ISSUE 31 野生动物！求指导

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Issue 31 Society should make efforts to save endangered species only if the potential extinction of those species is the result of human activities.


【观点】同意作者的观点。我们不应该只拯救因为人类活动而灭亡的濒危生活。




【主体论证】

1.让步： 拯救（不是因为人类活动）的濒危生物endanger creatures可能会产生一些问题：比如财政问题。而且动物灭亡是不可抗的自然过程，人类的力量是有限的，去拯救也不能拯救所以濒危动物
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【平行结构展开】

2.反驳可行性——如何界定“因为人类活动”：人们不能准确界定人类活动是否已经危害到对某个特定的物种生存。比如全球变暖改变了全球气候，所有动物都会受到影响。这种影响范围很广泛，难以判断是否危害到动物生存。而且动物或多或少都有受些影响。这么说是不是所有濒危物种就都算因为人类活动的影响而灭亡呢？(6-7句话)

3.反驳影响：有些物种对于人类有着重要研究价值的濒危物种也应该被保护。尤其是在医药学pharmacy、生物学、history有重要作用的

【结论】保护濒危动物是rational choice instead of a slapdash decision made by never impulse。我们应该建立一个全面且完善e的评价标准，去尽可能的拯救濒危野生动物，而不是简单地依据所谓so-called的“人类活动”作为标准。







Since the First Industry Revolution, the unscrupulous looting of natural resources and destruction of other species' habitats by human race have jeopardized the survival of endangered species. The speaker claims that human are supposed to only rescue endangered species whose potential extinction is attributable to human activities. While I concede there exist several problems concerning saving more endangered species, the speaker's statement is problematic in both providing an invalid standard and neglecting the potentially counterproductive influences.

Commendably, preventing endangered wildlife, whose extinction is not the consequences of human wrongdoings, from extincting might arise some vital problems that the public are concerned about. Firstly, every year hundreds of species extinct. Saving all species, which are at the brink of extinction, demands a tremendous amount of money, is inevitably to lead to huge financial pressure. The government and other institutions will not possess sufficient fundings to support other significant issues, such as ameliorating public transportation system, enhancing the quality of primary education, because of the overload of financial budget. Secondly, during the process of natural selection, it's an irreversible natural principle that several species is doomed to confront extinction. As limited as the power of human-kind, no matter how much efforts the society put into, human still cannot preclude every endangered species from disappearing forever.

However, the interplay between a mass of species is so marvelous and mysterious, which make it impossible for people to accurately whether human activities has threatened the existence of a certain species. For instance, increasing emission of carbon dioxide, accompanied by the remarkable development of modern industry, has resulted in global warming, which completely changes the living environment of many species. The drastic climate change has made the formerly optimal environment of some species no longer appropriate to there survival. If we apply the speaker's recommendation, we should investigate at first which species suffer from the climate change. But the predicament lie in that the influence of global warming is so immeasurable that we cannot affirm how many species are prone to extinct due to the carbon dioxide emission. On the basis of the demonstration above, we can state that the speaker's prerequisite, the human activities, is not a valid criterion to determine whether an endangered specie should be preserved or not.

Furthermore, the society should save several species, which are blessed with massive research values, from extinction. Endangered species play an crucial role on many academic fields, especially on pharmacy, biology and history study. They serve as the raw materials of medical research and the living evidence of prehistoric study. To illustrate, people now are capable of extracting precious substance against fatal diseases, such as throat cancer and HIV, from endangered herbs. If we do not rescue these species, we will absolutely miss an significant opportunity to discover an alternative revolutional treatment to throat cancer and HIV. Thus, even if the society cannot protect all endanger species, we can at least preserve the endanger species, which are beneficent to the general welfare of human civilization.

Conclusively, saving endanger species is a rational choice rather than a slapdash decision made by a spark of nerve impulse. The society are obliged to establish a more comprehensive and complete evaluating system to rescue valuable endangered species as many as possible, instead of merely grounded on the so-called human activities as a standard to judge whether an endangered species deserves protection.

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Since the First Industry Revolution, theunscrupulous looting of naturalresources and destruction of other species' habitats by human race hasjeopardized the survival ofendangered species. The speaker claims that human are supposed to only rescueendangered species whose potential extinction is attributable to humanactivities. While I concede there exist several problems concerning saving more endangeredspecies, the speaker's statement is problematic in both providing an invalidstandard and neglecting the potentially counterproductive influences.

Commendably, preventing endangered wildlife,whose extinction is not the consequences of human wrongdoings, from extinction mightarise some vital problems thatthe public are concerned about. Firstly, every year hundreds of speciesextinct. Saving all species, which are at the brink of extinction, demands atremendous amount of money, is inevitably to lead to huge financial pressure.The government and other institutions will not possess sufficient funding tosupport other significant issues, such as ameliorating public transportationsystem, enhancing the quality of primary education, because of the overload offinancial budget. Secondly, during the process of natural selection, it's an irreversible natural principle thatseveral species is doomed to confront extinction. As limited as the power ofhuman-kind, no matter how much efforts the society put into, human still cannot preclude every endangered speciesfrom disappearing forever.

However, the interplay between a mass ofspecies is so marvelous and mysterious, which make it impossible for people toaccurately这里缺一词儿 whether humanactivities has threatened theexistence of a certain species. For instance, increasing emission of carbondioxide, accompanied by the remarkable development of modern industry, hasresulted in global warming, which completely changes the living environment ofmany species. The drastic climate change has madethe formerly optimal environment of some species no longer appropriate to theirsurvival. If we apply the speaker's recommendation, we should investigate at first which species suffer from the climate change. Butthe predicament lies in that the influence of global warmingis so immeasurable that we cannot affirm how many species are prone to extinctdue to the carbon dioxide emissions. On the basis of the demonstration above,we can state that the speaker's prerequisite, the human activities, is not avalid criterion to determine whether endangered specie shouldbe preserved or not.

Furthermore, the society should save severalspecies, which are blessed with massive research values, from extinction.Endangered species play a crucial role on many academic fields,especially on pharmacy, biology and history study. They serve as the raw materials ofmedical research and the living evidence of prehistoric study. To illustrate,people now are capable of extracting precious substance against fatal diseases,such as throat cancer and HIV, from endangered herbs. If we do not rescue thesespecies, we will absolutely miss a significant opportunity to discover analternative evolutional treatment to throat cancer and HIV. Thus, even if the society cannot protect all endanger species, we can at leastpreserve the endanger species, which are beneficent to the general welfare ofhuman civilization.

Conclusively, saving endanger species is arational choice rather than a slapdash decision made by a spark of nerve impulse. The society areobliged to establish a more comprehensive and complete evaluating system torescue valuable endangered species as many aspossible, instead of merely grounded on the so-called human activities as astandard to judge whether an endangered species deserves protection.

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