希望盡快變強阿!求大家用力指導阿!求26+啊!!!

chunte20

考了幾次，總是只有18-22，求大家給修改，進步進步阿!任何建議都好，謝謝。

9.27
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: Nowadays, it is much easier to achieve success with help from one's family than what is like before.  
9.28
Do you agree with the viewpoint that people are now easier to become educated than in the past?
9.29
Do you agree with: the friends that you can have fun with is more important than the friends that you can get help from?
9.30
Do you agree or disagree: college and universities must do a better job of preparing student for the workplace.
10.1
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: The most important problems in today's world will be solved in our lifetime.
10.2
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement.Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
10.3
Patience is not a good strategy, we should take action now rather than later.
10.4
The best way to increase students’ interest in a subject is to teach them the significance of the subject outside of school.
10.5
Do you agree or disagree: It is much easier for people to achieve success without families’ help than in the past.
10.6
Your job will have more effect on your happiness than the social life does.

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928的写好了喊我一下···

chunte20

Nowadays, the interaction between people gains moreand more close than before.Whether in school or in company, we haveto deal with[/url] plans, solve problems and cooperatewith people in a group. Sometimes, people hold contrast opinions to the topic. Someone may be criticized by others sometimes.

To begin with, it is lucky that someone wants to give somecomments on us. Usually, when we are criticized by others, we feel badand disappointed. We impetuously doubt what they claim and arguewith them with our faces red or pale anxiously. Butafter calming down and thinking what others said, some of criticism isreasonable. Taking others' opinions as criticism or pieces of advice depends on what we thinkin negative or positive way. There is no one who will spend time on what he/shedoesn't care. There is no one who will spend time on what he/shedoesn't care. So, it is better to take others comment as pieces of advice to us. Based on thisviewpoint, any criticism from others is beneficial to us. If people who cannotaccept the criticism from others, hewill lose something.


Second, we are blind as we work alone, even wethink that everything is doing well. Actually, there really exist some defaultsthat we cannot find out in our work. That is why students who study in a studygroup usually do better than others. In a study group, students discuss about one part of the group's assignment. Theysometimes dispute, criticize others ideas and stand by different opinions. Ifeach student humbly and politely accepts to others opinions, thinkingabout which part could be improved. They will do their workbetter via taking others' piecesof advice and making some changes.This makes sense to all situations, and people who can accept criticism from othersand take it as the energy to be better will be more successful in the companyand society.



In conclusion,if one thinks that he is never wrong and thinks problems partially, one cannot make progress. But if people who can accept others’ criticism and improve continuously will gainmore respectand as a successful person.

fuzhengrui

chunte20

9.25獨立

People who cannot accept thecriticism from others will not be successful at working in a group.

Nowadays, the interaction betweenpeople gain more and more closer than before. Whether in school or in company, wehave to deal plans, solving problems and cooperation with people in the agroup. Sometimes, People hold contrast opinionsto the topic. Someone may be criticism by others in that time.

To begin with, it is luckily that someonewant to give some comments to us. Usually, when we be criticized by others, wefeel bad and disappointed. We impetuously doubt what they claim and arguing facered or pale with too much anxiety. But after cool down and thinking what otherssaid. Some part of criticism is reasonable. Take others opinions as criticismor as advices depend on what we think in negative or positive way. There is no onewill spend time on what he/she doesn't care. So, it is better to take otherscomment as advices to us. Based on this viewpoint, any criticism from othersare benefit to us. If people who cannot accept the criticism from others thatmake them get some loss.  

Second, we are blade as we work alone,even we think that everything is doing well. Actually, it really exist somedefaults that we cannot find out in our work. That is why students who study ina study group usually do better than others doing alone. In study group,students discuss about each one's part of the group's assignment. They sometimesdispute, criticize others ideas and stand in different opinions. If eachstudent humbly and politely accept to others opinions,thinking about are there any part could be improved. They willhave their work better via take others' advices and make some change. This makesense to all situations, people who can accept criticism from others and takeit as the energy to be better will be more successful in the company andsociety.  

In conclusion, if someone always holdshis opinion and narrowly thinks problems will make him/her never progress. But if people who can accept otherscriticism and improve continuously will be gain more respects and as a successfulperson.
     

chunte20

辛苦了!(鞠躬)

我會好好吸收學習的!

請問有甚麼建議嗎?

對於寫文章容易跑題、不對題

一開始有沒有甚麼好的思考點子的策略?

我有開始看老美185但有甚麼方法嗎?

再次感謝shatong424。

shatong424

In personal speaking, I prefer the amount of exercise. . There is no denying thatphysical exercise bring a lot of advantagesto our body health. Actually, I think that exercise should be required as part of our daily life.

