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910 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement  
It is better to relax by watching a movie or reading a book than doing physical exercise.  
講到休閒活動的話，你覺得"運動"會比"看電影"或"看書"更好嗎?  

It is worldly acknowledged that the pressure people suffered recently is much higher than ever. At same time, the issue that whether it is better to relax by watching a whole movie or reading a book than by doing physical exercise, indeed, controversial. The viewpoints vary from person to person. However, in my opinion, I think doing exercise is much better for several reasons.

Admittedly, relaxing through static activities, like reading a book or watching a movie, has its advantage. For example, individuals can just sit here to release their pressure.

However, relax by doing exercise has its incomparable advantages. First, doing exercise can completely release pressure while reading or watching movie can not. What can reading or watching movies does is just help regulate the emotions. There is one of my best friends named Abide who suffers severe stress from work, and at those days, she even did not want to eat any thing. Watching movie was a wonderful chose for her at that time but it did not work. Once by chance, she played tennis in the gym class and after that she surprisingly became much better. So it is obviously that doing exercise can release the pressure completely and than just sitting there watching movie or reading.


Moreover, doing exercise also does good to people’s health while release pressure. Doing exercise can not only helps us improve our immunity but also helps us release negative emotions during the daily life. It is really a bonus comparing with static activities. We all know that individuals put fully concentration on their works, have less time and are less interested in taking exercise. This phenomena leads to the poor physical conditions of individuals and let them suffer much more pressure. Doing exercise is the most wonderful way to solve this problem.


In sum, from what has been discussed above, relax by doing exercise have much more advantages than reading or watching movie. So it is definitely better.

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95综合写作

TPO5

The reading is talking about three explanations which trying to determine the utility of the great houses found in New Mexico. However, the lecture is mainly jeopardizing the statements made in the reading by setting lots of convincing evidences.

First, the inside of the large houses indicate they cannot house hundreds of people. Because the number of fire place found inside the house, only around ten, definitely cannot meet the needs of hundreds of people. So even though it looks like the apartment buildings, it was not residential.

Second, the excavation of these buildings indicates the large houses cannot be used to store food. There are no large containers found there during the excavation, so there had no container to contain any crops. For this reason, the houses were mainly for storage which offered in the reading passage is probably wrong.

Finally, the broken pots found near the large houses is no the whole picture. There are lots of other things found near the buildings, not just pots, and the pots may be just the regular trashes which throw away after meals. This view in the lecture disagree what stated in the reading that the great houses were used for special ceremonies.

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wanggang0411 发表于 2013-9-8 23:43
改完了, 加油

谢谢批改..~~ 刚开始写 还不回套模板..还不知道应该包含听力什么内容..

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薄荷妹纸 发表于 2013-9-8 11:16
97 TPO2 综合

The lecture is mainly talking about that having a team of people is definitely not the ...

改完了, 加油

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97 TPO2 综合

The lecture is mainly talking about that having a team of people is definitely not the best way to attack a project, changing what are stated in the reading passage that assemble a group of people into a team is the best method to approach new projects.

First of all, the speaker thinks that the members of the group do not fell any rewarding in the group. Because the lecture believes that there are always some works who have free rides. The group is working together and no one knows the people who do work very hard and make huge contribution to the group. The individuals who make huge contributions often have a little chance to be recognized, not to mention recognized as highly significant. In contrast, the reading believes that it is vary rewarding for members of the team. So the lecture totally disagrees with the view made in the reading passage.

Second, the lecture discusses that working as a group does not mean it can work quickly. Because as a group, the viewpoints of member vary form one to another. It costs lots of time for the group to reach consensus about how to move projects. This point is contradicting what is stated in the reading passage that group can improve the speed of progress o the project.

Finally, the speakers think that it is impossible for group members to make creative solutions. There are definitely some influential individuals in group, who have large influence on making the decision. When this person thinks an idea is terrible, this idea is often dropped and no more discussion. This point disagree with that lots of creative solutions come up in the group.

Therefore, the contents in the reading passage are totally jeopardized by the lecture and the lecture has totally different ideas on the topic made in the reading.

