6.18 独立

qianjun06

6月18日101017 大陆 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to relax by a movie or reading a book than doing physical exercise.

       Currently, there is a public controversy on  how to relax after a busy working day. Those who approve of watching a movie or reading a book argue that it is a convenient and meaningful method to amuse one’s self, but other people in favor of doing physical exercise. Coincident with the opinion of those people is my heartfelt agreement with idea that doing physical exercise is a healthy, communicative and economical way to relax.
     First, doing physical exercise does strong our body as well as our mental health. Under the circumstance of a long-time working ,not only our body but also our brain is strain and lack of oxygen. Attending a physical  course or just roaming around the playground is the optimum choice to lose one's burden. For example, tormented by heard disease ,my friend persists in jogging after dinner meal. After three years' perseverance, he get rid of the disease and became a healthy man. Thus, to be a healthy man ,one could not live without doing physical exercise.
    In addition, communicating or consorting with a new friend  plays an essential role when determining whether relax at home or go to gymnasium. There is no denying that exchanging experiences is a fantasying way to relax one's self, even contributing to a giant deal. The story is not rare, it provides a typical instance of my boss bidding a titanic project successfully just during the exercising in the fitting room. What an amazing thing it is to doing physical exercise.
    Last but not least, building exercise centers will contribute more Gross National Product to the endemic economy. The more developments we make, the more progress we get. We cannot emphasize the important of economy too much for a developing country.
    Considerable though the advantages that doing physical exercise results in are, they cannot compete with benefits of a movie or reading a book brings about, when convenience and  knowledge are taken into consideration. But, doing physical exercise has more merits as a healthy, interactive and  
economic way of relaxing.

kchszy061ban

蓝色为意见或建议高亮为精彩绿色为总结红色为错误

In recent years, there is （这里加个冠词？）public controversy that whether it is a need for people to acquire something irrelevant to their daily life. Those who criticize the notion argue that knowing everything will exhaust more precious time. However, other people are in favor of it. Contrary to the opinion of the former people is my heartfelt agreement with the idea that people should know the events, which has less influence on their daily life.

To start with, sharing the feelings about the current affairs may provide an opportunity for us to communicate with our friends and colleagues. There is no denying that the pace of our modern life （加个系动词）so fast that we felt lonely and overwhelmed at such advancing rhythm. So, talking about the issue, even which has nothing to do with our daily life, will alleviate our pressure and makes us more energetic for another challenge（感觉这里用other challenges比较好些额，another总感觉有下一个，有点类似的challenge的赶脚）. It provides a typical example of my own. I always talk about foreign politics which my father（木写完？）. Although it influences less on my life, I deem it's a excellent topic between us when we have nothing to talk about. Therefore, on no account can we ignore the value of the irrelated cases.

In addition, obtaining knowledge is a long process of accumulation. What we have learn may not be used immediately. So, we should prepare different kinds of ken for tomorrow' （这个加s）utilizing. Learning the events happening around the world also can broaden our view（outlook 或horizon都行）, which may correct our previous opinions of what is the norm in our society. For example, studying the manner of western-style food can help me better understand the culture of America life, and I can apply it when I go abroad. Therefore, we cannot emphasis the importance of uninfluenced matters too much.

When people deem it is favorable to be informed with outside world, isn't it necessary that they should give some consideration to the disadvantages it cause. （用问号？）Admittedly, learning about too many items will cost us numerous time, which may be used to more critical things, for instance, researches and traveling. Even worse, there irrelated issues will distract our attention from studying.

Considerable though the negative points that casting eyes on a wider range results in are, they cannot compete with the benefits that paying attention to the whole world brings about, when communication and knowledgeable brains are taken into consideration.

不错不错，句子和逻辑都很好，就是小处注意哈

klllun

TO qianjun06~
昨天的作业貌似是TPO18啊~那个17我还没有做的诶。自己先去写一次17再来修改哈~今天晚上确实来不及写作文啦。这里有一个自动检测的PDF结果，请先凑活着看看，明个儿我写了继续修改的啊~

qianjun06

The passage makes the point that the number of birds in the United States will decline. On the contrary, the lecture demonstrates the idea that what the writer has said is not convinced.