语言不地道，表达太罗嗦。 Personally speaking, fruenquent exercise is my strategt to improve my health in some senses. As the result of the advantages of exercise, I can enjoy my goid  health with the high energy, the attractive figure and lively mind.
Firstly, I think that the more exercise wedo take,  the more energy we produce. Spending time to in exercise energizes me to get down my work efficiently. In accordance with my own experience, young as I am, I was haunted with a heavy load and was arranged with periodical examines in my class. Busy as I was, I never ignored the significance of everyday exercise, which evetually led my healthy life.As the matter of the fact, the morning jogging provided me a source of energy. The fresh air in the morning  take place of the wasted air inside my body and make me active. As a result, without any strangeness,  everytime other students who unlikely did as much the same amout of exercise as I did, were asleep in class with low spirits, I was capable of withstanding the tough hours in class.  makes us more efficiently on our work.Take me as an example, when I was 16 years old in the high school, I had to spend a lot of time studying and also had a lot of exams that always make me tired before coming back home from school. But, I still studied hard everyday to make sure that I would be admitted permitted into the best University in my country. My father, who likes jogging, encourages me to have a jog with him. At first, I hated to go, because I thought that I have a lot had work to do, I don't want to waste my time jogging because that sounds not useful to improve my scores at school. But, after jogging for a few times, I found that I was not only more concentrated but also had higher efficiency on my study. That exercise relieved my body from pressure.

语言需要提升，其实很多句子都与分论点无关的，你可以看看。 其实你的语法上没有太大问题，就是语言太过简单，然后很多都是口语词，积累表达很关键。

In addition, People nowadays get fatter and fatter than before. Among students, the possiblity of putting on fat is relatively strong comparing to other gourps of people. For instance,(要有过渡词）  is an important thing that we spend time on every day. Just like potato, sit in front of the desk,staring at our book or laptop, no move all day. We eat a lot of high caloriesfood which have been defined as a culprit ofdiseases. Exercises can make us more healthier by burning that the surplus fatwe have. 例子和上面的分论点无关。


Moreover, exercise not only make our physicalhealth better but also keep our mind healthy. When we play basketball, we need to learn to cooperate with our team members to win. That will make us play inone heart, the feel of be connected with others for one goal bring mehappiness. Exercises with friends refresh my mind and soul. That's we can't notget from food or stress. That why I choose exercise to improve my health.

下面这一段问题和上面一样。建议你看看范文，对你有好处。

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chunte20

Which do you choose to improve your health：kind of food you eat, amount of exercise, amountof stress?

In personal speaking, I prefer the amount ofexercise. There is no denying that physical exercise bring a lot of advantagesto our body health. Actually, I think that exercise should be required as partof our daily life.

Firstly, I think that the more exercise wedo, the more energy we have. Spending time to exercise makes us more efficientlyon our work. Take me as an example, when I was 16 years old in the high school,I had to spend a lot of time studying and also had a lot of exams that alwaysmake me tired before coming back home from school. But, I still studied hard everyday to make sure that I would be admitted into the best University in mycountry. My father, who likes jogging, encourages me to have a jog with him. Atfirst, I hated to go, because I thought that I have a lot had work to do, Idon't want to waste my time jogging because that sounds not useful to improvemy scores at school. But, after jogging for a few times, I found that I was notonly more concentrated but also had higher efficiency on my study. Thatexercise relieved my body from pressure.

In addition, People nowadays get fatter andfatter than before. For a student, study is an important thing that we spendthe most of time on every day. Just like potato, sit in front of the desk,staring at our book or laptop, no move all day. We eat a lot of high caloriesfood which have been defined as a culprit ofdiseases. Exercises can make us more healthier by burning that the surplus fatwe have.

Moreover, exercise not only make our physicalhealth better but also keep our mind health. When we play basketball, we needto learn to cooperate with our team members to win. That will make us play inone heart, the feel of be connected with others for one goal bring mehappiness. Exercises with friends refresh my mind and soul. That's we can't notget from food or stress. That why I choose exercise to improve my health.

chunte20

Which do you choose to improve your health：kind of food you eat, amount of exercise, amountof stress?

In personal speaking, I prefer the amount of          exercise. There is no denying that physical excise bring a lot of advantages to our body health. Actually, I think that exercise should be required as part of people's every day.

Firstly, I think that more exercise we do,more energy we have. Spending time to exercise make us more efficiency on our work. Take me as an example, when I was 16 years in the high school, I have to spend a lot of time to study and also have a lot of exams that always make me tired after back home from school. But, I still study hard every day for make sure that I will gain into the best University in my country. My father who like jogging, encourage me to have a jog with him. At first, I hate to go, because Ithink that I have a lot have works to do, I don't want to waste my time for jogthat sounds not improve my scores at school. But, after few times jog, I found that I have not only more concentrate but also have higher efficiency on my study. That exercise relieve our body from pressure.

In addition, People nowadays get more andmore fat than have never been before. As me a student, study is thing that we spend the most of time in one day. Just like potato, sit in front of the desk, staringat our book or laptop, no move all day. We eat a lot of high calories foodwhich had be defined having high potential to diseases. Exercises can make we more healthier by burn that the surplus fat we have.

Moreover, exercise not only make our physical health better but also keep our mind health. When we play basketball, we need to learn to cooperate with our team to win. That will make us play in one heart, the feel of be connected with others for one goal bring me happiness. Exercise with friends refresh my mind and soul. That's we can't not get from food or stress. That why I choose exercise to improve my health.