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薄荷妹纸 发表于 2013-9-3 10:45
91 Children should only play sports for fun, or play sports in competition or contests?

With the de ...

不好意思，来晚了

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93 TPO28 综合写作

The lecture is mainly discussing that there are no solid evidences to support Peary did reach the North Pole, changing what are stated in the reading passage that this individual did come to the North Pole.

First of all, the speaker thinks that the committee which concluded a thorough investigation of Peary’s records and equipment is not reliable.  Because this committee just spend two days, instead of checking carefully and closely, to investigate the records. Besides, there are some member of the committee are close friends of Peary and subsidize this expedition, which leads to an objective conclusion. In reading passage, the lecture totally believes that the conclusion of investigation can prove that Peary did reach the North Pole. So, the lecture is totally disagrees with the view made in the reading.

Second, the lecture insists that the speed of Tom cannot prove that Peary reached the North Pole in only 37 days, contradicting what is stated in the reading passage that Peary’s claims are possible according to the situation of Tom. Because the speaker thinks that the two situations are totally different at two aspects: first, tom took fewer things on his sled and second Tom is lucky to encounter the favorable weather.

Finally, the speaker raises the issue that the faded and blur photograph of Peary cannot prove anything. In the lecture, the speaker thinks this is an old photograph took a hundred year ago, it blurs and fade. So this photograph cannot be used to calculate the position and then fails to prove the man did reach the North Pole. This point disagrees that the shadow of this photographs illustrate he reached North demonstrated in the reading.

Therefore, the contents in the reading passage are totally jeopardized by the speaker and the speaker has totally different ideas on the topics made in the reading passage.

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91 Children should only play sports for fun, or play sports in competition or contests?

With the development of society and the change of people’s perception, it is worldly acknowledged that sport is playing a much more significant role in our daily life. But the issue that whether children should play sports just for fun or should play in competition is, indeed, controversial. The viewpoints vary form person to person. However, in my opinion, I think play sports in competition or contests is better for several reasons.

Admittedly, play sports just for pleasure is better way to release the pressure than competition because children do not need to concern about the results. There is definitely no pressure when you just play sports for fun rather than fight for win.

However, play in competition has its incomparable advantages. First, the main reason is that play sports in competition offers children a delightful way to establish their spirits of team work. Learning how to cooperate with other individuals is one of the most important lessons that children have to understand during their growth. As we know, most sports are needed to work as a group, such as basketball, football. A recent survey, conducted by Institute of Youngster, shows that the children who played sports in contests are better at cooperation and team work than children who played sports just for fun.

Moreover, competition assists children to form good personalities, such as perseverance and never surrender. Victory, to some extents, is the most importantly ultimate goal in the competition. The winners survive in the competitions and contests are always a kind of individuals who have the ability to insist to the last minute. Football is the most popular sports in the whole world, and it is worldly known that many key reversions occur in the last fewer minutes. It is the result that whole team fight with all strength during the 90 minutes. During the game time, they run, they defend, they attack, and maybe they get hurt, but no one gives up. Fight till die, that is the sprit. Play sports in competition, therefore, can affect children in a good way to form their personalities.

In sum, form what has been discussed above, play sports in competition gives much more good influences on children during their growth. So it is a definitely better than play sports just for fun.

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iammuse 发表于 2013-9-1 22:36
刚又看了一遍,不好意思,第一节最后一句没看到.脑补成你第一节是说各有千秋了.sorry。。。
我没有倾向于一 ...

喔 这样..~~ 好吧 我看了好多遍也没看出来各有千秋..并且我有标志词语啊  第一段的admittly 第二段的however 第三段的moreover 包括篇幅长短都可以体现论点的重要成都的

我其实之前也是第一段提出观点之后就开始三个分论点开始support。 然后XDF的某个老师给我说这样的话考场容易不好想到分论点. 三个比较多嘛 让步的话就好想很多..所以开始用这个结构.~

谢谢批改哦 我也觉得我第二段好啰嗦 一起进步！~