To start with, contrary to the belief in the passage that birds' nature will disappear with the growing of human populations, the professor says that more cities provide habitats for the bird, which increase the number of birds. Also, more birds are found in the city. Although some species are facing extinct, other kinds of birds are increasing. Therefore, the first reason by the writing is refuted.

In addition, the author holds the view that agriculture will also result in the further destruction of the bird habitats. In contrast, the lecturer contradicts it by saying that the growth of the agriculture is not the way said in the reading. Actually, there is less land used for agriculture. Scientists also invent new technologies to make more productive products, which will save more lands. This directly cast doubt on its counterpart in the reading.

Last but not least, the reading material states that the use of pesticides will also increase. On the other hand, the listening material presents a conflicting idea that the tradition way has changed in two sides. First, people will use the new pesticides , which is less toxic. Second, they will grow the pesticideless products, which will not harm the birds any more. Thus, the final point in the reading is totally unsound.

qianjun06

7月27日Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should know the events happening around the world, even if it unlikely has some influence on your daily life.

In recent years, there is public controversy that whether it is a need for people to acquire something irrelevant to their daily life. Those who criticize the notion argue that knowing everything will exhaust more precious time. However, other people are in favor of it. Contrary to the opinion of the former people is my heartfelt agreement with the idea that people should know the events, which has less influence on their daily life.

To start with, sharing the feelings about the current affairs may provide an opportunity for us to communicate with our friends and colleagues. There is no denying that the pace of our modern life so fast that we felt lonely and overwhelmed at such advancing rhythm. So, talking about the issue, even which has nothing to do with our daily life, will alleviate our pressure and makes us more energetic for another challenge. It provides a typical example of my own. I always talk about foreign politics which my father. Although it influences less on my life, I deem it's a excellent topic between us when we have nothing to talk about. Therefore, on no account can we ignore the value of the irrelated cases.

In addition, obtaining knowledge is a long process of accumulation. What we have learn may not be used immediately. So, we should prepare different kinds of ken for tomorrow' utilizing. Learning the events happening around the world also can broaden our view, which may correct our previous opinions of what is the norm in our society. For example, studying the manner of western-style food can help me better understand the culture of America life, and I can apply it when I go abroad. Therefore, we cannot emphasis the importance of uninfluenced matters too much.

When people deem it is favorable to be informed with outside world, isn't it necessary that they should give some consideration to the disadvantages it cause. Admittedly, learning about too many items will cost us numerous time, which may be used to more critical things, for instance, researches and traveling. Even worse, there irrelated issues will distract our attention from studying.

Considerable though the negative points that casting eyes on a wider range results in are, they cannot compete with the benefits that paying attention to the whole world brings about, when communication and knowledgeable brains are taken into consideration.

qianjun06

The passage makes the point that several measures have been proposed to stop the spread of the cane toad in Australia. On the contrary, the lecture demonstrates the idea that these methods could not get rid of the cane toad.

To start with, contrary to the belief in the passage that the spread of the toad could be prevented by building a fence, the professor says that the fence could not stop the spread of toad, because the fence is not efficient. Eggs and young toads are able to get through the fence by the carrying water. Thus, the first reason provided in the reading is refuted.

In addition, the author holds the view that toads could be captured and destroyed by volunteers. In contrast, the lecturer contradicts the idea by saying that trapping the toads will not success and they will trap the native frog by mistakes, since it is difficult for them to tell the difference between toad and frogs especially the young toads. So, this directly cast doubt on its counterpart in the reading text.

Last but not least, the reading material states that virus could control the cane toad populations. On the other hand, the listening material presents a conflicting idea that it could make a disaster in the eco-system and they are also a part of the system. Since the toads will be transferred to the United states, the virus will kill the toad in it In the end. Therefore, the last point in the reading is totally unsound.

qianjun06

7月25日110304NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The most important problems in today’s world will be solved in our lifetime.

