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wsxz007 1月4号的综合

The reading passage is discusses the issue of whether or not the dinosaurs are the endotherms. The professor's lecture deal with the same topic.Even so she argue that the dinosaurs are not endotherms, which contradict what the reading passage states. In the reading there are three specific points to support it's idea.
The first one, although the passage asserts that the fossil was found in the polar area, where is so cold that only endotherms can exist. At the same time the professor claims that the region where the fossils be found is much warmer than today and habitat can be changed during the cold months. Clearly, the professor disagree the first point in the massage.
Moreover, even though the statement in the reading argue that leg position is the characteristic of the endotherms, because of the sustained physical activity, the professor contends that the position of the legs in order to supports more weight. Obviously, the professor's argument challenges the states in the passage.
finally, both of them refer to the Haversian canals.The professor maintains that although there are Haversian canals in the dinosaurs, the same time there are also grow rings in body of them.During cold period, the grow rings thicken show that the vegetation slowly or stopped. Whereas the author of the passage claims that the Haversian canals is the feature of the endotherms.
In conclusion, the professor clearly identifies the weaknesses of the reading passage and forcefully proves the central argument in the passage of that dinosaurs are endotherms is inaccurate.

tsyxyss

23 January 改
Independent Writingo you agree or disagree withthe following statement:Students can get as many benefits from organization orclub activities as they can get from their academic studies.


As we all know that, the activities of theorganization and club are playing a more and more important role in the modernuniversity than ever before. When asked that if the benefit getting fromthe activities is equally important to the academic studies, in my view,absolutely, yes. I willillustrate my answer (point) in three different perspectives.

（既然楼主中立态度建议可以让步。）Quite beneficial as academic study is, forinstance, which can be used as anchor when applying for future studies, No no one can deny that the campus after class life is very precious for all students which (that) willbe recalled through all one’s life. The activities with the classmates andfriends are certainly the most valuable part in the school-days(没杠). In other words, students can gain lots of happiness and friendships fromthe clubs and the organizations. Take myself as an example, I taken apart in（过去式 took part in）
thestudents union once came into the university, and participated in a lotactivities, which are the largest harvests in my campus life equal to the benefitknowledge to absorbing from the study. Until now, I still recallcherish theexperience in the students union with my friends.

Furthermore, the skills, such as the communication, organizing and presentation,are the necessary for the competition in the work and daily life, which can’tbe foud found in books but learned from those activities. Given this situation, the activities are notonly leisure way but also the approach to the better future. The organizationand club in the universities contend various aspects of the skills that areneeded by are necessary for the students. On the other hand, according to as participants of different sorts of activities, students can get in touch with more people who withhave different background and major, which can givestudents both expansive view and different kinds of friends. All of these willbecome a wealth to young people in the future after graduation.

最后一段感觉楼主是想转折。Finally, However, the comparison between the significance of academic studyand part-time activities is itself ridiculous. Functionsof the activities and the studies are different, and supplement each otheragainst they will promote each other simultaneously. Good studies can win awell respect in community, which make people more popular in activities. At the same time, the club and organizationwill provide stage to show yourself to others which can give you a bettersituation of your major studies, because of the connections and skillspracticed in the activities.

For the reasons I talked (demonstrate) above, we have reasons to believe that both activities andstudies make it each other possible, and are indispensable in our lives.

楼主这种中立态度比较少见，我的建议慎重接受。觉的总体不错，不要光说activities 忘说academicstudy呀。

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TPO23

The reading passage is talking about the reasons of the decline of the yellow ceder, while the professor hold the opposite view, that the reasons of the decline have not be confirmed.The professor disprove the reading passage in three different perspectives.

First of all, according to the reading passage, the beetle is the killer of the tree, which is disagree with the lecture. The professor said, that the surface of yellow ceder have some chemical that can detect the insect, according to this capability, only the destroyed or the sick ones can be attacked by the insect. Since attack from the beetle can not explain the decline of the tree, This is where the speaker disagree with the writer.

