yangyangyu练作文,求拍,求踢,求猛击

yangyangyu

好了，今儿开始练习作文吧！如题~ 加油加油加了个油！！！

kchszy061ban

Are you in great depression because your life doesn’t go on the way as you expected? Are you messing up for the lack of ability to calm down when encountering problems? Are you hurting your dreams by being impatient? Undoubtedly, patience is a good strategy. It is an essential trait of our personality, a necessity for success.

In this life, lots of things may not go accord with our intentions. So what to do with that? To be irritated and complain about everything or calm down to keep a positive attitude? Impatience will lead us to irritation, to anxiety, which makes no use to（solve） the problems, yet（instead） puts us in low spirits and hard times. Otherwise, to be patient, and calm down can we get down to work or even explore a better way to make a change(yangyang work a better way？make a change太中性化了呗，用个比较positive的词).

Moreover, “A beard well lathered is half shaved”, rashly digging into things without any preparation will in many times yield an unsatisfying result. Take overseas traveling for example. Without enough previous study of the journey destination, getting everything packaged and ready beforehand, it would be almost impossible for any traveler to really have a wonderful trip. One of my mother’s friends went to Nepal last year, but she just stayed there for one day, and hurried to buy a ticket back home. The reason is that this trip was made in haste, only until she arrived in Nepal, did she realize that it’s not the type she favored, and that the poverty, untidiness, harsh weather all made her feel sick. Thus, even though we are longing to go to somewhere for a visit, we still need to be patient enough to get things in order first.(this example is not rare,people may confront with similar problems which need patience as this one,therefore,patience is ……)

Last but not least, patience is a cherished power, a power that can support us to keep waiting and fighting for our dreams, to motivate us to never give up because a better（bright） future is always（去掉） ahead if we continue on. To study abroad is many Chinese students’ dreams, but some cannot bear the long period of time devoted to the preparation of language exams, selection of dream schools or even the seemed complicated application procedure, and gaive up in the midway. (这里来一个过渡句就好了)From many real stories, we can truly find that success belongs to those patient people who have the strong will to wait, to preserve, to endure the boring or even disheartening process.

"He that can have Patience, can have what he will.” Benjamin Franklin once said. Yes, it’s true, patience is a good strategy, a wisdom of life.

1 yangyang的主要意思one：不焦躁可以取得成功two：急于做某事容易产生不好的效果 three;耐心能让我们最终取得成功；

2yangyang的各部分处理的很好，分论点的准备可以把第二段放后面，这个是对文章中心是次要的了；

3然后，yangyang进步很多哈，不错不错。

kchszy061ban

yangyang 我也给你改下吧

qianjun06

6月20日110827 NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Patience is usually not a good strategy. We should take action now rather than later.  批改

Are you in great depression because your life doesn’t go on the way as you expected? Are you messing up for the lack of ability to calm down when encountering problems? Are you hurting your dreams by being impatient? Undoubtedly, patience is a good strategy. It is an essential trait of our personality, a necessity for success.

In this life, lots of things may not go accord with our intentions. So what to do with that? To be irritated and complain about everything or calm down to keep a positive attitude? Impatience will lead us to irritation, to anxiety, which makes no use to the problems, yet puts us in low spirits and hard times. Otherwise, to be patient, and calm down can we get down to work or even explore a better way to make a change.

Moreover, “A beard well lathered is half shaved”, rashly digging into things without any preparation will in many times yield an unsatisfying result. Take overseas traveling for example. Without enough previous study of the journey destination, getting everything packaged and ready beforehand, it would be almost impossible for any traveler to really have a wonderful trip. One of my mother’s friends went to Nepal last year, but she just stayed there for one day, and hurried to buy a ticket back home. The reason is that this trip was made in haste, .onlyOnly until she arrived in Nepal, did she realize that it’s not the type she favored even made her fell uncomfortable, including poverty ,untidiness,harsh weather. sick用的太过了，有恶心你的意思。 , and that the poverty, untidiness, harsh weather all made her feel sick. Thus, even though we are longing to go to somewhere for a visit, we still need to be patient enough to get things in order first.

Last but not least, patience is a cherished power, a power thatwhich或者重启一句 can support us to keep waiting and fighting for our dreams, to motivate us to never give up because a better future is always ahead. To study abroad is many Chinese students’ dreams, but some cannot bear the long period of time devoted to the preparation of language exams, selection of dream schools or even the seemed complicated application procedure, and gave up in the midway. From many real stories, we can truly find that success belongs to those patient people who have the strong wills to wait, to preserve, to endure the boring or even disheartening process.

"He that can have Patience, can have what he will.” Benjamin Franklin once said. Yes, it’s true,有点口语化 patience is a good strategy, a wisdom of life.

kchszy061ban

yangyang给我改作文额，嗯嗯，我的目前还没人改啊

yangyangyu

6月20日110827 NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Patience is usually not a good strategy. We should take action now rather than later.

