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9.1
综合写作TPO11
The reading passage cites a recent study to illustrated that literature reading decline, and this trend will be more regrettable because literature can provide intellectual stimulation exclusively. However the lecture professor thought this statement is not convincing for following three reasons:

First, she doesn’t agree with that the literature is the only form of reading genres that can stimulate the intellect. She argues that the Science, history, political analysis are also as creative as literature, can exercise imagination and can provide intellectual stimulation too. We cannot said that they are not good books.not only the literature benefits the reading republic.

Furthermore,the passage states that people nowadays inclined to read the best sellers, which are superficial , with poor quality, and intellectually undemanding and that people inclined to divert their time to trivial forms of entertainment, such as television, music video and web page.the professor strongly disagree with this point. She argues that the culture has changed.there are many valuable materials other than poem and novel,such as music, movie.although they are not written, these arts are worthy of spending the time.

Finally, the passage argues that because of poor standard of readers, literature reading has a trend of decline.as a result, publishers invest less money in literature. The professor points out that the author of literature is at fault of less investment.because their work is so difficulty to understand that even earlier generation would not read them.  







独立：you can know a lot about a person through the types of friends this person has

There is a proverb in china “if you want to know the final card of a person, please look his fiends”. That means the friends around a person will reflect most of characters of this person. Friends often have similar values of life, similar qualities and similar hobbies.

There is also a proverb in china “who stays near vermilion get bright red and who stays near ink gets stain black”. A group of people often have similar values of life. I definitely have experiences that only the friends with similar values of life can last to the end. I have many dream for my life and I want to make efforts to fulfilled the dreams. The friends who once studied or worked together with me but didn’t want to spend much time to chase dream but instead enjoy life, will go further and further away from me. we do different things in our leisure time, and gradually, we became to have no common languages. Obviously, It is different values of life caused this change. So you can know the type of a person through the life values of his/her friends.

Furthermore, the friends often have similar qualities. The person who together with industrious one will not lazy, who together with positive one will not be depressed, and who together with a outstanding one will not mediocre. One of famous 80’s entrepreneur in china Chen Ou once was MBA of Stanford. He wanted to create the first online shopping mall of cosmetics. He decided to persuade his best friend Yusen Dai to join him. Because they have similar qualities, they understand each other well and appreciate each other. They cooperate smoothly and finally get a big success. In 2014, their company landed on New York Stock Exchange.

Finally, friends often have similar hobbies. Think of your friends, how you know them at the first time? Generally, we know a new friend in a party, or a club, such dancing party, KTV, tennis match, library , journey etc. That because we have same hobbies, which give the chance to us to know each other. I have many friends in business school, because i like to attend the lecture about business management. I also have many friends who are adept in dance because I joined several dancing club. The same hobbies link us together.

Well, Birds of a feather flock together. We can know a lot about a person through the friends he/she has.

zyr220

angla 发表于 2014-10-12 23:25
谢谢帅哥，好感动啊。都改完了。我估计要明天才能给你改了。真是抱歉啊。。。今天的活现在还没有干完 ...

木事，哈哈，注意休息哈。

angla

zyr220 发表于 2014-10-12 22:18
10.11 独立

the readingpassage suggests three solutions to resolve the decline of the Torreya tree ...

谢谢帅哥，好感动啊。都改完了。我估计要明天才能给你改了。真是抱歉啊。。。今天的活现在还没有干完

zyr220

10.11  独立
Whichway would you like to take to improve your health?
A eatmore healty food
B domore excercise
Creduce stress


Human’shealth affects thelongevity of the life. People who chase healthy life style are increasing. many ways can obtain the objectof improve health(many ways 是个方法不能得到结果，逻辑不对吧，得到结果的应该是人吧？能不能改成 Peoplecan achieve a goal of improve health in may ways, such as…), such as eating more healthy food, doing moreexercises and reducing stress. All of them are the effective method to keephealth. But form (from) my perspective, I think that doing moreexercise is the most beneficial means to improve health.

To beginwith, doing exercise can help us improve the function of the heart-lung system,which is the most significant (形容词后加一个名词system吧) for our health and longevity. Every time, whenpeople do exercise, the heart will beat quickly, and the lung will breathdeeply. In this process, the capability of heart and lung will be enhanced.Many researches show that people usually do exercise will have less possibilityto suffer the heart and lung disease (改成个对比句Many researches show that the more exerciseyou do, the less possibility of heart and lung disease you will have稍微工整一点). Especially,for the old people, who are vulnerable for those kinds of diseases. (姐姐，这句没主句，我随便加个主句哈：Doing exercise isimportant, especially for the old people, who are vulnerable for those kinds ofdisease.) Moreover, the health situation can be wholly improved. forinstance, doing exercise regularly can help people control the weight, as aresult, reduce the incidence of some disease caused by obesity. Obesity is theessential issue for people nowadays. It is obesity that cause the highcholesterol, hypertension, (and) hyperglycemia. These three-high are the mostimportant death causes for older people. doing more exercise will reduce thepossibility of obesity. Hence, keep a healthy body.

