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MrWaiting

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MrWaiting

9.11 独立：你是某门课程的大牛，朋友有问题找你解决好还是找tutor好

loverony713

MrWaiting 发表于 2014-9-10 21:53
9.9 modern agriculture method damage the environment, but providing food for the growing population  ...

9.9 modern agriculture method damage the environment, but providing food for the growing population around the world is more important than protecting the environment

It has been debated for decades that whether people should continue using modern agriculture to gain food at the cost of environment. Indeed, the number of population is increasing dramatically. In my opinion, however, if people keep draining the earth greedily, there is much possibility that we will put offspring in danger.

To begin with, it is more likely (that?) natural resources will be depleted first(用fast之类的词?) in (the) foreseeable future if people do not take measures. As is known to all, resources, such as crude oil, coal and natural gas, are limited. Studies have shown that at current pace, within a hundred years, the earth will be unsustainable for human beings to live. Actually, numerous problems have been reported throughout the press or media. For example, Shanxi, a province in China, has such abundant coal storage that people do not have to dig in most occasions. For almost a hundred years, this place supplies coal for the entire China. Now, series of problems have emerged because of coal mining. It is reported that the coal storage is under the red line. However, there is no sign that people will stop someday. Furthermore, every year, the ground of Shanxi province falls several meters due to mining. Thus, environmental problems are more pressing matters to human beings
(论述的没有问题 就是这个比较突出的不明显。本段完全没有提及food这一个话题 直接得出结论“环境问题更重要” 显得不太完整。)

In addition, people have a lot of choices in food selection, but it seems we have no choice(太绝对了吧 less比较好) in environmental protection. There is no doubt that scientists have realized the food problems the entire human race faces. Food crisis will probably be resolved within next twenty years. For example, I read that(最好细节一下从哪里看到的) scientists (have) successfully synthesized high energy food with limited substances, which has been used in space field. With a bite of highly compacted food, an astronaut can survive for days without any food ingested. Probably, decades of years later, people do not have to eat three meals a day. So, I believe people will deal with the food problems.
(你举的栗子只是宇航员的个例呀 相对于全人类来说... 我觉得不是很有力...而且 你的论点是人们有很多解决食品短缺的办法 但只主要说了一种 可以多说几个。然后 我觉得你的论点说"没有解决环境问题的方法" 这个太绝对了 太违背现实了 )

Finally, the introduction of modern agriculture methods outweighs the advantages (应该是缺点对应优点吧...) they could bring. I assume that the chemicals used in pesticide or fertilizer do more harm to environment than they could benefit people. For instance, the manufacture process of pesticide and fertilizer damages the natural environment. In China, numerous factories straightly dump their polluted water into the natural water system, resulting in water pollution or healthy problems of people. Thus, I think it is safe to say that the advantages the modern agriculture brings have not change the world greatly.
（你都木有说优点...怎么就得出来缺点大于优点这个结论呢？）

To summarize, it is too early to worry about how to provide enough food for the increasing population. However, the environmental problems are getting severe for human beings to ignore.

MrWaiting

9.9 modern agriculture method damage the environment, but providing food for the growing population around the world is more important than protecting the environment

It has been debated for decades that whether people should continue using modern agriculture to gain food at the cost of environment. Indeed, the number of population is increasing dramatically. In my opinion, however, if people keep draining the earth greedily, there is much possibility that we will put offspring in danger.

To begin with, it is more likely natural resources will be depleted first in foreseeable future if people do not take measures. As is known to all, resources, such as crude oil, coal and natural gas, are limited. Studies have shown that at current pace, within a hundred years, the earth will be unsustainable for human beings to live. Actually, numerous problems have been reported throughout the press or media. For example, Shanxi, a province in China, has such abundant coal storage that people do not have to dig in most occasions. For almost a hundred years, this place supplies coal for the entire China. Now, series of problems have emerged because of coal mining. It is reported that the coal storage is under the red line. However, there is no sign that people will stop someday. Furthermore, every year, the ground of Shanxi province falls several meters due to mining. Thus, environmental problems are more pressing matters to human beings

In addition, people have a lot of choices in food selection, but it seems we have no choice in environmental protection. There is no doubt that scientists have realized the food problems the entire human race faces. Food crisis will probably be resolved within next twenty years. For example, I read that scientists successfully synthesized high energy food with limited substances, which has been used in space field. With a bite of highly compacted food, an astronaut can survive for days without any food ingested. Probably, decades of years later, people do not have to eat three meals a day. So, I believe people will deal with the food problems.

