leahwen的作文贴，小白求批改

LEAH93

作文一直弱项，混过了GMAT，托福作文算总分的，不能再混了。求批改~

LEAH93

loutian 发表于 2014-11-29 22:48
楼主，逗号后面要空一格的

哎呀，真的么我考试都是直接打没有空格的。。。会扣分不？

loutian

楼主，逗号后面要空一格的

LEAH93

TPO19 综合写作

The reading passage states that advertisers recruit buzzers who promote products to people they familiar with should not be doing this kind of thing.However,the lecturer thinks otherwise.

Firstly,in the reading passage,the critics claim that buzzers do not tell customers the truth about  products.They are doing this just for money.In the listening passage,the speaker claims that only people who used the product and thought it was great are able to be buzzers,which means they are telling their true experiences.Thus,customers will still get the correct information about the buzzed product.

In addition,in the reading passage,consumers tend to be less critically as they are endorsed by buzzers,which will let their guards down since advertisements are not in print or on TV.Thus,this situation will harm them in some ways.In the listening passage,the lecturer suggests that consumers actually ask lots of questions such as the price,quality and so on.On a day-to-day level,they seem to be more suspicious than some critics think.

As a final point,the reading passage brings up that buzzing will cause a severely mistrust around people.In the listening passage,the speaker presents that only companies that produce good products are able to recruit buzzers.As the promoters have good experience in using the products personally,they become more trustful.

In conclusion,the reading passage misleads the concept in some aspects.On the contrary,the speaker thinks buzzing is a decent way to promote products.

LEAH93

今天练的，TPO22独立写作
老师该不该在课堂上向学生传播自己的社会或政治观点。

With the dramatic development of news exposure,ordinary people like us are capable of getting tons of informations from all kinds of medium.Suddenly,we enjoy the feeling of digest events that are currently happening across world.As a result,we generate our own perspectives in terms of social or political views.It is not uncommon that we all like to share our opinions with others and wish we are on the same page.However,this wishful thinking may cause trouble in some circumstances.

Even though everyone should be respected for their own view no matter it is social or political,teacher,as a guidance,should focus more on the academic orientation in the classroom.As we all know,teaching konwledge is the hallmark of school.Especially in this present-day society,the increasing competition gains momentum between students,which requires they absorb as much as knowledge in the classroom.Therefore,there is no space for teathers to make their personal views known to students.

Apart from overly expose their own views towards some aspects,teachers may inevitably express bias,which will affect students' judgment. In some cases,the students are too young to transform the latest events into their own understandable standpoints.They are at a phase of learning the mechanism of the world instead of picking a side on some social or political incidents.Instead of imposing the fixed ideas,teachers better off letting them sharpen their intellect by themselves.

Also,It will cause reputation damage of schools as long as parents find out the personal "statement" of teachers and complain about it.Perhaps,some parents consider the teachers' expression a kind of brainwashing.Children are like blank pages,to coin a phrase.Teachers may stifle their creativity by misinforming about certain perspectives.

Although,it is arguable that teachers assert personal social or political views in the classroom aptly will arouse students' interests in international events,teachers may be questioned as the authority figures who give lectures to students.Meanwhile,students should develop their own views towards the world instead of listening to others.So i strongly believe teachers should stay out of social or political views in a classroom setting.