In recent years, there is a public controversy on whether we could manage to give an answer to the all the crucial problems during our life span. Those who are in favor of the issue argue that modern facilities are beneficial to our daily life, which will make the dilemmas easily resolved. However, other people disagree with them. Contrary to the opinion of the former notion is my heartfelt agreement with the idea that it is not possible to solve the most important problems in our lifetime nowadays.

To start with, communication deficiency is the result of the development of modern life, which we have no abilities to treat with it unless we cease the rapid pace of advancement. There is no denying that presently people have less to communicate with their families as well as their friends. Seldom do we have a picnic and share feelings with them under such overwhelming circumstances. Also, the less frequently we communicate with relatives, the less harmonious the relationship between us will be. It provides a typical example of my own. After long time of learning TOEFL, I feel alone and sometimes I finds there is a gap between my friends and I, because topics we talked about is irrelative. Amusements could alleviate my loneliness, but it could not solve it. So, on no account can we ignore the value of communication in our society.

In addition, some pollution problems could also not to be solved in our lifetime. Pollutions, especially environment pollutions will last so many years that our offspring will also suffer from the affects we leave. These pollutions will devastate our home and living resources. Even worse, some of the polluted lands will never be recovered and they will become the deserts. For instance, the nuclear basement leak in the Japan cause the polluted city 30 years to clean up the radioactive material-Uranium. This case is not rare, it is typical of dozens. Therefore, we could not emphasis the importance of ecology system too much.

When people deem that there still exists some issues we cannot conquer, isn't it necessary that they should give some considerations to the advancements we made nowadays. Admittedly, there are numerous cases which we have no treatment to them can be overcome by us in today's world. Modern medical service is able to prolong our lives. Transportation also makes our life more efficient and convenient. So, it is conceivable that our life has been great improved by science technologies.

Considerable though the benefits that modern society enjoys brings about, it cannot draw a conclusion that the most important problems in today’s world will be solved in our lifetime, when communication problems and pollution issues are taken into consideration.

包子不包子

7.18 TPO9 综合
TPO 9
The passage makes the point that fuel-cell engines have several advantages over internal-combustion engines. On the contrary, the lecture demonstrates a controversy idea that hydrogen is the solution to the problems provided in the reading.

To start with, contrary to the belief in the reading that internal-combustion engine rely on petroleum, which is a finite resource, the professor says that hydrogen is not available and it's hard to obtainit. Hydrogen must be protectedcan only be used in a pure liquid state. So, it is difficult for people to produce and store the liquid hydrogen. Thus, the first reason provided in the reading text is reputed.

In addition, the author holds the view that hydrogen solves the pollution problems. In contrast, the lecturer contradicts the idea by saying that hydrogen will also create pollution when it is produced. In these producing processes, coals and oil will be used to generate these new fuels. At the same time, pollution will be produced感觉有些重复了. This directly cast doubt on its counterpart in the reading text.

Last but not least, the reading material states that fuel-cell engines will exhaust less energy and save more money. On the other hand, the listening material presents a conflicting idea that it is expensive to manipulate the fuel, because the fuel-cell engines will need an expensive metal. Some scientists are discovering时态不大队哦 some other metals to take the place of it, but it is so far successful. Therefore, the last reason explained by the writer is totally unsound, according to the speaker.

包子好久没听原文了 可能改的不大完整哎  见谅见谅~
加油~

hansxiao7

In recent years, there is a public controversy on whether the modern life is much better than before. Those who agree with the notion demonstrate that advanced facilities are beneficial to daily issues, such as mobile phones and autos, which makes our life more convenient and magnificent. However, other people are not in favor of it. Contrary to the opinion of the former is my heartfelt agreement with the idea that people now are less happy and less satisfied than before.


