【写作小分队】prodliu 作文，欢迎拍砖啊，越多越好

prodliu

Recently, many newtechnological devices are released to public such as ipad and iphone and thatsurges many people to stay up late only to buy one. Well, sometimes, owing anewly released device could make a person fashion and looked different. But inmy opinion, there are some disadvantages in these technological devices, and Iprefer to own one until it is popular.
First of all, I just thinkthat we need to consider others’ opinions before buying something, cause peoplewho have used the device that you want to buy could give you some beneficialadvices, for example, they may tell you the characteristics, the performancesand the functions about the device that could help you to make a smartdecision. While in some cases, you may experience a situation that you buy adevice with a surge of impulsion and then are regretful for such a unwisedecision.
Moreover, some newly releaseddevices will appear flaws in design or function, and it is really inconvenientand annoying to sent device back for repairing. So, we had better wait to buyuntil some problems within the devices are tackled, in case we will not evolvedin troublesome. For instance, we could find some suggests on the Internet tosee evaluations made by other people and then decide whether to buy or not.
Admittedly, owning a newtechnological device when it becomes available could make your fashion, and youwill enjoy many advanced techniques, but it also needs you to take risks whileyou are enjoying some advantages of the device. Thus, it would better to buy adevice until it becomes popular.
Finally, some more attractiveapplications would be released during a period of time, so if you want to makefully use of the device, you need to control your curiosity and wait till moreinteresting applications are programed that make your life convenient.
To sum up, new technologicaldevices are pretty crucial and useful for people, they could release jobburden, make life amazing, and add more fun into daily life, but they stillcontain risks. So it is wise to buy as many people have one.

miss绿光

prod的作文好强悍！

Crystaljoy

修改
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is often not a good thing to move to a new city
or a new country because of the lost of old friends?

Living in the modern society, one has to have a（删除，network直接当做V）network even though he or she decides to live alone. In the meantime, migration has become a notable demographic feature. Some are reluctant to migrate, worrying about losing old friends.（没看出前三句是怎么联系起来的？）However, in the midst of all technological advances and complexity of interpersonal relationship, that concern is a bit too much (unnecessary). I contend that moving to a new city has nothing to do with the loss of old friends.

One needs only observe（need only observe/ only needs to observe要么是跟can一样的情态v无变形，要么是实意动词有变形）the multiple ways and cutting-edge infrastructure by which information is being communicated to understand why the national boundary or oceans can by no means hinder our relationship. (Through observing…will one understand…) Dating（back to） 500 years ago when oceans were still insuperable/insurmountable obstacles,people’s friendship was largely determined geographically. Yet the oceans have now becoming highways that significantly shrunk the world in a way that perpetuates one’s friendship with others even when he moves to a new continent. (怎么把ocean比作highway? 又不是ocean将人与人之间联系起来了啊)

Nowadays, the world is tightened in a way that has no precedent. The global has witnessed the rise of social networking online (online social networking 社交网络), which among many technological advances most directly transforms the way friendship is formed and maintained. People share links, dairies, and videos online, meet friends who share the common interests and chat live（make new acquaintances with people who share the common interests 不要说碰面了吧，跟后面physical不吻合）, a phenomenon that obviates the need to make friends physically and to be concentrated about losing old friends as a consequence of migration. Despite a distance of thousands of miles away, one could still readily keep in touch with friends.

Besides, more insight into friendship substantiates my point as well. In essence, friendship refers not merely to physical relationship. Alternatively, except for that friends talk, play and travel together, people care about each other spiritually, an element that accounts for truly valuable friendship. In this sense, moving to a new country could at most reduce people’s physical, not （我总觉得你这个句子重心是前面的reduce people’s physical interaction，然后which指代它了。要不逗号去掉用 rather than ？）spiritual interaction, which is not limited by space or time.

To sum up, I disagree with the statement that moving to live in a new country threatens our old friendship in terms of （歧义啊，可以理解成 friendship in terms of. 改成，considering） the advanced communication technologies and the nature of friendship.






第一个论点是讲交友方式和设备多样化？我看的有点不清不楚的，感觉ocean论据很奇怪。第二三比较清晰了。

真的是感悟颇深啊，写的很深刻。

daisyの小夢想

pro，我发现TPO12的综合我写过了，所以不重写了，等你写好我帮你改哈~

gre呀gre

101210 NAWhich do you prefer, finishing one projectbefore starting another or doing two or more projects at the same time?

Nowadays, some people are more inclined tobegin to deal with a project after finishing another, while others prefer toprocess more projects simultaneously. In my point of view, processing projectsone by one or handling several tasks at the same time depends on the attributeof projects, because choosing a proper method under a specific situation will yield twice the results withhalf effort.

