e23lzh的写作贴

e23lzh

好吧，初来乍到，不太懂规矩。尽管一个月之前就报名考试了，但是之前一段时间实在是太忙了，所以没来得及准备，
现在离考试还剩下六七天了。。。
压力很大。
作文都不知道该写些什么东西，感觉没有什么话说。
希望在这里跟大家一起努力吧！！

sweetyecho

来膜拜大神的帖子～～～求大神多多来写作小分队指导我们，嘿嘿～～～

Five_007

e23lzh 发表于 2014-3-21 23:20
2014.3.21 独立写作 A\D Teaching is a harder work in the past than today.

The current world is fast  ...

LZ, 行文非常流畅，语法扎实，外加闪光词汇，的确很nice。我经常作文写不出三点来，看了您的文章，表示稍显宽心，至少写两点是不会倒扣分的。。另外，有的时候用模版也会把自己的思路框死了，也显得不自然。28号考，但是觉得有希望。 会多来看看如何将简单的词用的地道 TPO去啦~ THX

xhbhxhbh

大神，还在吗？ 能麻烦帮忙改作文吗
TPO1 Integrated writing
In the passage ,there is  an argument that offering a four-day week work,  will do good to both  the individual and the cooperation respectively.In
the lecture , however ,the  professor holds another point of view.
First, offering four-day week job may cost more. Since the company would invest more to the office space and more computers, this would of course cut down the profit of the company . In addition , if they hire new employees to accomplish the work ,there would be a sum of moneyputting into the hiring and training process, this is another aspect of cost  the company more . Further , if they hire new employees they must  pay for their medicine fees, this is the third  facets that costing the company more. These  all contradicts what claims in the passage that a four-day week work would decrease the cost  of the company and benefit the company a lot .
Secondly, a four-day week work don't necessary mean an increase in more employment . In the lecture ,the professor holds that ,in order to decrease the hiring cost ,the company may not want to hire more employees ,the reasons are already stated as before , and this will end up working overtime. And also ,the employer would increase  their expections , hoping that the present employee could do the  sameamout of time in the four-day week works. This would obviously increase the pressure of the employees. But in the passage , it maintains that ,a four-day week policy would increase the employment ,and make the employee feel at ease ,and improve their life quality.However, the lecture refutes both of the saying in the passage.
Finaly , offing a four-day week policy impede the career development  and wouldn't reduce the cost of the company . To start with , this policy also end up reducing the  ability of the workers ,since the less work time . and in a economic downturn , they might be first to losttheir jobs ,and there will be less promotion opportunities for them comparing to thier five-day counterparts . This is also completely contradicts what has claimed in the passage that  the employee will benefit from the policy and enjoy a high quality life.

e23lzh

牛奶泡小猫 发表于 2014-4-9 23:34
弱弱问一句 楼主考试时独立写作能写多少字？我看到有人说550左右就能拿满分。。。我打字也不快，所以望楼主 ...

四百多吧

牛奶泡小猫

弱弱问一句 楼主考试时独立写作能写多少字？我看到有人说550左右就能拿满分。。。我打字也不快，所以望楼主指教啊

qq2228757

写得很精彩~也感谢你帮我改的那么认真和仔细，真的给了我很多建议，我会回去好好反思一下，争取下次有进步！

e23lzh

2014.3.21 独立写作 A\D Teaching is a harder work in the past than today.

The current world is fast changing, and so is teaching. Yesterday, teachers still used chalks and blackboards, while today, however, they heavily rely on electronic aids like keynotes. Although many believe that the changes make teaching more easily than ever, I, nevertheless, deem that it is far more difficult to teach today.

It is commonsensical that the information explosion has made students today increasingly hard to satisfy, since they could learn more from other sources other than from teachers, which makes teachings seemingly dispensable. One of my best and most erudite friend is a typical bad student in my teacher's eyes. Instead of listening to lessons, he spends his course hours on reading and thinking about some deeper problems on the subject. He also learns online via MOOC. Due to his extensive learning, he sometimes could even come up with questions that our teachers fail to provide a proper answer, which makes our teachers quite embarrassed. Once, when I visited my teacher in his office, he told me:" you kids today are more smart than we used to be, and therefore I need to prepare more for the class."

Moreover, the experiences of some successful dropouts like Bill Gates and Steve Jobs also inspired students nowadays not to follow the teachers' instructions. I read a news story the other day, saying that a school child, whose idol is Steve Jobs, believing that he could learn a lot better and become a second Jobs without teachers, never handed in homework on time. At the same time, as Winston Churchill said "I am always willing to learn, but I am not willing to be taught", students today prefer learn by themselves, making teachers difficult to manage the learning pace of the whole class.

As it stands, for one perspective, students could learn from other sources besides teachers, and for another, many young people begin to follow the examples of some successful dropouts against their teachers. Therefore, it is crystal clear that teaching today is far more difficult than ever.

perfectends

话说……你的作文写得很好呀……那你这样的水平到底拿了多少分呢？

-- by 会员 artemisan (2013/1/22 23:52:19)

看到回报CD的帖子了，是满分，满分啊，我内牛满面。。。给我几分吧~

perfectends

哇，非常感动啊。我google了一下，cutting edge是个名词，我当成adj了。应该是不需要加technology的。
谢谢了

-- by 会员 e23lzh (2013/1/23 23:44:10)

不用谢。共同提高，呵呵，帮我重拾一个词汇~