Are you in great depression because your life doesn’t go on the way as you expected? Are you messing up for the lack of ability to calm down when encountering problems? Are you hurting your dreams by being impatient? Undoubtedly, patience is a good strategy. It is an essential trait of our personality, a necessity for success.

In this life, lots of things may not go accord with our intentions. So what to do with that? To be irritated and complain about everything or calm down to keep a positive attitude? Impatience will lead us to irritation, to anxiety, which makes no use to the problems, yet puts us in low spirits and hard times. Otherwise, to be patient, and calm down can we get down to work or even explore a better way to make a change.

Moreover, “A beard well lathered is half shaved”, rashly digging into things without any preparation will in many times yield an unsatisfying result. Take overseas traveling for example. Without enough previous study of the journey destination, getting everything packaged and ready beforehand, it would be almost impossible for any traveler to really have a wonderful trip. One of my mother’s friends went to Nepal last year, but she just stayed there for one day, and hurried to buy a ticket back home. The reason is that this trip was made in haste, only until she arrived in Nepal, did she realize that it’s not the type she favored, and that the poverty, untidiness, harsh weather all made her feel sick. Thus, even though we are longing to go to somewhere for a visit, we still need to be patient enough to get things in order first.

Last but not least, patience is a cherished power, a power that can support us to keep waiting and fighting for our dreams, to motivate us to never give up because a better future is always ahead. To study abroad is many Chinese students’ dreams, but some cannot bear the long period of time devoted to the preparation of language exams, selection of dream schools or even the seemed complicated application procedure, and gave up in the midway. From many real stories, we can truly find that success belongs to those patient people who have the strong will to wait, to preserve, to endure the boring or even disheartening process.

"He that can have Patience, can have what he will.” Benjamin Franklin once said. Yes, it’s true, patience is a good strategy, a wisdom of life.

DanielleZ

yangyang 你要偷懒了，，，，，，还有，看到有人背作文200 句子和35 好句，我就开始也背了。 你要不要背。想着不写下来怎么练习呢，yangyang，既然要考试toefl 就不要放松自己额。

-- by 会员 kchszy061ban (2012/6/17 22:12:22)

Banban，
之前你给我修改文章的时候，说过要背诵~我也决定试试看啊~嘿嘿~

kchszy061ban

yangyang你这篇写的太好了，

DanielleZ

Dear Yangyang，
1.第一段，写的非常不错。各种华丽的排比以及形容词，一下就把我震撼啦。哈哈~
2.后面三段，我看到banban同学给你分析的时候，也说过。例子说明的不时特别充分（像第三段的jogging，那个例子，我觉得可以再多说几句）。
3. 学到了好多词啊，好多词~灰常谢谢啦~

加油~

DanielleZ

After the whole exhaustingday exposing to a computer screen at office, immersing in the book sea atlibrary, “what to do for some rest?” arises in modern people’s mind. （写的非常精彩呢~）For some, a wonderful movie or a fantasticbook helps our brain to take a breath. I do agree that books and moviesare beneficial for relaxation at a certain degree, like comedies and funnybooks can bring us a lot of amusement. However, the assertion that watchingmovies or reading books is more effective than doing physical exercise needs asecond thought. And personally speaking, I think doing sports works better torelax, by clearing our head away from the daily work or study, by providing usa outlet to let go of our pressure and anxiety in a healthy way, and also doingexercise is not merely a way of relaxation, more importantly it is a positiveand lively attitude towards life.（第一段写的非常好，用了排比，以及形容词修饰，etc，学习了）

Working out in the gyms or doing sports in an openplayground, our head can totally free from the daily data, documentations orother kinds of desk jobs. Instead, we can focus on our own thoughts, the self. Theconcentration of the self, the listening to our heart, and the understanding ofour true wants, will calm us down, and keep us away from the outside tensionsand pressure. （好句子）Yoga, for example, is one of the exercisesfavored by many people. In its soft and quiet music, our thoughts flow, ourbody stretches and then we can get a rest both mentally and physically.

Unlike reading or watching movies, sports alwaysentail a participation of our whole body. The office or library life strainsour eyes and drains our mind. To read or watch movies, we also need to use oureyes and mind, which may do no good for a rest. By doing sports, we can have areal outlet to explicit our tension and meanwhile keep fit.（举个小例子会好一些）

What’s more, doing exercise is not merely a wayof relaxation, but a positive life attitude.（好句子~） Life lies inmovement. Every time, when I feel depressed, I’d like to go out jogging a bit. Itencourages me to keep moving on, to never give up on the way to（建议till） a final line. Sometimeswe feel hard for life and easily get disheartened that’s because we lack theambition and a belief for a better future which physical exercise could bring to us（建议加上）.Physical exercises offer us that positive attitude.

All in all, as these reasons shown above, I thinkit’s better to relax by doing physical exercise than reading a book or watchinga movie.