第一次写的issue 求高人指点

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昨天发了一个抱怨贴没人理啊 今天就把这篇第一次磨了一个小时的作文贴出来
望求高人指点啊 写得有点烂 主要是废话多 实际又没什么主要思想  
5月20考啊 所有的东西都复习得一塌糊涂 特别是逻辑啊 感觉都想放弃了 不知道怎么办才好
黄金24 . “A powerful business leader has far more opportunity to influence the course of a community or a nation than does any government official.”
“一个有力的企业领导比一个政府官员有更多的机会影响一个社团或国家的方针。”

According to the statement above, whether a business leader has more opportunity to interfere the operating of a community and a country than the government official does is an intriguing problem which has drawn considerable argument recently. I agree with the author's assertion insofar as in some circumstances since it emphasis on the point that the authority of the business leaders is increasing as their conglomerates broadening in the recent years. However, the author unnecessarily extends the assertion broad to the extreme while neglecting the fact that the government officials play a pivotal role in the course of a nation. I will illustrate my point on the following analysis.

Undeniably, it is sagacious to admit that the business leaders' voice cannot be neglected by the government officials and the public because the economic progress has made tremendous contribution to the development of a nation. There are two compelling reasons to illustrate the assertion. For one thing, the business leaders master the direction and fortune of some essential corporations, which are detrimental to the economic development of a nation. Take the society of the United Statesfor instance. As it is known to all, the America politic is constituted by two large parties, and they are supported by some super conglomerates. As long as these companies' sponsored party became the administration party, now, the policies are always on behalf of these conglomerates which are grasped by the senior executive leaders. For another, the leaders have enough ability to persuade the public since the successful experience of these leaders. For example, if Bill Gates announced that the world economic would have a recession, it is hard for us to ignore the justification since Bill Gates' insight on the business and economic.

Nevertheless, in spite of the powerful influence of the business leader, we should not disregard the fact that the government officials always have absolute authority to guild the direction of a country and to regulate the process of a communityfor two reasons. On the one hand, the government official can formulate direct policy rather than indirect policy, the business leaders common practice. Compare to the business leaders who have to waste more resource or energy, such as large political funds, the government officials who can impose the public to accept their mind through the established regulations or legislations, On the other hand, the government official not only consider the economic of a nation, but also take other significant determinantshe Internet relationship, the citizens' life, the education, the military and so on into consideration. Therefore, it is more persuasive for the public to believe that the government officials can guild the country to a stable and harmony direction. All these facts demonstrate that the enormous influence of the government official cannot be supplanted by the business leader imprudently.

To sum up, basing my conclusion on the expositions mentioned above, I agree with the author that the business leader has the opportunity to influence the process of a country, after all, they control massive social resource and fortune. However, that is not to say that their influence can surpass the authority of the government officials who can regulate standards of the society. Consequently, if we hope to establish an equal and harmony environment, it is wise to strike a balance between the two power.

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