
argue that public transportation such as tube way, bus, railway are
usually uncomfortable, dirty, and scheduled, which will prompt person
to have own cars. Well, it is true now, but we can develop the system
by using fast-growing technology and management method in the future to
solve the inconvenience.

    

We know that one big source of city air pollution is auto-mobile. In
the rush hours, numerous private cars move on slowly, sometime even
stop. It means that these cars produce more pollution while they spent
long and unnecessary time on the road because the traffic jam. Adding
more public bus will relieve this crisis and will pollute less. The
eco-friendly public transportation also benefit people by reducing
their cost on buying cars and car maintenance.

    

For long distance travel, if we concern about the safty factor, public traveling is also a preferable choice. long time driving will wear
people out, the consequence are accidents causing injuries or even
death. On the contrary, public transportation's professional driving
system can provide more reliable solutions for the tired and dozy traveler.

    

字数320 有点进步
 

lute25

参与你的写作交流，亦是督促我自己。内容点差不多，楼主不妨多用些句型。

Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways, or should governments spend more money on improving public transportation (buses, trains, subways)? Why? Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay.

 

   Should governments spend more money on improving roads and highways or public transportation. It is no doubt that the broader the roads are, the more convenient for the drivers, and traffic jams could be decreased relatively as well. For the responsibility of government in my mind, however, spending more money on public transportation may account more for the benefit of taxpayers.

    I do not deny, as a driver, that I will keep my patient and sensibility when I meet the traffic jams in the metropolis, or get lost in the complex narrow passes in the country. Obviously, with a better road condition, say more roads and highways or advanced roadway management, divers obtain more convenience. While at the same time, I can not ignore the fact that all the divers of most countries put together occupy only a fraction of the population, in another word, most of people prefer to the public traffic service. It is truth that improving the public traffic systems is necessary, and what is more, governments who receive tax from citizens and serve for the public should be in charge of this network either.

   Improving public traffic helps to decrease the traffic accidents. According the traffic surveys around the world, the number of traffic accident each year is due more to private cars in comparison with public vehicle. Public traffic seems to do less harm to us, because it is under the professional management and supervision. Take the subway for example, it operates according to the schedule and receives timed tending. And its divers are often professional, skilled and responsible, and it is impossible for them to diver the train after drinking.

    On the other hand, improving the public traffic services have a big contribution to the city environment as well. It encourages people to give up their lovely private cars which bring noise, nauseated gas and traffic jams, but to use the public traffic instead. Under the trend of greenism, public vehicles are often environmentally designed. Take the bus of large city for example, they make use of energy-saving fuel, which produce less waste gas while more propulsion. And so does the subway which travels under ground has no devotion to make noise for us.

    Governments who make funds from us and service for us should be engaged in the work for our behalf. And the work of public traffic improvement is a good chance for them to realize their duties.

crearydavid

共同进步哈~

crearydavid

12. Why people visit museums?
Many people
visit museums when they travel to new places. Why do you think people
visit museums? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

words：
enrich the mind. inspiration


structure of essay
1. summarize the main reasons of visiting museums.
2.reason one: learning new culture
3.reason two: part of the schedule
4.reason three: looking for inspiration

Now
days, many people take touring to spent their vacations. One of travel
programs is to visit a local museum when they are new to the
destination. Museums enable people to explore collections for learning,
enjoyment, and inspiration within  only a short amount of time.

Absolutely,
the museum can serve the public as a education place. The rich
collections on the essence of the culture and history heritage enable
visitor learn in many aspects. Maybe before visiting the museum we
already have taken a glance on the books, but we will surely get more
deep and vivid understanding from the exhibitions in the museum. In
some special museums, they even provide duplicates to visitor to feel by hands or other sense way.

it's true that for the family visit, not only parents enjoy the museum, but also their child find it interesting by this way.

As
we known, most accessible art treasures in the world are conserved in
the museums, for the people who love art, art piece museums are best
and first choice of visiting. I know some friends can go into the same
museum for several continuous days,
and that is the magic of art, magic of museum where the art treasure
are exhibited. Specially, the young artist go to the museum for
inspiration, staring at the master piece will spirit up them to create
individual style.
 
Another more common reason to visit museum
are due to the notability of the museum. Some museums are just so
famous that themselves can be one top scenery spot, for example, the
Louvre museum and the museum of terracotta warriors and horses. Who
will miss these spots when they are new in Paris and Xian city even
under the situation that they are not keenly interested in culture and
art? And I believe the visiting are well worthwhile enough to give up
other programs if the time is limited.

    
 
字数 317
晕，博物馆我都不怎么去的，哈，绞尽脑汁写出来了，看来胡诌的能力提高啦，加油加油。
卢浮宫 the Louvre
兵马俑博物馆  the museum of terracotta warriors and horses. 好长啊，要我说就叫 The Qin , 就可以了嘛， 又有气势