第一, 语法错误严重,显然是致命伤 第二,语气不够诚恳,你连人家学校的名字都没提,只是以This来代替,给人感觉很不屑一顾;I don't mind这种句式是以高高在上的姿态出现的,现在是你求人家录取你,不是人家求着你上学.... 第三,上来都没有写thank you for considering me as a candidate for the program.同学,where is your manner?
换我是adcom鼻子都被你气歪了,不ding你才怪。
下面是我收到和我回复的邮件。 I have already thought about this thing and I don't mind to travel 30 times over the 20 month program. This is an excellent program, it worths. I am willing to take the challenges. Best Regards, -----Original Message----- From: @mit.edu] Sent: To: Subject: MIT Executive MBA Program Thank you for expressing interest in MIT's Executive MBA Program. I would be happy to set up a time to learn more about your interest and to share information about the program. It appears that you live outside the US, so one thing for you to consider is the fact that the program will require you to come to the MIT campus 30 times over the 20 month program. If this is not a problem then I would be happy to talk with you. Let me know what you think. If the travel commitment of our Executive MBA is too much, you may want to consider our Sloan Fellows program, which is a one year full time executive MBA (http://mitsloan.mit.edu/fellows/) or MIT's Executive Education which offer executive management education in 2-5 day classes. http://mitsloan.mit.edu/execed -- by 会员 limingdaili (2012/2/26 10:20:37)
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