Finally, the introduction of modern agriculture methods outweighs the advantages they could bring. I assume that the chemicals used in pesticide or fertilizer do more harm to environment than they could benefit people. For instance, the manufacture process of pesticide and fertilizer damages the natural environment. In China, numerous factories straightly dump their polluted water into the natural water system, resulting in water pollution or healthy problems of people. Thus, I think it is safe to say that the advantages the modern agriculture brings have not change the world greatly.

To summarize, it is too early to worry about how to provide enough food for the increasing population. However, the environmental problems are getting severe for human beings to ignore.

daisy333

等叔我对不起你。。。。。我一直以为我传了TAT 这是那个每年学11月的那篇

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我觉得你在偷懒 →_→

MrWaiting

8.26 人们应该坚持自己有挑战性的梦想还是注重实现现实的梦想

People say that as an adult, one should focus on real life. Instead of chasing ambitious achievement, people had better face the reality to realize some practical dreams. In my opinion, however, challenging dreams are what encourage people to improve ourselves.

To begin with, the challenging dreams keep pushing people to try their best. Human is a creature that can easily be satisfied. If people can always achieve the goal he set, he may not want to do any better even if he can. For example, in middle school, my aim was to be the number one student in my class. After an industrious semester, I finally got the best academic performance for the first time. Then, for several months, I was the top one in my class. I started to relax myself. I would do anything but study. I was pleased with what I had done and believed no one could beat me. However, at the end of the semester, I learned a lesson from the worst way that I fell out of the top ten. At last, I knew the objective was too easy for me so that I lost the energy to better myself.

In addition, what matters the most is not whether we realize our dream, but the joy and process when we pursue our dream. Although the result is important, people will get more after the endeavor. For instance, Doris Lessing, the famous British writer, was regarded the best female writer after Virginia Woolf. However, she did not get the Noble Prize in literature until she was in her ninety’s. She was nominated several times before but got nothing. I believe she must have dreamt of winning the prize one day. However, at such an age, I think that, to her, she did not care about whether she can win the prize or not, because she had already got what she deserved, recognition from all over the world.

Lucky for Doris Lessing, her dream finally came true. Most people are not that fortunate while they still feel happy because of the joy and effort. We know many artists do not witness how people around the world are crazy about their works. Yet, they all did not give up their dream, or we are not blessed to see so many wonderful paintings and statues, which people are willing to pay millions of dollars for.

To summarize, from my point of view, real dreams are those people are not so easy to obtain. I would rather call the practical dreams as aims or goals.

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其实我觉得这篇文章的题目是一句废话。。。。

MrWaiting

8.24 Parents should let children make and learn from their own mistakes

Who is the most important part of children’s growth? What role do parents play in children’s education? How do people define the word “grow” or how people feel a children more mentally mature than other? These are questions that puzzle every parent. From my point of view, growing is a process of exploration and correction.

First and foremost, self-independence is the most significant habit for a child to learn. Childhood only occupies a quite small part of people’s life. After childhood, people have to face series of obstacles on their own. If people cannot depend on themselves when they grow up, they will suffer a lot for the rest of their lives. For example, in China, there are numerous people who depend on their parents even when they are over thirty years old. Certainly, I have a reason to believe that it is a Chinese tradition that parents take good care of their children in every perspective. However, I still think it harmful for children’s growth to worry too much. In many cases, young people not only encounter internal problems but have to deal with external affairs without parents’ help. Thus, self-independence will better assist young people to explore the world.

In addition, children need to understand that it may take a lot of attempts to achieve the goal. We used to say Rome was not built in a day. It is the same for children’s growth. For instance, my brother is too egoism for when he was a child, he could easily get whatever he want. After stepping into society, he came across several problems he could not handle. He started to question himself and feel afraid to try anything new. He spent a long period to recover from those failures. Now he knows that he should not give up when he fails.

Last but not the least, correction of mistake can foster children’s right concept of value. Childhood is a very important part in a human being’s life, deciding the development of an individual. It is said that all man err. We all make mistakes. What matters the most is how we view our mistakes. For example, we may see the report that many criminals still come back to their old way after released from prison. Even if they were caught and paid for what they did, they were not aware that they had put much misery on victims.

To summarize, childhood is crucial in children’s growth. And parents are more crucial in children’s education. Parents should give children the right guide to let them explore the world.