NMGMADMAN的作文贴。不管有没有人拍砖,我心依旧。

NmgMadman

还有14天就考托福，第五次考了，不想再失败了。每天至少写一篇然后认真修改，监督自己。人言力耕者，岁旱亦有粮。

NmgMadman

In contemporary society, one of the most common dilemma may be the dilemma between "accuracy" and "quickness". Some people may think quickness is outweigh the accuracy because they believe quickness stands for efficiency. However, in my view, accuracy is always my priority when I am carrying out a work.

First and foremost, sometimes mistakes are not allowed because that may result in disaster, especially in technological industry such as manufacture of aircrafts, rockets. The cost of mistakes even small mistakes may be significant. One may lose his property, job. In some circumstances, the result may even severe, even causing death. For instance, in Zhejiang Province of 2011, a train run out of the track, more than 100 people died in the accident. The reason is that some officials in the government tried to push forward the process of construction of modern super trains, which has a higher speed than the regular ones. However, they fail to guarantee the quality of the project at the same time. Emphasizing speed result in death, what a tragedy. I don't think such tradeoff is deserve. In this sense, I believe we should always put the accuracy on the first place, otherwise there would be more tragedies tomorrow.

Moreover, sometimes working quickly are actually would slow the process as a whole. If there are a multitude of mistakes are made during the work process, then one must probably retackle the problem again, which in turn would adversely affect the efficiency. This example may give some light to the point. When I was at college, I worked as a TA for my economics professor. Once when I was scoring the assignments the students handed in, I was so rush because I was eager to go to an appointment. Later on, a lot of students complained about the mistakes I made during the process. My professor heard about that and blamed on me. I was asked to rescore the whole stack of assignments!  In this basis, It is not a good deal to trade accuracy with speed, in which case we may lose more. On the other hand, if you work carefully, you may accelerate your job.

To be objective, It is may helpful to work quickly than to work mistakes. For example, if the deadline is around the corner, if it is ok to make some mistakes in some tasks.

Generally speaking, I prefer perform my job my accurately than quickly. Don't too rush, there's stones on the road. The faster, the more possibility that you may be hindered.

NmgMadman

修改后。
It may be one of the most common concern of parents: how to get children well-prepared to be adults. There do have a multitude of ways to achieve such goal. For instance, travelling alone, taking part-time job, or even taking a boarding school. As far as I'm concerned, taking a part-time job would especially beneficial for teenagers. Reasons and Explanations are listed as follows.

First and foremost, teenagers could make money via taking a part-time job. Financial independence is a key criteria to be a adult. Once children can sustain themselves without asking for money from their parents, they will solve the most basic problem a grownup would face. My story may give some light to the point. When I was 17 years old and just graduated from high school, my mom sent me to restaurant to be a waiter for a month. To be frank, I was suffered at first that I had a hard time in getting up early in morning and I felt like that I lose my freedom. But one month later, when I got salary payment for the first time of my life, I was fulfilled by achievement and happiness. I bought a keyboard for me as a prize of hard working and I bought a watch for my mother, she was so happy and spoke highly of me. In this sense, financial independence is important for a teenager to be an adult

Moreover, taking a part-time job is also a good time for teenagers to build inter-personal skills, which account for one of the most useful skills for a adult. After entering the society, It is crucial for one to learn to get along well with others, especially colleagues. If a person fail to getting in harmony with surroundings, he probably could not perform his job well. Much less, work time could become hard time for him. According to a survey published on "Science", those people who do not have a sound relation with their colleagues tend be looked down upon by his workmates, which would adversely affect their working efficiency. Some of those, however, be fired by the boss finally. Thus I believe taking part-time job would do good to teenagers by giving them a platform to learn inter-personal skills.

Last but not the least, It is can be educational for children to take a part-time job because they can learn their elementary lesson about sacrifice and dedication. Hardly would those teenagers know that earning money is not as easily as spending money. Through working, teenagers may get a big idea about what the sacrifice and dedication is, then they may be start to appreciate what their parents gave them. They may start to realize the life in the future would not as easily as the life they're enjoying today. For my own experience, I started to understand my parents, for what they sacrificed and dedicated to. I started to be thankful. Thanks to my part-time work experience.