On one hand, projects that are closelyrelated with each other could be done at the same time. For one thing, relativeprojects usually contain similar motif（用motif不太好，指的是文艺作品的主题，我觉得换成theme或者core吧？）. They either possess an identical mechanism or could be processedby the same method, so dealing with such projects can help you come across asame principle or theory for a better understanding of the issue and inspireyou to discover a convenient way to finish them. Take my own experience forexample. Once I was engaged in several accounting exams, and at the verybeginning, I was confused by so much professional terms. Later, when I made aconnection among them I found some identical characteristics and a general wayto memorize these terms. As a result, I got high scores in each subject.Furthermore, multitasking method can increase your working efficiency andeffectiveness, and save your time and energy from repetitive works.

On the other hand, doing just one projectat a time enables people concentrate on it and a better chance to finish itquickly. Confronted with the situation where everything is labeled “limited”, peoplehave to focus on time, human labor, resources etc. in order to finish tasks assoon as possible. In addition, people could deliver high-quality results bydoing just one project. Taking responsibility of several projects at the sametime means distracted attention, great pressure and tight schedule. Accordingto an experimental statistics, only the feeling of overburden will triggerpeople’s anxiety that will bring about the memory and initiative in decline. Inthis way, no matter how hard they try, high rate of mistakes are reported inthe group of people who are assigned more workload.

Too often we just follow the stereotyperules and are reluctant to change, especially when we confront with the issuesabove. What we need is to analyze the situation thoroughly and logically, andthen make a decision to choose the most appropriate method to process projects.


膜拜大神！写的太好了我实在是改不出什么了！求教大神的写作方法什么的！

prodliu

20091031
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is often not a good thing to move to a new city or a new country because of the lost of old friends?

Living in the modern society, one has to have a network even though he or she decides to live alone. In the meantime, migration has become a notable demographic feature. Some are reluctant to migrate, worrying about losing old friends. However, in the midst of all technological advances and complexity of interpersonal relationship, that concern is a bit too much. I contend that moving to a new city has nothing to do with the loss of old friends.

One needs only observe the multiple ways and cutting-edge infrastructure by which information is being communicated to understand why the national boundary or oceans can by no means hinder our relationship. Dating 500 years ago when oceans were still insuperable/insurmountable obstacles, people’s friendship was largely determined geographically. Yet the oceans have now becoming highways that significantly shrunk the world in a way that perpetuates one’s friendship with others even when he moves to a new continent.

Nowadays, the world is tightened in a way that has no precedent. The global has witnessed the rise of social networking online, which among many technological advances most directly transforms the way friendship is formed and maintained. People share links, dairies, and videos online, meet friends who share the common interests and chat live, a phenomenon that obviates the need to make friends physically and to be concentrated about losing old friends as a consequence of migration. Despite a distance of thousands of miles away, one could still readily keep in touch with friends.

Besides, more insight into friendship substantiates my point as well. In essence, friendship refers not merely to physical relationship. Alternatively, except for that friends talk, play and travel together, people care about each other spiritually, an element that accounts for truly valuable friendship. In this sense, moving to a new country could at most reduce people’s physical, not spiritual interaction, which is not limited by space or time.

To sum up, I disagree with the statement that moving to live in a new country threatens our old friendship in terms of the advanced communication technologies and the nature of friendship.

prodliu

马上要考了，写寂静的作文
101210 NA Which do you prefer, finishing one project before starting another or doing two or more projects at the same time?
Nowadays, some people are more inclined to begin to deal with a project after finishing another, while others prefer to process more projects simultaneously. In my point of view, processing projects one by one or handling several tasks at the same time depends on the attribute of projects, because choosing a proper method under a specific situation will yield twice the results with half effort.

On one hand, projects that are closely related with each other could be done at the same time. For one thing, relative projects usually contain similar motif. They either possess an identical mechanism or could be processed by the same method, so dealing with such projects can help you come across a same principle or theory for a better understanding of the issue and inspire you to discover a convenient way to finish them. Take my own experience for example. Once I was engaged in several accounting exams, and at the very beginning, I was confused by so much professional terms. Later, when I made a connection among them I found some identical characteristics and a general way to memorize these terms. As a result, I got high scores in each subject. Furthermore, multitasking method can increase your working efficiency and effectiveness, and save your time and energy from repetitive works.

On the other hand, doing just one project at a time enables people concentrate on it and a better chance to finish it quickly. Confronted with the situation where everything is labeled “limited”, people have to focus on time, human labor, resources etc. in order to finish tasks as soon as possible. In addition, people could deliver high-quality results by doing just one project. Taking responsibility of several projects at the same time means distracted attention, great pressure and tight schedule. According to an experimental statistics, only the feeling of overburden will trigger people’s anxiety that will bring about the memory and initiative in decline. In this way, no matter how hard they try, high rate of mistakes are reported in the group of people who are assigned more workload.

Too often we just follow the stereotype rules and are reluctant to change, especially when we confront with the issues above. What we need is to analyze the situation thoroughly and logically, and then make a decision to choose the most appropriate method to process projects.

prodliu

tpo8

TPO8
The speaker disagrees with the statement in the passage that some critics pointed out Chevalier distorted or concocted events in his memoir, instead, she thinks that the Chevalier's memoir is pretty accurate and reliable.

