ChaseDream
搜索
123下一页
返回列表 发新帖
查看: 5796|回复: 21
打印 上一主题 下一主题

【跪求狠批】【求拍砖!】希望能从22提到27~感谢您的批改与帮助!

[复制链接]
跳转到指定楼层
楼主
发表于 2013-8-7 17:15:30 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |正序浏览 |阅读模式
希望能从22提到27~
感谢您的批改与帮助!!!
收藏收藏 收藏收藏
22#
发表于 2013-12-4 13:00:04 | 只看该作者
ChristinaJuris 发表于 2013-12-4 12:05
恩,论述逻辑方面我会认真反思的!
P.S.
1. 综合写作good,独立写作逻辑合理、用语简单无文采、语法错误 ...

2 可以不回答吗?哈哈
1 的话,首先good≠满分,所以即使综合good,也有可能综合的15分里面已经扣掉了3分。。。[good是指综合15分拿到12~15分];其实,如果综合算满分,独立部分很难评估,但是27是可以的,因为托福重要的还是逻辑和文章的整体感觉,用词的话,别太低级,比如全是简单句什么的,应该还是可能27的
21#
 楼主| 发表于 2013-12-4 12:05:50 | 只看该作者
超级无敌小鹤鹤 发表于 2013-12-4 11:56
哈哈 过奖了
这篇文章错误其实挺严重的,以后要注意哈~~~

恩,论述逻辑方面我会认真反思的!
P.S.
1. 综合写作good,独立写作逻辑合理、用语简单无文采、语法错误较少的450字左右的文,可以上27吗?
2. 我想八卦一下。。。鹤神最近一次考的T肿么样,满分了吗?
20#
发表于 2013-12-4 11:56:36 | 只看该作者
ChristinaJuris 发表于 2013-12-4 11:51
鹤神改得好认真好细致啊~
太感人了~
我真是运气太好了~!

哈哈 过奖了
这篇文章错误其实挺严重的,以后要注意哈~~~
19#
 楼主| 发表于 2013-12-4 11:51:17 | 只看该作者
ChristinaJuris 发表于 2013-12-3 17:35
感谢大神的批改!
内流满面!

鹤神改得好认真好细致啊~
太感人了~
我真是运气太好了~!
18#
发表于 2013-12-4 11:38:33 | 只看该作者
ChristinaJuris 发表于 2013-12-3 17:35
感谢大神的批改!
内流满面!

逻辑问题很多
希望你能好好分析下我给你提出的问题,这个在考试的时候是致命的!

本帖子中包含更多资源

您需要 登录 才可以下载或查看,没有帐号?立即注册

x
17#
 楼主| 发表于 2013-12-3 17:35:49 | 只看该作者
感谢大神的批改!
内流满面!

本帖子中包含更多资源

您需要 登录 才可以下载或查看,没有帐号?立即注册

x
16#
发表于 2013-11-10 21:27:42 | 只看该作者
改得不好,多多包涵!!

本帖子中包含更多资源

您需要 登录 才可以下载或查看,没有帐号?立即注册

x
15#
 楼主| 发表于 2013-11-10 17:56:01 | 只看该作者
11.09 独立写作

The practice of parents giving their child money for good grade on the report card is something that has been debated a lot in the last decade. Nevertheless, it isn't a new concept for parents to use this tactic to encourage their child. Most people take a stance against giving a kid money for high marks because the message it sends is feared. Some parents are worry about giving money for good grades will be viewed as a horrible way which definitely arise the sense of “Money is the final destination”, and they believe that a child should aim to make good grades regardless of the rewards.


Some arguments against giving children money as a reward for high marks, as far as I am concerned, do not make sense. “Money reward is going to turn children into benthamites”, for example, is not a strong argument because whether money is a good issue depends on how you understand and use it. Say, child who holds a proper attitude towards money never going to be a benthamite no matter how much money he/she awarded from his/her parents for good grades. Besides, an other argument that paying children money awards will make children cheat in examinations is also wrong. Kids cheat in the tests is because of bad cognition and personalities, not because of money awards.

From where I stand, some children need the motivation of a money reward to get them to try harder, and it is the best time for parents to help their children understand money and manage basic money matters when kids shows so strong interests in money awards.

First, it isn't a lack of intelligence the reason that a child doesn't do well in school. Usually, it's the result of them not being motivated. In some situations, it is attention-seeking behavior because the child is aware that bad grades will get them a lot of attention, both positive and negative. Whatever the case with your child, why not offer some monetary encouragement for good grades? In a perfect world, everyone would work hard regardless of the outcome. But this isn't a perfect world. Isn't it a good idea to show kids if they work hard that it pays off?


Moreover, the big point is how to help kids understand money and manage basic money matters after they got money awards for high marks. A mother, whose son is a seven-year old primary school student, maintains that she was taught her son to manage money well by paying him money awards. Every time her son received money awards, she start to educate her son how to make a financial plan, how to save money in banks, and how enjoy public welfare activities by using money. That is quite beneficial for both mom and the kid.


To conclude, whether money awards is a beneficial tactic depends on how parents use it. And do remember that whatever is decided to be the best motivation for the kid to earn good grades, just don't confuse the child.
14#
发表于 2013-10-15 22:46:14 | 只看该作者
不好意思,改晚了

本帖子中包含更多资源

您需要 登录 才可以下载或查看,没有帐号?立即注册

x
您需要登录后才可以回帖 登录 | 立即注册

所属分类: TOEFL / IELTS

近期活动

正在浏览此版块的会员 ()

手机版|ChaseDream|GMT+8, 2025-2-28 00:49
京公网安备11010202008513号 京ICP证101109号 京ICP备12012021号

ChaseDream 论坛

© 2003-2025 ChaseDream.com. All Rights Reserved.

返回顶部