All in all, taking a part-time job could greatly beneficial to teenagers and give them a big idea how a real grownup should be.

NmgMadman

Do you a/d: taking part-time job is one of the best way to prepare teenagers to be adults.

It may be one of the most common concern of parents: how to get children well-prepared to be adult. There do have a matitude of ways to achieve such goals. For instance, travelling alone, taking part-time job, or even taking a boarding school. As far as I'm concerned, taking a part-time job would especially beneficial for teenagers. Reasons and Explanations are listed as follows.

First and foremost, teenagers could may money via taking a part-time job. Financial independence is the key criteria to be a adult. Once children can sustain yourself without asking for money from your parents, they solve the most basic problem a grownup make face. My story may give some light to the point. When I was 17 years old and just graduated from high school, my mom sent me to restaurant to be a waiter for a month. To be frank, I was suffered at first I had a hard time in getting up early in morning and I felt like that I lose my freedom. But one month later, when I got salary payment for the first time of my life, I was fulfilled by achievement and happiness. I bought a keyboard for me as a prize of hard working and I bought a watch for my mother, she was so happied and spoke highly of me.

Moreover, taking a part-time job is also a good time for teenagers to build inter-personal skills, which account for one of the useful skills for a adult. After entering the society, It is crucial for one to learn to get along well with others, especially colleagues. If a person fail to getting in harmony with surrounding, he probably could not perform his job well and maybe work time could become hard time for him. According to a survey published on "Science", those people who do not have a sound relation with their colleagues tend be looked down upon, which would adversely affect their working efficiency. Some of those, however, be fired by the boss finally.

Last but not the least, It is also a good experience for children to take a part-time job because they can learn their elementary lesson about sacrifice and dedication. Hardly would those teenagers know that earning money is not as easy as spending money. Through working, teenagers may get a big idea about what is sacrifice and dedication is, then they may be start to appreciate what their parents gave them. They may start to realize the life in the future would not as easily as the life they're enjoying today. For my own experience, I started to understand my parents, for what they sacrificed and dedicated to. I started to be thankful.

All in all, taking a part-time job could greatly beneficial to teenagers and give them a big idea how a real grownup should be.

dreamcece

内个啥，你用word改，然后粘贴帖子的时候有个从word复制的键，然后点那个，直接把你在word里面改的粘过来就好了。

NmgMadman

谢谢啊，cece， 你说的那个谓语就是influence， 它有vt的用法。那个achieve knowledge，= =见笑了， 好滑稽 我还老这么用。谢谢谢谢。问一句，你怎么改的啊？那些颜色以及mark笔的效果 都怎么弄上来的？

dreamcece

蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误

Young people nowadays are playing vital role of in almost every aspect of society. Some elites among these youngsters have shown their excellence and aspiration in altering the future of the society. But as far as I am concerned, they still 谓语呢？not influence the determination of future of the society.

To begin with, though a significant amount of youngsters today are enjoying the best education and have achieved relatively solid knowledge？搭配有问题，achieve knowledge... 没见过。。。Acquire比较好 and skills in their field, they still need more experience to be qualified for making decision in terms of the whole society. The example of U.S.education system may give some light to this point. The most distinguished universities always ask for work experience for their applicants especially in some practical fields such as business, public policy. Under this basis, many students have been rejected even though some of them have perfect academic performance. That's illustrate the importance of experience in those pivot fields, which need fresh men take years to fill up.

Youngsters also have some disadvantage in their characteristics when compared with grownups, which would hamper their ability to make right decisions for society. Young people tend to be more emotional, more impatient, and less mature, which make them inappropriate in big decision making. For exmaple, the constitution of China states that citizen have to be at least 55 years old to be eligible for Chairman of the China. Young people just need more time in practice to foster their qualities. A mature man should be responsible, rational, pressure-bearing in his field.

To be objective, some elites among young people have shown their talents and potential in leadership. Some of them have have some influence in their surrounding. May be they're capable of altering the world in the future, however, they still far away from determining the future of the society at this moment.

To sum it up, youngsters today need more time and more practice to be eligible in making decision on behalf of the whole society.

