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Some people believe that students should be given one long vacation each year. Others believe that students should have several short vacations throughout the year. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.

As the increasing of technology and science, the ways of education is also variety. Take vacation for a example, which one is better between long vacation and short vacation? In my opion, students ought to be have a long vacation. Then they have enough time to have a relax with their tense nerve and enough time to prepare studying for next semester.

The schools are full of competivity among students. Everyone try to achieve a high grade, they have to spend more time and energy than other students. Most of students lack sleeping and chances to enjoy their own fun. If the vacation was so short, they just had time to have a sleep to recover their very tied body. Then they would feel studying is so dull and boring. They could never have interesting to keep confidence to defeat heavy homework. In fact, they should have many activities and parties in vacation. These activities not only relax their brain, but board their experience that maybe help their studing in next semester. They should get award for their hard work in whole year.

Every student have many subjects in a semester. If they didnot have enough time to prepare, they wouldnot accept so a great number of information for several teachers. They need time to review knowledge of last year and learn the subject outline of next year, in addition to collect relative questions from new books. What matter students is smart, they all need time to review past subject. Unlike computer, none could remember so much knowledge and never forget.

Although some people insist students would forget what they learn from last semester, if they had taken a long vacation. Or they barely review books and play computer games whole vacation. However, some continuely and short vacation would make students hardly to concentrate in studying.

Long vacation give enough time to prepare the next tense and busy semester. Taking into account of all these factors, we may reach the conclusion that long vacation is necessary to keep a exciting mood for next semester.

用词、语法错误较多，有些明显是笔误，希望考试时注意。以第一段为例：

As the increasing (development)of technology and science, the ways of education is also variety (also vary). Take vacation for a example, which one is better between long vacation and short vacation? In my opion,(opinion) students ought to be (it should be deleted)have a long vacation. Then they have enough time to have a relax with (relax, 注意relax是动词，名词形式是relaxation)their tense nerve and enough time (redundant)to prepare studying for next semester.

动词和名词的混用是我的老毛病了，多谢提醒。笔误也是，老大的评论真是一针见血呀

我改了一下，不知道毛病还多不多？

As the development of technology and science, the ways of education is also various. Take vacation for a example, which one is better between long vacation and short vacation? In my opinion, students ought to have a long vacation. Then they have enough time to relax their tense nerve and to prepare studying for next semester.

The schools are full of competition among students. Everyone try to achieve a high grade, they have to spend more time and energy than other students. Most of students lack sleeping and chances to enjoy their own fun. If the vacation were so short, they even should not have time to have a long sleep to recover their very tired body. Then they would feel studying is so dull and boring. They could never have interesting to keep confidence to defeat heavy homework. In fact, they should have many activities and parties in vacation. These activities not only relax their brain, but raise their experience that maybe help their studing in next semester. They should get award of a long vaction for their hard work in whole year.

Every student has many subjects in a semester. If they didnot have enough time to prepare, they wouldnot accept so a great number of information from several teachers. They need time to review knowledge of last year and learn the subject outline of next year, in addition to collect relative questions from new books. whatever students is so smart, they all need time to review past subjects. Unlike computer, nobody could remember so much knowledge and never forget.

Although some people insist students would forget what they learn from last semester, if they took a long vacation. Or they barely review books and play computer games during whole vacation. However, some continued and short vacation would make students hardly to concentrate in studying.

Long vacation give enough time to prepare the next tense and busy semester. Taking into account of all these factors, we may reach the conclusion that long vacation is necessary to keep an exciting mood for next semester.

还要再细心些，部分表达有中文痕迹。说得不对的地方请指出。

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