11.14考托 求好心人帮我看一下大作文 没底啊 谢谢了！

xiao安24

随便找的一个题目写的：Do you agree or disagree with the following statement.

People will reduce the use of cars in 20 years

Nowadays,the usage of cars is as common as the usage of printed paper in our globe-village.The cars are used by people as a convient transport,which bring people from one place to another just in a short period of time.However,it has now drawn public attention to the issue that whether people will reduce car use in 20 years.From a personal perspective,I totally agree that the reduction of usage of cars will occur in 20 years,because of the protection of environment and the improvement of technology.

First and foremost,the protection of environment is an unavoidable factor in the reduction of usage of cars.It is no doubt that the tail gas produced by cars can lead to serious respiratory diseases.To take the idea further,the tail gas can also have destructive impact on the whole environment.Therefore,if the reduction of cars is actualized,the overall condition of the environment can be advanced,which result in the improvement of the standard of living and the people's mood.What is also worth noticing is that the development of the country can be boosted as well.Conclusively,the usage of cars will be reduced in 20 years,bacause of the environmental protection.

Furthermore,the improvement of technology plays an indispensable role in the reduction of usage of cars.It is an undeniable fact that the boosting improvement of technology makes the use of clearer resources avaliable,and these more environmental-friendly resouces are supposed to replace the resouces that we use today,such as fuels.Taking hydrogen as a typical instance,the hydrogen is discovered recent years to be a very clear resource,which releases zero percent of carbon dioxide during burning.Conclusively,the usage of cars will be reduced in 20 years,because of the advancement of technique.

Admittedly,it is difficult for vast majority of people to reduce the usage of cars suddenly.Because people continously treat cars as a first choice when they decide to go somewhere,this awareness has deeply rooted in everyone's mind.

As a consequence,judging from all the evidences offered,the reasons which supply the reduction of cars obviously outweight the opposite side.Therefore,at an individual level,I support the opinion of decrease of usage of cars.Hopefully,the future of our world can be flourishing.


谢谢了！

cuixl

我作文不牛啊，PS只看了两句。对这句提个意见The cars are used by people as a convient transport,which bring people from one place to another just in a short period of time.
The cars的the挤上怪怪的，by people不用写，be used as a convient transport这种说法很怪，另外这句话都是赘余的，完全不用写。
语法错误有点多，另外一定要注意的就是标点符号后要空格噢噢噢。