Inaddition, doing exercise can help us an enjoy the process of improving thehealth, as a result, has effects for a long-term. To keep health, all thepeople face the difficulty of persistence. Majority of people will give up inthe midway. Therefore, the persisting to keep health need a driving force. Somepeople doing exercise are due to (be due to搭配是错的，改成用because they want to have perfect吧) perfect bodyfigure, some are due to like that sports, and other are due to makingfriends,etc. People doing exercise to keep fit will not feel boring. For me,doing exercise is totally the most important way to keep fit. I usually go toswim and dance, because they are so interesting. They not only make me fit, butalso give me much happy time with my friends and help me to be attractiveperson(姐姐，not only …but also … 两个并列挺好的，后面再加一个and 并列确实没见过). I really enjoy it,（it 无指代） so I persist to swim and dance every week formore than 6 years. In those exercising days, I has improved myhealth unconsciously. (I has 错，应该是I have)

Admittedly,many other ways alsocan benefit health. More and more people concern with the health food, anotherword to say—green food, which has less pesticide or has less calorie. thismethod is a good way to reduce the accumulation of toxin. However, it has lesseffect to improve health. Similarly, even though reducing stress is essentialfor our health and can reduce the incidence of some mental disease, it still isnot the most effective way to improve health. In conclusion, doing exercise, inmy view, is the best way to improve health among these three ways.

zyr220

angla 发表于 2014-10-12 20:28
TPO18

the reading passage suggests three solution to resolve the decline of the Torreya tree in the ...

10.11 独立

the readingpassage suggests three solutions to resolve the decline of the Torreya tree inthe Florida. the professor in the conversation argues the same issue. However,opposite the statements of the passage, the professor thinks that these threesolutions are completely unsatisfactory.

firstly, although the passage presents the solutionthat reestablish Torreya in the same location, because the climate in thenorthern part of Florida is wet and cool, which (where) is suitable for the growth of the Torreya,the professor points out that the first solution is useless. Sincethe climate of the northern Florida is easily to be affected by the climatesurrounding the area, such as the global warming, which will make the climatein this area drier and warmer. that is to say, the suitable climates will notbe same as we expected.

secondly, the professor gives a similar example of black locust tree toexplain that the second solution is also can't be accepted. even though thepassage gives the evidence that moving the Torreya to the totally differenceplace, where the temperature is cooler and Torreya can thrive in thisenvironment.
(开头是even though是连词，然后跟一个where从句，感觉缺了主句，and两边的成分感觉差别有点大，没法成为一个并列的结构。能不能改成：

Even though the author of the passage gives theevidence that Torreya can be moved to a totally difference place, where thetemperature is cooler, and that the tree can thrive in the new environment, heomits the outcome of introducing a new species to a location.

Where 从句非限定修饰place，the tree 指代Torreya，这样改了两边平行比较好看，读着个人感觉顺一点。但是这样改了还是缺主句，觉得可以把后面一句直接加进来，两句话主语一样都是passage，但是前面后面都用有点重复，不知道用啥替换好，用it的话可能会指代tree而混乱，所以索性把前面的passage换成the author of passage，后面用he。仅供参考) Unfortunately, the passage omits theoutcome of introducing a new species to a location. （这句就合并到前面了）Theprofessor quotes the experience about the black locust tree,which is moved to a new location, kill a lot of local trees (感觉可以替换成native plants). （The professor quotes theexperience about the transplant of black locust tree, which is moved to a newlocation and killed a lot of local trees. 个人意见，随便改改，不喜勿怪啊。。。）Thus, thissolution is not good for the survival of other important species which isdeclining.

finally, the professor deny the practicalpossibility of the third solution. admittedly, as the statement in the passage,the research center can protect the Torreya temporarily. nevertheless, thetrees in the research center are vulnerable to disease. the research centerhave no (not) enough capacity for  the large anddiverse population. the tree can not be protected for a long-term.

angla

10.11
Which way would you like to take to improve your health?
A eat more healty food
B do more excercise
C reduce stress


Human’s health affect the longevity of the life. People who chase healthy life style are increasing.many ways can obtain the object of improve health, such as eating more healthy food, doing more exercises and reducing stress. All of them are the effective method to keep health. But form my perspective, I think that doing more exercise is the most beneficial means to improve health.