First of all, in the reading, critics mention that Chevalier's wealth came from a Swiss merchant, and actually, he was quite poor. So he must fabricate stories about his wealthy life. However, the lecturer states that the loan from merchant does not mean his poverty. Chevalier did spend a lot of money on parties and gambling, but he did that by selling his things, and sometimes it took several days to wait the money back, and that is the reason he borrowed money.

Moreover, critics challenge the accuracy about the content in the conversations with Voltaire. O n the contrary, the speaker believes that these contents are accurate. According to Chevalier, he wrote everything he could remember during the conversation, and many witnesses confirmed that he consulted notes when composing the memoir.

Furthermore, critics claimed that Chevalier escaped from the jail by bribing officers. Oppositely, the speaker contends that many his contemporary people in the jail had more powerful friends in social, they did not escape by bribing, how did Chevalier can escape by doing so? In addition, some old documents from the prison suggest that the ceilings in the jail were repaired after his escape. This evidence can prove the truth that he escaped from jail.

To sum up, the lecture totally disagrees with the views in the passage, and points out her opinions to support the accuracy of Chevalier’s memoir.

Crystaljoy

Tpo5 综合
In the passage, three theories are stated as likely explanations of the function of Chaco Canyon great houses. However, the lecturer claims that none of the theories is convincing, and points out flaws in each theory.

The first theory in the passage argues that these houses are built for residential purpose. However, the lecturer（deems that） the number of fire places contradicts the residential theory. Normally, if these huge houses can hold hundreds of people, there must have（been） many fire places for people to cook. But, even in one of the biggest houses, there are few fire places, thus this theory is unsupportable.

Another theory (in the reading) states that these great houses are used for a function of storing food. On the contrary, the lecturer argues that a place that had been used for storing food, would leave many traces of maize or maize containers, but in the region of Chaco Canyon, there is little(few可数) indicators about that.

The third theory demonstrates that the houses are used for ceremonial activities due to some broken pots in the excavation. In the lecture, some other materials such as large building tools are found near those pots, and this discovery suggests that these pots may just trashes discarded by workers after finishing their jobs.

To sum up, the contents narrated in the reading are totally jeopardized by the lecturer, and the professors have completely different opinions about the purposes of building these houses.

喵喵了个咪

改4月9日 110415 NA Which is more important: having more facilities or hiring more teachers?



Recently, there is a common phenomenon that many universities allot a majority of their financial budget to perfect facilities or purchase advanced equipment. Is this the way if should be?(是想说it should be吗？用if句尾应该加or not吧) I am not supportive of this idea, and as far as I am concerned, an increasing mount of budget should be allotted to teachers’ system.

In ancient China, an educator, a great thinker, and a social philosopher, Confucius once said that a teacher is who can propagate the doctrine，impart professional knowledge，and resolve doubts. His philosophies influenced many generations, and people usually regard his words as the truth. Pretty apparently, Confucius points out three characteristics of a teacher, and each attribute demonstrates a key factor, that is teachers will involve more communication with students. Presenting knowledge is not the only goal of a teacher. He or she usually guides students to reach the destination of the truth and find the solution to a question all by themselves. We all know that education is not complete with graduation, and people will face many issues to learn and resolve, if we only realize the truth but seldom possess the method, I do not think that we can handle them. From this point, facilities or equipment provide no more than some vivid pictures or videos, students cannot establish mind connections with them, and they indeed offers(offer主谓一致) helps during classes, but the vital part in study is teachers.(我觉得这段举的孔子的例子与论点应该重点论述老师可以与学生有更多的交流，文中的传播知识神马的就可以省略了，因为不能突出老师与设备之间的矛盾，显示老师更为重要。)

A grant building will sooner or later fade, but the feat left by those honorable teachers will not. Our students can be encouraged and stimulated by teachers they esteemed. Take my university for example. My college is founded by Premier Zhou. And every time I pass through a bust of him, I will(时态不对，用still比较好) remember what he have contributed to our nation, be moved by his dedication, and then make a resolution to contribute to society. However, those facilities cannot provide things like that.

Admittedly, we cannot ignore the important role of facilities. For instance, we can have a better understanding of a topic through a computer, which offers more information; and teachers may introduce a theory more generalized based(没有必要用被动) on some applications. But, I have to maintain that these useful equipment just play a role in assisting in course, our teachers are the main actors in this knowledge stage.(没有具体反驳这段比设备能让我们更好的理解topic，只是说teachers are the main actors没有论据。)

We cannot emphasize the importance of teachers too much, and it pays for schools, from elementary schools to universities, to pay more attention to the improvement of teachers’ abilities. Simultaneously, some functional facilities can be employed to help qualified teachers impart knowledge.(应该加强论点hiring more teachers,否则显得中心不明确了。)



除了一些小的语法错误，文笔很不错的。不愧是大神。

文章的逻辑和结构也比较缜密。除了最后一段有点瑕疵。

然后就是我觉得第三四段的论据不够充分，尤其是第四段的反驳论据，只是说了老师是主导的，并没用用具体的例子来反驳”we cannot ignore the important role of facilities.”

如果我哪里说得不对欢迎大神和我讨论~~