An other hypothesis is the damage from the bear, in contradict, the professor indicate that there is no bear in the decline area-northwestern of America-where is so cold that the bear can not living. This is entirely opposed to the writer’s expectation.

Finally, the professor said that it is impossible for the climate to decrease the population of the tree, because the area of the decline happened is the high elevation,while the lower is safe. He also indicate that the temperature of the high elevation is warmer than the lower area, which give the strongest opposition to the reading passage.

wsxz007

23 January
Independent Writingo you agree or disagree with the following statement:Students can get as many benefits from organization or club activities as they can get from their academic studies.


As we all know that, the activities of the organization and club are playing more and more important role in the modern university than ever before. When asked that if the benefit from the activities is equal to the academic studies, in my view, absolutely yes.I will illustrate my answer in three different perspectives.

No one can deny that the campus life is very precious for all students which will be recalled through all one’s life. The activities with the classmates and friends are certainly the most valuable part in the school-days. In other words, students can gain lots of happiness and friendships from the clubs and the organizations. Take myself as an example, I taken a part in the students union once came into the university, and participated in a lot activities, which are the largest harvests in my campus life equal to the benefit to from the study. Until now, I still recall the experience in the students union with my friends .

Furthermore, the skills , such as the communication, organizing and presentation, are the necessary for the competition in the work and daily life, which can’t be foud in  books. Given this situation, the activities are not only leisure way but also the approach to the better future. The organization and club in the universities contend various aspects of the skills that are needed by the students. On the other hand, according to activities students can get in touch with more people who with different background and major, which can give students both expansive view and different kinds of friends. All of these will become a wealth to young people in the future after graduation.

Finally, functions of the activities and the studies are different, and supplement each other against. Good studies can win a well respect in community, which make people more popular in activities. At the same time, the club and organization will provide stage to show yourself to others which can give you a better situation of your major studies, because of the connections and skills practiced in the activities .

For the reasons I talked above, we have reasons to believe that both activities and studies make it each other possible, and are indispensable in our lives.

tsyxyss

1月22 综合 TPO22 批改
The reading passage and the lecture is talking about the same question about if the ethanol is better than gasoline. The reading passage said(这儿改成says后边就不用改will了，反正时态不对) the gasoline will not be replaced by the new fuel. When the lecture disprove from three aspects that it is not carrect（correct） in the passage.

Firstly, the professor said, just a cycle, that the carbon dioxide produced by the burning of the ethanol is reduced by the growth of the plants which is material of the new fuel. However， When（what） the passage said（is） that the ethanrol（ethanol） and the gasoline product（是不是应该用动词produce） the same heat to the atmosphere.

Secondly, in the passage, it is said that they are the food of the animal,  that the plants are made into the fuel . The lecture point out that the part of the plants be used to the production is disliked by the animal（office建议不用被动，而且我脚得不应该是dislike，就是don’t eat就得了）, and there is no disadvantage for the animals.（我觉得无必要）

Finally, the lecture said that the price of the plant fuel is deed（是不是楼主想用indeed啊） higher than the gasoline, but it is no longer to be like this once the ethanol output enhanced ,caused by the increase of the consumption of ethanol. Although the momentary support from the government is necessary. Here is some evidence(觉得有点突兀，不太恰当), if the production of the ethanol is three times larger than now, the price will low down 40%.

水平有限，给楼主随便改的，楼主见谅，第二段反正我当时是真心没听懂，主要是cellulose那词害的。

wsxz007

1月22 综合 TPO22
The reading passage and the lecture is talking about the same question about if the ethanol is better than gasoline. The reading passage said the gasoline will not be replaced by the new fuel. When the lecture disprove from three aspects that it is not carrect in the passage.

Firstly, the professor said, just a cycle, that the carbon dioxide produced by the burning of the ethanol is reduced by the growth of the plants which is material of the new fuel. When the passage said that the ethanrol and the gasoline product the same heat to the atmosphere.