To begin with, doing exercise can help us improve the function of the heart-lung system, which is the most significant for our health and longevity. Every time, when people do exercise, the heart will beat quickly, and the lung will breath deeply. In this process, the capability of heart and lung will be enhanced. Many researches show that people usually do exercise will have less possibility to suffer the heart and lung disease.especially, for the old people, who are vulnerable for those kinds of diseases. Moreover, the health situation can be wholly improved.for instance, doing exercise regularly can help people control the weight, as a result, reduce the incidence of some disease caused by obesity. Obesity is the essential issue for people nowadays. It is obesity that cause the high cholesterol, hypertension,hyperglycemia. These three-high are the most important death causes for older people.doing more exercise will reduce the possibility of obesity. Hence, keep a healthy body.

In addition, doing exercise can help us an enjoy the process of improving the health, as a result, has effects for a long-term. To keep health, all the people face the difficulty of persistence. Majority of people will give up in the midway. Therefore, the persisting to keep health need a driving force. Some people doing exercise are due to perfect body figure, some are due to like that sports, and other are due to making friends,etc. People doing exercise to keep fit will not feel boring. For me, doing exercise is totally the most important way to keep fit. I usually go to swim and dance, because they are so interesting. They not only make me fit, but also give me much happy time with my friends and help me to be attractive person. I really enjoy it, so I persist to swim and dance every week for more than 6 years. In those exercising days, I has improved my health unconsciously.

Admittedly, many other way also can benefit health. More and more people concern with the health food, another word to say—green food,which has less pesticide or has less calorie.this method is a good way to reduce the accumulation of toxin. However, it has less effect to improve health. Similarly,even though reducing stress is essential for our health and can reduce the incidence of some mental disease, it still is not the most effective way to improve health. In conclusion,doing exercise, in my view, is the best way to improve health among these three ways.

angla

TPO18

the reading passage suggests three solution to resolve the decline of the Torreya tree in the Florida. the professor in the conversation argues the same issue. However, opposite the statements of the passage, the professor thinks that these three solutions are completely unsatisfactory.

firstly,although the passage presents the solution that reestablish Torreya in the same location, because the climate in the northern part of Florida is wet and cool, which is suitable for the growth of the Torreya, the professor point out that the first solution is useless. Since the climate of the northern Florida is easily to be affected by the climate surrounding the area, such as the global warming, which will make the climate in this area drier and warmer. that is to say, the suitable climates will not be same as we expected.

secondly,the professor give a similar example of black locust tree to explain that the second solution is also can't be accepted. even though the passage gives the evidence that moving the Torreya to the totally difference place, where the temperature is cooler and Torreya can thrive in this environment. unfortunately, the passage omit the outcome of introducing a new species to a location. the professor quote the experience about the black locust tree, which is moved to a new location, kill a lot of local trees.this solution is not good for the survival of other important species which is declining.

finally, the professor deny the practical possibility of the third solution. admittedly, as the statement in the passage,the research center can protect the Torreya temporarily.nevertheless,the trees in the research center are vulnerable to disease.the research center have no enough capacity for  the large and diverse population.the tree can not be protected for a long-term.

loverony713

angla 发表于 2014-10-6 23:31
People who have developed many different kinds of skills are more successful than people who focus o ...

People who have developed many different kinds of skills are more successful than people who focus on ony one skill.

As the development of the society, the competition is increasingly fierce. the demands of personal’s skills are diversified.the skills are not only essential to person’s career,but also influential to individual’s life.From my perspective, I totally agree with that people who have developed many different kinds of skill will be more successful than people who focus on only one skill.

To begin with,more skills guarantee more chance to succeed for career. The economy situation is unpredictable. as a result, all of us don’t know when we are possible to lose current job or whether our current profession can sustain to a lifelong. Gasping(拼写) more skills can help us adapt the changing. My friend John is a typical example. He is a publisher, which is a sough-after occupation（土鳖了这是what 还有说人是occupation不好吧？求普及） in 10year ago. However, nowadays, due to rapid development of the internet, he is difficult to make live. Fortunately, he is dept in(我查了一下 不知道是不是拼错了? 我知道你想表达的意思..) programming, which he studied for（as） second major in university. （加一个过渡词吧）He change（三单） his career smoothly.（结果可以再多说几句 亦或是对比论证 ：如果不..就不会..） Aside from this, people who have more skills also have advantage when apply the job. Companies always prefer to employ those who can give （provide？）entrepreneur extra values, which can largely decrease the hiring cost.for example, a large number of companies intend to hire a person who expert（三单） in foreign language, no matter this position is belong to which department（论述的不太好 我觉得应该说 除了本身专业外 如果有另一门外语锦上添花就好了）. for me, fortunately, i am skills in English and Japanese.usually I am easy to succeed to gain a job chance. Furthermore, having more skills inevitably become（不应该用become 可以说是is a critical factor之类的） the most significant factor for success of the life. Many distinguished persons, such as Steve Jobs, Bill Clinton, Jack,Ma as so on , require to cope with many kinds of affairs. They need to know economy, politic, management etc. Only mastering many skills can they succeed in their career.（还是不够具体... 不过前面说了那么多了 这里罗列一下也还行...)

