issue 65 ,法律公正问题，小弟身板壮实，各位狠狠拍吧....

OliverZhou

According to the speaker, everyone in thesociety should obey just laws and disobey unjust laws. I agree insofar as laws can bring us justice and alsounfairness, however, there is no absolute difference between just laws andunjust laws, each of them sometimes can transform to its opposite whic  depends on thespecific situation. So, our obligation is not obey just laws or disobey unjustlaws, but  help the government to find  the defects and amend laws to achieve thegoal of  justice.
Without laws, we could  not imagine what the world will be. When youdrive a car on the road, if you do not obey the traffic laws, it would be highchance to cause an accident. Besides, without the laws for crime, many peoplewould prefer to rub the bank rather than lead a hard life with low salaries. Theyare just laws which protect us from being hurt and ensure the stability of thesociety. But there is also unfairness caused by laws, for example , in China,to control the population,  each familyare limited to own only one baby. Some people feel it is unfair to restrict their birth right。
In fact, we should realize that laws variesfrom time to time, from countries to countries. It means that laws are notperfect, they also need to be amended to adjust to different situation. Forexample, no one would approve the laws for homosexual marriage in the past asit had betrayed the moral rules of the society. But nowadays, more and morepeople begin to call for laws for homosexual marriage. In their views, the gaysneed to be treated with equality and they have the right to pursue  the happiness  and marry the one they love.
Laws also varies from different countriesto countries. Take Japan as an example, polygamy is forbidden in this countrybecause there is an imbalance between the males and females, and polygamyconflict with their calue system. While in most Arabic countries, polygamy is available for the local people whotreat it as a tradition, no one feel it  unjust. From these examples we cansee that the laws can be different with the change of time , tradition, orvalue systems.
No one can deny the fact that every law hasdefects, as they are enacted at a particular time with limited knowledge. Astime goes by, and with the  change of current society, laws are needed to be revised to suit different situations,and that is what we should do: to help the government achieve the goal ofjustice(后面写不下去了。。。)

OliverZhou

小弟我知道自己有以下不足： 1.词穷；2，句式单调；3，低级语法错误；

除此之外，我更想知道的是，这篇文章的结构这么安排是否合理，各论述层次联系是否紧密，我最担心的是若例子论述的过于详细，会有跑题的嫌疑么~

OliverZhou

GRE生涯issue 第一篇....

omilala

根据第一段，你的观点是：最重要的是要改进法律，以促进社会公平。然后后面的两段怎么找不出这个中心呢？

竹林中人

our obligation is not obey just laws or disobey unjustlaws, but  help the government to find  the defects and amend laws to achieve thegoal of  justice.这句话多少有点歧义，我觉得应该是在遵守任何法律的同时，努力改进不完善的法律。

竹林中人

第一篇Issue，都难免思路比较粗糙，我的意见是，写的时候，多注重分析原因过程等，比如法律的不完美是什么原因，而不仅仅是指出不完美在哪儿，因为你分析了原因，你才知道怎么去不断地完善。再就是，举例子的时候不要紧接着自己的论点，自己的分论点后面需要有一两句解释或者支持性质的话，否则你的观点是没有说服力的。
最后你有必要指出题目中存在的一个前提，那就是法律是可以被分为公平和不公平的，然后分析下这个前提的对与错。