issue 57求拍~

又见紫风铃

57. The main benefit of the study of history is to dispel the illusion that people living now are
significantly different from people who lived in earlier times.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement
and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position,
you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how
these considerations shape your position.

Is dispelling the illusion that huge gaps exist between people who lived today and those who lived at any other time in history the main advantage of history researching, as the author maintains? In my view the speaker unfairly generalized. I agree with the statement insofar as many aspects, especially spirits, of people who live at any time of the history remain the same. Yet strictly followed, when it comes to the way to practice according to these same spirits, it varies a lot during the recorded history.

Admittedly, some spiritual things--motivations or wishes and problems--social irresolvable diseases stay unchanged even from ancient time. Dated back to the time of William Shakespeare, the perseverance of chasing love can be easily found when thousands of hundreds of individuals tore for the misery that Romeo and Juliet suffered. So it is now that young lovers or couples constantly dream of their perpetual love. Another example is the effort to exploring the covered mystery, such as Columbus investigating the new continent, which is similar with scientist exploring the space outside the earth. On the other hand, our foible or some social drawbacks like crime never be eradicated even until now. From this point of view, the research of history does break our illusion that there are significant differences between past and present. The unchanged virtue is to be reserved, while the problem is to be solved by us.

However, although most of the spirits remain the same, in many other aspects including our way to chase our goals or dreams changedquite a lot, so are the social problems. To learn new knowledge, for example, we can easily click the button on the screens by surfing the Internet for much more information that a shelf of books was able to contain years ago. If we still using the conventional methods such as seeking the book in the library, much of our time may be wasted. And there are much more problems in front of us as well. Nuclear threatening, environmental pollution, overpopulation and numerous other social problems are not to be encountered in the past. All of these indicate that great difference does exist, thus requiring us to promote the good change while contain changes towards bad endings.

Actually, the benefit of history does not confined to whether we know the consistence or difference between the past and the present, nor does it to break down any delusions. History, setting as a principle to study the development of human beings, serves as "a mirror for us to know our gains and losses" just as one of the famous emperor during Tang Dynasty in ancient China put it. That is to say, learning our future direction through not only similarity but also difference between the past and now is the main benefit of the study of history.

In final analysis, the speaker's assertion that history is used primarily to let people know that people in one period of time are not significantly different from people who lived in the earlier time does has its value to some degree. But as a whole we should learn from the history as long as it is instructive no matter it is different or the same with now.

jurat911

整片来讲，1,3段的论证值得去做模范。喜欢论证方法。。。up

jameszhm

值得鼓励~~难道你要我以身相许吗？

jeezhuo

版主~ 都过了12点了还来拍砖的精神是否值得嘉奖一下~ （别吐口水，俺不碰任何跟GRE有关的存天理灭人欲的东西很久了......）

除了第一句其他读起来都很顺畅。
除了最后倒数第二段其他的逻辑、顺承、说理和表达都近乎完美。

倒数第二段是提出自己的观点，但是除了“以史为镜”和后面一句话的解释，似乎没有更加翔实的论述。

jameszhm

楼主回应下我们的意见哈！！！！！~

普渡哥

不知道这种立场好不好，to some degree, but....

jameszhm

喜欢第3、4段，觉得说话很有逻辑性。而且给出的意见别人能够容易理解，角度也很不错，可以供大家学习。我觉得这篇作文很不错的。楼主是否看过issue 5.5？里面的一些论证方法我觉得不错，估计楼主学到家了。

大剑Jade

挺好的，两点意见。
第一，是上楼普度哥提到的那个问题，我就不再重复了。
第二，句式很复杂，很好，但是上来第一句就是一个大长句，让我上来一读就有点闷住的感觉，可能是我语法不好吧，呵呵。
其他论点，引文，结构，例子都很好。

-- by 会员 franciszmy (2012/2/21 21:18:08)

to dispel the illusion that people living now are
significantly different from people who lived in earlier times. 其实这个就是说not significantly different的。。LZ写的没错的。。

franciszmy

挺好的，两点意见。
第一，是上楼普度哥提到的那个问题，我就不再重复了。
第二，句式很复杂，很好，但是上来第一句就是一个大长句，让我上来一读就有点闷住的感觉，可能是我语法不好吧，呵呵。
其他论点，引文，结构，例子都很好。

李小含

楼主用词和结构上都不错~就是在内容上，我的想法和你有些差别。
i tend to believe that the study of history dispels the illusion that people living now are significantly different from people who lived in earlier time as the speaker claims.
but i cannot agree with the idea that it is the main benefit that study of history bings to us.
however之后我比较偏向于证明历史给人们带来的远不止题中指出的那么简单。
也就是说我会着重展开你actually后面的内容
仅供参考，楼主好棒~