To start with, there is no denying that nowadays people have less time to communicate with these families and friends. All of us are hurried in studying and working, so seldom do we have a picnic and share the feelings with our relatives. The less we communicate with our classmates or collaborators, the less harmonious the relationship between us will be. In the end(私下里觉得这句应该放在文章末尾 这里可以改成therefore或者in addition一类的）, we will feel abandoned by our close friends. It provides a typical example of my own. I'm fully devoted to preparing the toefl examination. Sometimes I felt isolated from my roommates, even when they gathered for a party in a special day. Thus, on no account can we ignore the value of communication when we estate(?房地产？ 小生愚昧。。。如果没有用错的话麻烦给我留言说一下 哈哈）evaluate one's happiness.

In addition, mental mood is also another factor leading into unhappiness recently. When we are craving for the material world, simultaneously scantly do we pay attention to our mental world. Under these circumstances, easily can we get some odd diseases owing to having tremendous pressure and seldom releasing ourselves in a proper way. For instance, do you ever regard the house as the necessity for surviving? Renting it may be another solution. But, if you imitate your colleagues and not enough money supports you to possess one, you will be overwhelmed by this plan. Therefore, we cannot emphasis the importance of mental world.

When people deem it unfavorable to in the modern society, isn't it necessary that they should give some consideration to the advantages of it(把of it 去掉会更好）. We may enjoy the modern buildings, where we can still work in the summer day with the help of air-conditions. Also, modern medical techniques will save our lives, prolonging（感觉prolong这里用的不是很合适） and improving our living quality. Otherwise, it is vulnerable for us to be infected with disease.

Considerable though the benefits that living in the modern community enjoys are, they cannot compete with the disadvantages that pursuing a diversity world nowadays brings about, when communication and mental health are taken into consideration.结尾写的太棒了 让步段似乎感觉按正常模式应该是说人们也会对什么满意 但是这都是个人愚见。。。 写的真心不错 有的词汇大亮 加油O(∩_∩)O

qianjun06

7月18日
Do you agree or disagree,because the world is changing so quickly,people now are less happy and less satisfied than people in the past

In recent years, there is a public controversy on whether the modern life is much better than before. Those who agree with the notion demonstrate that advanced facilities are beneficial to daily issues, such as mobile phones and autos, which makes our life more convenient and magnificent. However, other people are not in favor of it. Contrary to the opinion of the former is my heartfelt agreement with the idea that people now are less happy and less satisfied than before.


To start with, there is no denying that nowadays people have less time to communicate with these families and friends. All of us are hurried in studying and working, so seldom do we have a picnic and share the feelings with our relatives. The less we communicate with our classmates or collaborators, the less harmonious the relationship between us will be. In the end, we will feel abandoned by our close friends. It provides a typical example of my own. I'm fully devoted to preparing the toefl examination. Sometimes I felt isolated from my roommates, even when they gathered for a party in a special day. Thus, on no account can we ignore the value of communication when we estate evaluate one's happiness.

In addition, mental mood is also another factor leading into unhappiness recently. When we are craving for the material world, simultaneously scantly do we pay attention to our mental world. Under these circumstances, easily can we get some odd diseases owing to having tremendous pressure and seldom releasing ourselves in a proper way. For instance, do you ever regard the house as the necessity for surviving? Renting it may be another solution. But, if you imitate your colleagues and not enough money supports you to possess one, you will be overwhelmed by this plan. Therefore, we cannot emphasis the importance of mental world.

When people deem it unfavorable to in the modern society, isn't it necessary that they should give some consideration to the advantages of it. We may enjoy the modern buildings, where we can still work in the summer day with the help of air-conditions. Also, modern medical techniques will save our lives, prolonging and improving our living quality. Otherwise, it is vulnerable for us to be infected with disease.

Considerable though the benefits that living in the modern community enjoys are, they cannot compete with the disadvantages that pursuing a diversity world nowadays brings about, when communication and mental health are taken into consideration.