雪耻双23作文贴！—— 贾少女马甲重新开贴。

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嫌弃原来的号昵称太难听！
经小队长提醒还可以重新注册的！
换了新昵称之后吃嘛嘛香身体倍儿棒感觉自己萌~萌~哒~

现在作文都放在这里啦~~~
感谢各位看官修改 么~么~哒~

原来的作文贴，给自己贴个tip：http://forum.chasedream.com/thread-911475-1-1.html

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Terry95 发表于 2014-8-4 21:48
贾美女，也看看我的作文啊，特别是关注一下文章里面的逻辑问题。

谢谢啦~ 我马上看，不好意思哈

Terry95

贾美女，也看看我的作文啊，特别是关注一下文章里面的逻辑问题。

Terry95

资深少女_贾贾 发表于 2014-8-3 23:34
8/3 TPO 21
Both the professor and the writer remark upon the topic of genetically modified trees. Th ...

8/3 TPO 21
Both the professor and the writer remark upon the topic of genetically modified trees. The writer in the passage demonstrates that planting genetically modified trees brings plenty of benefits. The professor, however, casts doubt on the reading part.

First, the writer contends that genetically modified trees are hardier so that they are more likely to survive compared to nature trees. On the contrary the professor in the lecture claims that natural choice would help the species survive the most resistant ones in face of nature disaster. That means all the genetically modified trees would die out if sudden change happened such as climate change or new kinds of pest. In that way, genetically modified trees are no more resistant, which is opposite to the reading passage.

In addition, running counter to the belief in the reading part that genetically modified trees brings more economic benefits, the professor demonstrates that the seeds of genetically modified trees cannot be simply collected and then grow as normal trees. Therefore, the farmers have to pay company for the special seeds each time they plant. Actually, it is not economical any more, which is at odds with the reading material.

Furthermore, the writer explains that genetically modified trees can help protect wild trees from overexploitation, even save some unique or rare species. However, this idea is refuted by what is stated in the lecture. The professor points out that genetically modified trees are aggressive compared to native trees so that it is possible that they will out compete the nature trees in crowded forests consuming more water and other nutrition.

To sum up, the lecture is totally jeopardized by the reading passage



这篇文章真好，可当范文了。

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8/3 TPO 21
Both the professor and the writer remark upon the topic of genetically modified trees. The writer in the passage demonstrates that planting genetically modified trees brings plenty of benefits. The professor, however, casts doubt on the reading part.

First, the writer contends that genetically modified trees are hardier so that they are more likely to survive compared to nature trees. On the contrary the professor in the lecture claims that natural choice would help the species survive the most resistant ones in face of nature disaster. That means all the genetically modified trees would die out if sudden change happened such as climate change or new kinds of pest. In that way, genetically modified trees are no more resistant, which is opposite to the reading passage.

In addition, running counter to the belief in the reading part that genetically modified trees brings more economic benefits, the professor demonstrates that the seeds of genetically modified trees cannot be simply collected and then grow as normal trees. Therefore, the farmers have to pay company for the special seeds each time they plant. Actually, it is not economical any more, which is at odds with the reading material.

Furthermore, the writer explains that genetically modified trees can help protect wild trees from overexploitation, even save some unique or rare species. However, this idea is refuted by what is stated in the lecture. The professor points out that genetically modified trees are aggressive compared to native trees so that it is possible that they will out compete the nature trees in crowded forests consuming more water and other nutrition.

To sum up, the lecture is totally jeopardized by the reading passage.

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yagiliang 发表于 2014-7-28 23:03
Dear，我觉得你的综合写的很不错，请问你的听力是一次性就能get到所有的point吗？

btw，我找不到你26号的 ...

是一次性听的。
独立在这一页的顶部吖~~~ 就在这个帖子里面有标题的

yagiliang

Dear，我觉得你的综合写的很不错，请问你的听力是一次性就能get到所有的point吗？

btw，我找不到你26号的独立哦

yagiliang

你好，这是我26号的作业，many thanks
http://forum.chasedream.com/thread-908356-1-1.html

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GJason 发表于 2014-7-28 16:15
贾贾，24日的作文今天才给你改出来，实在抱歉哦。
jiajia 的词汇和句式变化还是不错的，继续加油。
在写作 ...

太感谢啦~~~ 我会好好精改然后发上来的！

GJason

贾贾，24日的作文今天才给你改出来，实在抱歉哦。
jiajia 的词汇和句式变化还是不错的，继续加油。
在写作思路方面，可以考虑把抽象的问题具体化，比如说适应性重要，那么是什么原因导致了适应性重要呢？新工作环境、产业发展速度快、经济全球化等等，避免论点之间的重叠就好了。