Secondly, in the passage, it is said that they are the food of the animal,  that the plants are made into the fuel . The lecture point out that the part of the plants be used to the production is disliked by the animal, and there is no disadvantage for the animals.

Finally, the lecture said that the price of the plant fuel is deed higher than the gasoline, but it is no longer to be like this once the ethanol output enhanced. Although the momentary support from the government is necessary. Here is some evidence, if the production of the ethanol is three times larger than now, the price will low down 40%.

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备注：红色--修改；蓝色--建议。

Whatever No matter(赶脚这whatever用的啊，怪怪的) in the past or modern society, health is the most concerned problem both thephysically and the mentally,(去掉此处逗号)by people,concerned the , and it is the significant key to the happiness. Withoutis good health we can not enjoy the life with the family, without it we can not chase our dream about the career goal, and without it we can not have chance to read the amazing stories(注意amazing词性) of the life.I am so proud and lucky about that I live in this era that give me a better condition than ever before to maintain the health. I will prove my view in three different perspectives.（个人感觉：虽然你第一段是想用三个排比来闪亮登场，但是有点不像essay的味儿反倒更像文学作品。。。）

First andbe objective, the level of the daily live is increasedour living condition has been fastly improved in recent years, which can keep most of people away from the primary killer of the health-hungry and cold.They can kill the body and heart in silence. As we all know that thelimiting limited supply in old China,(去掉逗号)caused the body and the heart is suffered from the hungry.Now daysNowadays，people can not only satisfy the hungry stomaches but also enjoy the deliciousvariety of the delicious food, that can give us abundant nutrition and good mood. It is obvious that people can ensure the basic of the health in modern society.

Further more, more and more major diseases can be prevented and cures, because of the medical technology progress.  Such as the various kinds of cancer and epidemic disease, which is the
fatal disease in the past and can kill people immediately. Benefiting from the technology, people can live longer and more comfortable than before. This is best illustrated by the example of my classmate, she was diagnosed  with bone cancer, but fortunately, she was saved by the operation.I can not image consequence the future of hers if the girl lived in the past.

With theincrease of imporved living standards and the quality of life, people think more about the health which is  another way to keep away from the illness and sub-health. In most of the residential areas, we can see more and more people exercise in groups with facilities,what is the infrastructure of most residential areas.Take my mother as an example, she takes exercise every morning after her 35 age since she became 35 years old, and this make her more fit and glad than before.

In conclusion, for the reasons I talked above, the health can be maintain better than before. Although the pollution is serious than before, that is a rejection of the health and is being controlled in a limit rang. All in all, we have reason to believe that the health in future will be better than now.（这段提到pollution。。。逻辑有点奇怪的感觉。。。）


总结：


总体而言文章的结构没有大问题，这是大优点。
文章出现的问题总而言之是一个——汉语思维。具体分为以下方面：

1. 选词或者表达方式不当：有些句子很明显是中式思维，感觉你还是比较字字对应的在翻译着写；单词没有把握宁愿不用，也别犯amazing当名词这样的错误。

2.语法错误：建议没事找本语法书，张道真的不错，针对自己的作文容易犯错的语法找出来，翻到对应章节去看。

3.逻辑：逻辑问题最大的应该是在文章末段，突然抛出污染问题，但是这样的反驳作为结尾未免单薄，都可以单独立一段来反驳，有点没事给自己找乱子犯错误的感觉。末段怎么保险怎么来，如果你把握不准让步写法，宁可一边倒的总结。

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呵呵，刚才突然发现之前给你批过一次综合，看到了你给我的回复～～我批的是狠了点儿，呵呵，因为考过G所以对语法表达什么的问题看的很仔细～希望你不要着急，只要每天努力练习，相信一定会有很大进步的，加油！！

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改20 January
Independent Writing:Which way do you think is the best for a student to make new friends?a. join a sports team,b. participate in community activities,c. traveling


As the students in modern social development, it is not semes(does not seem) like in the past when good study can product a success and entire campus life.这句话逻辑错误，后面的主语应该和students对应而不是用it is, 而且这句话是想表达古今对比吧，应该比较时间，product a success and entire campus life什么意思没读懂No one can deny that making friends as many as we can is another crucial task.这句话突然插进来有点奇怪，可以换一种说法：Making as many new friends as possible so as to expand our social network has unveiled its significance. When asked which is the best way(which way is the best) to make new friends, my view is to participate in community activities. I will demonstrate my view in several different perspectives.

