9月11号就考试了 作文很头疼 大虾能帮帮改改看看吗 第一次写 谢谢大家！~！！

hushuaiqi

In response to the problem, some people may argue that nowadays food has become easier to prepare improve the way people live. But is it? Close analysis does not bear out the argument.


First of all, it is always top of my viewpoints that easy-prepare food is anything but green and environment-friendly. As we all know this king food brings you headaches. It make with a myriad of additional. There is accident happen in china that many infants have the milk that buy in the market got some strange sick. From the up-to-date information show that the milk babies have has some forbidden factors. Also the packer the food literally is unfavorable to earth.


Moreover, cook will bring your a superb mood also provides adequate justification for my opinion. According to 100 studies carried out in 10 major cities throughout China, the more cook, the more happiness. “No one can deny the truth behind the number.” In this way, easy-prepare food take your cooking time. Cooking contribute to family communication indeed. When you are cooking family is in a team, and is conductive to each other. I remember cooking is one of exuberant actives in my family. Each of us answer for a dish and makes fun. We called it “family time”.


Admittedly, it may be true that easy-prepare food solve person who need cook for a long time per day. However, this alone does not provide sufficient support to claim that easy-prepare food improve the way people live. Actually, it is specific and weak to strengthen the point that cooking take a long time whereas forget to enjoy cooking.


All in all, although some people may still remain unconvinced, the reasons I have analyzed could at lease make them more aware of the various dimensions of issue under discussion. There is little doubt that more and more dwellers will come to realize that cook with your family is the best way to make food.
大概能拿多少分 谢谢了

hushuaiqi

自己顶下 希望大虾们能帮我提提意见 谢谢大家了~~~~

hushuaiqi

晕呀 都没人能帮忙看看嘛 哎~~~

jingqitao

楼主~我9.12 我作文也很晕
刚刚看完楼主作文 cook will bring your a superb mood also provides adequate justification for my opinion 里的also 不是连词 应该用and 且你用的时态有点问题 全改成一般现在是吧
总之里面有好多这样类似的错误 你自己翻译翻译看看中文前后句之间连不连贯 再看看多不多谓语什么的，还有标点符号
PS：我只会看 不会写  还有 楼主在看机经吗?貌似 要考的范围里没有这么一道题啊？

jingqitao

I have analyzed could at lease make them more aware of the various dimensions of issue under discussion. There is little doubt that more and more dwellers will come to realize that cook with your family is the best way to make food.

这两句完全有问题 楼主不要骂我哈 这样的作文很难得高分的 建议多改改 改多了就好了 还有时间 加油

hushuaiqi

啊 好多错误 多谢多谢 我没看机经 哪里有呢？ 我考过一次听力阅读就扣了一分 口语14 作文才18分 十分郁闷 我再多练练

hushuaiqi

口语24打错了。。。。

jingqitao

你阅读听力好牛啊 请教请教~~