总结： 楼主写的很流利，问题有，介词的搭配不准确； 写的句子有些冗长。 但是大家好像都有这个问题，我就不吹毛求疵了。
另，祝楼主考试顺利呀。

NmgMadman

TPO 17

The professor contends that the size of birds population would not be declined as the passage indicates.

First, the passage suggests that increasing human population always come along with more exploitation on wild areas, which threaten the habitats of birds. The professor, on the contrary, argues that only some of the birds may decrease while others may increase, which would counter act the side effect it brings. To be specific, urban areas actually providing a better and larger habitats for some kinds of birds. Some residents even complain about the boost of population of birds such as pigeons and hawks.

Second, the professor believes that the agriculture activities would not increase the way as passage suggests. She states that there have been less and less destruction of bird habitats due to the increasing productivity. She further indicates that a new highly productive crop have been introduced into agriculture activities, which can surge the productivity per land unit. The outcome of products would meet human needs very well.

Third, even though professor admitted that right now pesticides do harm birds from survival, she believes that would not be a problem in the future. To be specfic, new pesticides have rarely been introduced into agriculture use and the overall usage of pesticides is tends to decline. Moreover, the crops we are planting are resistant to the insects, thus there is no need for further pesticide usage. Consequently the size of birds' population can aviod of damaging.

To sum it up, the professor do not think that birds would be harmed as a result of increasing population and agriculture activities.

NmgMadman

10.31独立 Young people nowadays have no influence on decisions that determine the future of the society as a whole. A\D

Young people nowadays are playing vital role of almost every aspect of society. Some elites among these youngsters have shown their excellence and aspiration in altering the future of the society. But as far as I am concerned, they still not influence the determination of future of the society.

To begin with, though a significant amount of youngsters today are enjoying the best education and have achieved relatively solid knowledge and skills in their field, they still need more experience to be qualified for making decision in terms of the whole society. The example of U.S.education system may give some light to this point. The most distinguished universities always ask for work experience for their applicants especially in some practical fields such as business, public policy. Under this basis, many students have been rejected even though some of them have perfect academic performance. That's illustrate the importance of experience in those pivot fields, which need fresh men take years to fill up.

Youngsters also have some disadvantage in their characteristics when compared with grownups, which would hamper their ability to make right decisions for society. Young people tend to be more emotional, more impatient, and less mature, which make them inappropriate in big decision making. For exmaple, the constitution of China states that citizen have to be at least 55 years old to be eligible for Chairman of the China. Young people just need more time in practice to foster their qualities. A mature man should be responsible, rational, pressure-bearing in his field.

To be objective, some elites among young people have shown their talents and potential in leadership. Some of them have have some influence in their surrounding. May be they're capable of altering the world in the future, however, they still far away from determining the future of the society at this moment.

To sum it up, youngsters today need more time and more practice to be eligible in making decision on behalf of the whole society.

NmgMadman

TPO22综合

The professor listed three reasons that ethanol fuel would be a good alternative for gasoline, which contradicted directly to what the passage suggests.

First, while the passage contends that ethanol does not perform better than gasoline in terms of environmental protection, the professor argues that plants, from which ethanol fuel are made, could counter act the carbon dioxide release by absorbing those carbon dioxide as their nutrients. Thus the amount of carbon dioxide the plants intake would remove the adverse effect of that amount of carbon dioxide released from the usage of ethanol fuel.

Second, the professor continues disputing the passage by claiming that usage of plants to get ethanol would not affect the feed of animals. To be specific, the parts of plants that are used to produce ethanol fuel are those parts inedible to animals. Thus, the availability of source of food for animals would not be influenced at all.

Third, the professor admitted part of the point presented in the passage that it is the tax subsidies that makes the current price of ethanol relatively cheap. Based on the prediction that price would be driven down when there is more demand and thus more production, he believes that the price of ethanol fuel would be as competent as gasoline in the future. He even gave a specific prediction. He said that the price of ethanol fuel would dropped by 40% if production boost three times as current level.

Based on these details and explanations, the professor strongly holds that the ethanol fuel would be a well-suited alternative of gasoline.