Firstly, when take(taking) part in a social communication, we can not only get in touch with fresh(unacquainted) people but also to(删) practice the communication skills, which is one of the most important skills that will deed benefit our future after the campus（graduation）. For example, one of my classmate in the university, who takes part in the students union in the school time, by this way, he(删)makes a lot friends and practices himself very well. All of(删) the experience in the student union makes his resume wonderful and help him to catch a wonderful offer from one of the top 500 companies.

Furthermore, from the type of friends, in the progress of the practicing of the social activities,没读懂，表达有点儿问题most of the students try to do the same thing in the similar goal and characteristic（删） that will give a good basic to continue（build a solid foundation for） the friendship in a long time. After the progress of dealing with the problem in the activities people can establish a especial(special) relationship which maybe do effect in the later of work(effect later work) . Even so the companions in you student activities will become the partner in your career. One of my father’s best friends in the campus who is now my best parter in his business.这句话没谓语啊亲，后面是不是还差半句？

Although, there are many other roads to make friends, such as take(taking) a travel or join(joining) in a team, that(which) can give people chances to enjoy the leisure time with others. But in my view, the friends came(时态？) from the community of the practice is not only interesting but also long relationship.主语和宾语不搭

All in all, for the reasons I talked above, as a student in the campus, it is the best way to make friends that in the practice of the social communication,问题同本文首句which can give us  a longer and deeper benefit（benefit us in the long run）.



语法错误太多，建议写完后检查一遍，很多动词没加s，很多表达也不规范，这样的错误应该尽量避免。很多句子的表意不请，建议把我标注较多的句子重新写一下，理顺意思之后再考虑如何出彩。

wsxz007

21 January
Independent Writingo you agree or disagree with the following statement:Nowadays it's easier to maintain health than the past.

Whatever in the past or modern society, health is the most concerned the physical and the mental, by people,concerned the , and it is the significant key to the happiness. Without is we can not enjoy the life with the family, without it we can not chase our dream about the career, and without it we can not have chance to read the amazing of the life.I am so proud and lucky about that I live in this era that give me a better condition than ever before to maintain the health. I will prove my view in three different perspectives.

First and objective, the level of the daily live is increased fastly recent years, which can keep most of people away from the primary killer of the health-hungry and cold.They can kill the body and heart in silence. As we all know that the limiting supply in old China, the body and the heart is suffered from the hungry. Now days people can not only satisfy the hungry but also enjoy the delicious of the food, that can give us abundant nutrition and good mood. It is obvious that people can ensure the basic of the health in modern society.

Furthermore, more and more major diseases can be prevented and cures, because of the medical technology progress.  Such as the various kinds of cancer and epidemic disease, which is the
fatal disease in the past and can kill people immediately. Benefiting from the technology, people can live longer and more comfortable than before. This is best illustrate by the example of my classmate, she was diagnosed  with bone cancer, but fortunately, she was saved by the operation.I can not image consequence if the girl lived in the past.

With the increase of living standards and the quality of life, people think more about the health which is  another way to keep away from the illness and sub-health. In most of the residential areas, we can see more and more people exercise in groups with facilities,what is the infrastructure of most residential areas.Take my mother as an example, she takes exercise every morning after her 35 age, and this make her more fit and glad than before.

In conclusion, for the reasons I talked above, the health can be maintain better than before. Although the pollution is serious than before, that is a rejection of the health and is being controlled in a limit rang. All in all, we have reason to believe that the health in future will be better than now.