In addition,  More skills help us succeed in our life. (其实很难说生活中success是什么样，家庭和谐？朋友很多？我觉得你可以侧重写一下你的个人魅力 生活中的 读完有感^^) Everyone will be fond of versatile person.together with them, the life will not be boring. All the members of my family have their own special skills: my mother is good at cooking;my father is expert in play flute;my brother like the guitar; and I am a good singer. Every weekend, we get together and play the music.that is so wonderful. Moreover, gasping more skills will give us more chance to know more friends. One skill will bring us to one group of people. So, if you have many kinds of skills, you can know a large number of people and you can improve yourself by studying from different kind of people. I am a completely versatile person.therefore,i have many friends who are dancers, friends who enjoy singing, friends who are expert in medicine and pharmacy as so on. All of them have different merits,which are the objects i can learn from.（你的重点应该是 你的versatile如何让你在生活成功的 感觉这句话没有表达你想说的意思）

Needless to say,skills are so important to our lives and careers.gasping more skill is a good way to win the competition and the approach to succeed.

angla

People who have developed many different kinds of skills are more successful than people who focus on ony one skill.

As the development of the society, the competition is increasingly fierce. the demands of personal’s skills are diversified.the skills are not only essential to person’s career,but also influential to individual’s life.From my perspective, I totally agree with that people who have developed many different kinds of skill will be more successful than people who focus on only one skill.

To begin with,more skills guarantee more chance to succeed for career. The economy situation is unpredictable. as a result, all of us don’t know when we are possible to lose current job or whether our current profession can sustain to a lifelong. Gasping more skills can help us adapt the changing. My friend John is a typical example. He is a publisher, which is a sough-after occupation in 10year ago. However, nowadays, due to rapid development of the internet, he is difficult to make live. Fortunately, he is dept in programming, which he studied for second major in university. He change his career smoothly. Aside from this, people who have more skills also have advantage when apply the job. Companies always prefer to employ those who can give entrepreneur extra values, which can largely decrease the hiring cost.for example, a large number of companies intend to hire a person who expert in foreign language, no matter this position is belong to which department. for me, fortunately, i am skills in English and Japanese.usually I am easy to succeed to gain a job chance. Furthermore, having more skills inevitably become the most significant factor for success of the life. Many distinguished persons, such as Steve Jobs, Bill Clinton, Jack,Ma as so on , require to cope with many kinds of affairs. They need to know economy, politic, management etc. Only mastering many skills can they succeed in their career.

In addition,  More skills help us succeed in our life. Everyone will be fond of versatile person.together with them, the life will not be boring. All the members of my family have their own special skills: my mother is good at cooking;my father is expert in play flute;my brother like the guitar; and I am a good singer. Every weekend, we get together and play the music.that is so wonderful. Moreover, gasping more skills will give us more chance to know more friends. One skill will bring us to one group of people. So, if you have many kinds of skills, you can know a large number of people and you can improve yourself by studying from different kind of people. I am a completely versatile person.therefore,i have many friends who are dancers, friends who enjoy singing, friends who are expert in medicine and pharmacy as so on. All of them have different merits,which are the objects i can learn from.

Needless to say,skills are so important to our lives and careers.gasping more skill is a good way to win the competition and the approach to succeed.

angla

10.5日 TPO24
the reading passage investigates the issue— whether the materials in fossils are the tissues remains of the T.rex.the professor's lecture focus on the same topic. However, he insists that  the identification of the research in the passage is doubtful. And in his lecture, he uses three specified points to buttress his viewpoint.

First of all, the professor points out that the channels inside the bone are probably not the location of blood vessels but the colonies of bacteria.even though the passage suggests that the finding of organic substance inside the channels possibly represent the remains of blood vessels, the professor argues that those organic materials can be the residuals of bacteria.this is because bacteria lived inside the bone and leave behind the trace of organic materials, which means the channels are the colonies of bacteria.


Moreover,the professor indicates that the spheres in the bone may not the remains of blood cells. despite the statement in the passage that the iron is a essential ingredient of blood cell, the professor asserts that the origin of the iron apparently is reddish mineral.he supports this point with the fact that some primate animals also have such kind of spheres while with no blood cells.in other words, the sphere with iron is not necessarily the blood cells.

Finally,the professor states that the collagen is likely from other resources not from the bone tissues. notwithstanding the fact in the passage that collagen is a component of living bone, the professor claims that the collagen in the bone has been 17 millions year old, which is contradict the fact that the collagen's longevity is only 10,000 years.according to this fact,the professor assume that the collagen probably originates from the researchers,whose skin also contain this component.that is to say the statement in the passage— the collagen is exactly the biochemical materials related to bone tissue is indefensible.